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I wrote this when I found out one BOOKSIE family member, whose works I became a fan of, left the site. :-(
He loves free write--a prose. His thoughts are always deep and sensible.
He used to read and comment on my stuff even before I'd ask him to. I loved his comments. Those were always sincere.
Read on and voice out your comments. Thanks!^^
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Submitted: Jul 15, 2008 Reads: 64 Comments: 11 Likes: 4
I come to your home uninvited;
Door uncloses and windows open;
Queer silence welcomes my invasion;
I hear my voice echoes back to me.
* * *
I feel your spirit but not your soul;
Now your mind is close so is your heart;
Rendezvous of my sweet obsession,
Traces of visits are dusted off.
* * *
The likes of my heart’s passion are gone;
Pieces of treasure are gone with you;
I sneak around barren realm once more;
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Amazing work here, jadey. It's so tender and beautiful..it even made me sad thinking about people who have moved away, etc. I bet your friend would be honored that you wrote such a poem about him. :) ~ Susan
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
awww, that's so sweet. I'm sure the subject of the poem would be so happy to read this, if they ever get the chance...this is really really good. I loved it:P
Steph(:
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
hm, very good. i like this. i think this is my favorite poem!
very nicely done!
and would you please comment on my poems i just posted??
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
is he IRWIN honey? I think so...i honestly miss him very much...LOVELY poem for the kind soul...
Do read his poems in his voice in the link he has given...soothing just as ur poems are sweetheart...
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
A lovely poem with a loving meaning, a good poem for obviously a good poet :)
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
This is such a sweet poem, am sure he will be glad to read it....a lovely tribute indeed.
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
Its too bad when somebody you like and respects leaves. I hope he comes on on reads your poem. I'm sure he'd love that you thought of him.
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
That was a beautiful poem, Jadey.
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
Jadey, for some reason the first stanza reminded me of Alanis Morresette’s (sp?) 'Uninvited', this though wasn't the feelings nearer the end. Sorry your friend left, I know how it feels to miss friends here on Booksie. This though was a lovely poem, yours always are! :) ~ Nixie
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
Sad, but sweet.
I've had a few people leave here, whom I treasured as well. Hopefully to return someday, but I suppose we have to do what feels right.
Nice write.
Posted: Jul 18, 2008
This is so beautiful and sad.Im sorry that someone left from Booksie.But its nice you wrote a poem just for that person.And poem is wonderful.
:)
Posted: Jul 23, 2008
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