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Memory of the River...

Poem By: raindown
Memoir


Barefoot children running along a path of sun dappled earth and rocks...We can smell the river getting closer, closer till-our excitement reaches its peak... View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 11, 2008    Reads: 153    Comments: 16    Likes: 8   


Memory of the River…

Barefoot children running along a path of

sun dappled earth and rocks,

flying by on the warm summer breeze…

We can smell the river getting closer, closer till-

Our excitement reaches its peak and we can keep our clothes on no more,

not wearing much to begin with.

We laugh as t-shirts, shorts, and flip-flops (at most),

go flying into the bushes to hang precariously upon birch tree snags and poison oak-

We discern not,

care not,

in the throughs of our sheer delight.

We are gypsy children-

Bred of our parents drunken camp nights, love children-

The best kind, always meant to be

or not to be…

but free.

That we are is all that matters to us-

We run naked into the river and don’t hesitate,

right in to the green river to scream and laugh in shock.

Everything is this extreme for us.

Our joys, our sorrows, fears and wonders,

Right now, right here.

Never a thought for tomorrow…

We swim like frogs, and those of us who don’t learn quickly.

We teach each other,

with a patience that belongs only to those

for whom time is of no essence or consequence

At all.

Soon the tingling of limbs fades into a pleasant numbness

Which tricks us into thinking we are warm now-

and have some how won a small victory over the river

Who would selfishly seek to keep us out and enjoy its roiling depths without us.

Lucky river, who gets to be here all the time.

Now it is the air out there that is really the villain, we must to stay in all day to avoid the end of the weightless freedom…

The sanctity of the womb of the river,

that can take an hour and stretch it so far,

and yet make it seem but a moment.

Just moments ago…

“Lets pretend there are sharks in the deep end,” I say,

“Don’t worry Ill rescue you, here grab this stick!”

“Float on your back like me!”

-Ops I went too far, I’ll have to swim all the way back now,

Under the water were mermaids, I see fish…

What’s that?! It looks like a snake, an eel?

We get out fast now, whew!

Capturing pollywogs in an empty beer can; how many can we fit in there, how many will survive?

Holding tree frogs-or rather them clinging all over us,

-One, two, three, four where’d that other one go?

Here it is under my arm, it tickles…

We laugh until one becomes still-

Why does one always do that?

We don’t believe in death yet,

So here well let you go,

Why won’t you hop away?

I’ll just put you here, on this big warm leaf

you’ll perk up when I'm not looking,

I know you will.

Why are you so dry and limp?

Not as slick and cool as you were when I found you?

It s not our fault you aren’t as invincible as us,

Anyways we have to dress now.

We don our sun-warmed rags scented with the smell that is this place-

Is that my other sandal?

Oh, no, it’s yours-

There’s mine over there, partly hidden by that rock.

A mothers’ call-

“ Its time to eat! Dinners ready you kids!”

Were coming!

We’re almost dressed,

my shirt is rolling up as I try to pull it down over my cold wet belly,

it’ll dry on me though, I’m in a hurry, I have to catch up!

Everyone else is dressed already and heading back to the camp.

I might miss something, what I don’t know…

But gypsy children must do everything together, everything.

“Theirs still sand on your hands, go wash it off in the river!”

We all inspect our hands for the offensive presence, “Yes me too!”

Bare foot children run along a familiar path,

Dappled by deep aging sunlight and shadows,

As evening seeps in…

Lets all go down to the river together,

Forever…

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Comments:

the writting is a little small, lol. But I was still able to read, haha. Really very good. I LOVED it. and I can't wait till you post more of your novel:)
Steph:)

Posted: Apr 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Sorry about the size I haven't had a chance to take a look at the page myself-I'll fix it:) I'm working on that next chapter tonight, I'm very close...Thanks bye the bye, happy to hear you enjoyed anyways:)

raindown :) this was a very delightful read, I absolutely loved it!!!!! are you new here? welcome if you are, my name is katie :)

Posted: Apr 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you air, yes I am new here.
Glad you loved it!

Reminds me of when I was a kid. It was a good jobg.

Posted: Apr 17, 2008

Author Comment:

That's exactly what it was meant to do, thanks:)

hi! ur depiction of nature is beautiful. i was flowing along with the narrative. good work. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks alot bubbly, glad you liked it ;)

Nice job cuz, totally reminds me when i was a kid, well even now as an adult being at the river with my kids now. Keep up the good work......told u i would read ur writhings......love ya cuz, bonnie

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey cuz, I'm so glad you got to read me ;) I'm always revisiting my past and working on the future~ it's the present that I'm focusing on now;) Happy you read me:) ~rain

Flash backs!!!!
I like your natural description. You should write more in the context of nature it suits you

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Maybe erotic nature...hmmm, thanks MT;)
I'll keep that in mind, ~rain

hey this poem looks good but i can't read it properly with the small text. If u could enlarge it and give me a buzz i'll pop back and read, thanx matt

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Is it really? I wonder if the format on my screen is bigger(smiling) Yes, I'll do that for you, sure* but you better reward me by telling me exactly what you think;) ASAP ~rain

Well I must say I love this poem, its much better in the larger text!! It really does give you the image of childhood, the long summer days spent in adventurous fun. For me that’s the mark of a good poem and poet; someone who can put images in your mind by the way they perfectly capture something in words. There’s so much fun and truth in this poem. I love the way they try to get one over the river, and the sense of free spirit is so strong in this. Is this a memory of your childhood? Ah, to be young and free and care-free again. Beautiful writing!!

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes, a memory...I-We, (me and my many cousins) were gypsy children...many of my memories are of huge camps filled with friends and family; long nights running around the camp while the adults sat by the fire cooking, (some of them drinking, while we were up to mischief...;)

We all loved nature and the freedom of the river, of the wilderness. As children we saw things so differently, everything okay-no matter, no worries. Wonderful curiosities everywhere...

When I go to the river now it's still one of the most beautiful places for me, except that childhood wonder is fleeting now;)

I wanted to catch it. Glad you agree;)

~rain

Oh I like the idea of this! I love the imagery of a ragtag group of children hanging out by the swimming hole in the summer. I liked all the details of clothes on bushes and the tadpoles, etc...I think it could make a really good short story. For a poem it was a bit long, but I liked the perspective and the tense of it. Now I want to find a swimming hole! ~Em

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

I almost did post this as a short story, I wanted the flow to read like a poem though...I wasn't sure which side of the fence it would land on at first. In the end I decided it was a long poem ;)...I didn't think many people would read it but they did, and I was glad(smiles*)!
It was a memory I had to write, it haunted me forever....I still run down to the river tearing at my t-shirt and laughing as I jump in...;) I love this poem, it is apart of me.
Glad I could share it with you!
~rain

So sweet....reminded me of all the mischiefs i did as a child...stealing mangoes from neighbours garden, climbing trees, chasing each other...

our team was known as 'monkey kids'....hee hee.e...

my sister was the leader...and i protected her always...
i miss her so much...

this is so sweet...sweeter than anything one can imagine...

Posted: Jul 12, 2008

Author Comment:

memories of my child hood are few and far between and I try to capture them when I can~precious jewels yes;)

Aw Rain, this was so lovely. I had quite a few memories come to me whilst reading this, one of being a kid and collecting frogs-born (sp?) with my friends from the river by the house I grew up in, and another from living by the lake in New Zealand a while back. We would sit by the water everyday and go swimming without a care! *Sigh* This was a magical read, kids should live days like these, no worries, playing happily, only caring for laughter and a little sun! I know I will be back to read this again, I really love this one Rain!! :) ~ Nixie

Posted: Aug 4, 2008

Author Comment:

I love this one too, it is and always will be apart of who I am, my childhood* memories...one of the sweet ones;) Thanx so much for loving it too, ~rain

just behind my home . there's a small wood , in the middle of that wood . lies a gypsy site , it has been there so many years . some gypsies have returned to this site over and over , i especially love the horse drawn caravan homes with oval roof's , brightly decorated and spotlessly clean . i've seen the people at play , your poem brought it all back , i have'nt had a walk around that area for so long , i don't want the folk to think i'm a snob . i'll go today .
thanks gorgeous .

Posted: Aug 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Ooh terry that's fascinating!! Truely, you are so interesting...your comments are good reads in themselves!! Love the descriptions and everything;) ~rain
Go there terry and tell me how it went;)

i did pop along to the small wood . the gypsy camp is just as i remembered it , full of colour and spotlessly clean , it stands right in the middle of a small clearing in the wood , the people have built a barn like structure there now , that was the only change i really saw . the barn is like a community centre i think , they hold dances and just generally have a good time there i believe . i bumped into a chap i used to play soccer with a few years ago . he invited me in for a cup of tea , he took great pride in introducing his wife to me , a true romany , he said , i don't know too much about romanies but she was a bit gorgeous . so pleased i went , the people are just as friendly now as they ever were . thankyou for bringing back such wonderful memories .

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

I just read a book based on the Romany people, it was so romantic(you know me). It talked alot about the caravans and the life of the Rom; I was fascinated the whole time~ Thank you terry for indulging me ;) with your story, and the picture~
~rain

Ah nostalgia ain't what it used to be....
This is a lovely sepia memory to hold in the pages of your book

Posted: Aug 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes, it is a lovely memory~ Thank you Ken!
The memory is ingrained in the fabric of my being and soul.~ The sepia long since blurred and absorbed into the pores of my heart. ;)
~rain

I love the description of this piece..i'm a detail kind of person hehe! so writing keeps me more entertained when it adds detail even for the smallest things. Great job..I enjoyed this read :)

Posted: Sep 13, 2008

Author Comment:

I was just talking about my detail orientation...I can go into great and long detail...here I liked it, it was appropriate. Thanks for that~glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading ConcreteAngel, ~rain

Yes, good poem, well composed and with the words you take us there along with you like invisble guests.

Posted: Sep 14, 2008

Author Comment:

I must say at first I was a little worried about the length~but it has proved to be worth the long walk...smiles* this is one that meant alot to me~thanks dadio! ~rain



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