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Through the Haze

Poem By: Nessly305
Memoir


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Submitted: Nov 2, 2006    Reads: 174    Comments: 3    Likes: 0   


Being free is an illusion, just like everything and everyone.

Black is all i feel, this surely isnt fun.

Stuck in my own mind, knowing nothing.

Weak and powerless, but still always craving somthing.

I cant see into the future, and i cant remember the past.

Mind and heart as cold as a stone, i wonder how much long i can last.

Wishing the rain in my head would stop, so could see through the haze.

As my death draws nearer, i have certainly seen better days.

Only a few left to love, i have lost all will.

Showed you my pride and sympathy, but it was not for you to steal.

So i kindly ask for it back, as i tear away.

All this pain and misery i will happily repay, it will be this way......


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it was just ok I'm sure if you dig deeper more will be revealed!

Posted: Nov 16, 2006

Author Comment:

thx

Spell and grammar check would do you well.

- something, not somthing

- So I coud see through the haze, maybe?

- how much longer I can last, or how long I can last?

Nice theme, but your grammar is killing it! Hope this was helpful.

Posted: Nov 28, 2006

Author Comment:

thx

You have some powerful images here. Watch the cliches: "cold as a stone" "seen better days", etc.
I love the phrase "rain in my head".

Posted: Dec 6, 2006

Author Comment:

lol thx



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