Hello: But Beautiful Simplicity! Your page says you're only 17! How can you be wondering who you could have become? That is something more appropriate to my age (52). So let me give you a word of unsolicited advice. Think well before you make decisions about the rest of your life. Some decisions can create cirucmstances that become chains. Don't paint yourself into a corner like I did. Don't lock yourself into a cage! Be particularly careful about who you marry and at what age (although these days most marriages seem to be disposable). Plan well before you have children. I hope you find your vocation and make it into your career. That way you will always be happy with your work. Best Wishes,
Anaya Roma

Posted: Aug 6, 2007

"Youth equipped with innocence...means life with no bounds", What a line!

This is a poem that reaches deep into the existential needs of what it means to be human. Great subject matter.

It is much too often that a poet chooses a great subject matter and then represents it's poorly, yet I find that not to be the case here.

Though there are weak points in the poem... I felt that the center lines, "What I could be... who I should become." were rather weak. I wonder if you could search your diction and bring out the emotion behind those questions. The last line I felt could have been stronger in the same since, I felt as though I was about to be puched with poetic greatness at the end, and then to my surprise was lightly patted.

Please do not regard my criticism as debunking the worth of this poem; for, it is one of the best I have seen here!

Sincerely,
SR2

Posted: Aug 26, 2007