That’s how the wedding announcement read in the Peabody Times; all I know is that she looked beautiful. An angel awaited me at the altar.

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One chapter from a memoir I am writing for my father. I guess it's a biography, but written in the first person. That would be an autobiography then, but written by someone else. Anyways, hope you enjoy. View table of contents...
Submitted: Sep 6, 2008 Reads: 69 Comments: 15 Likes: 10
That’s how the wedding announcement read in the Peabody Times; all I know is that she looked beautiful. An angel awaited me at the altar.
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Awww, Ted.
This is beautiful. Very sweet of you to do this in tribute of your father!
As I've said before, I'm very sorry for your loss. I can see that he still lives in your heart and soul!
Keep up the good work!
MA
Posted: Sep 6, 2008
*Shakes head*
I'm such a silly-person here lately. My mind has been everywhere. An honest mistake, I know. I do remember it being your mother having passed. And I know that your father is honored to have you write this for him.
MA
Posted: Sep 6, 2008
Hi Ted... I think this reads more like a good prologue to your memoir rather than a chapter but that's just my opinion as I don't know at what point in your dad's life your memoir is actually beginning. It sounds like he feels his life really 'began' when he married your mom!!
A sweet beginning.....Jerry
Posted: Sep 7, 2008
the last paragraph made me so sad. it's one of those writings that just hits you at the end and leaves you with something. you did a great job with this.
Posted: Sep 7, 2008
Ted you wrote this beautifully :)
I very much enjoyed reading
~katie
Posted: Sep 7, 2008
Good to see you back writing - a busy day in progress so I have downloaded to read later. Will be back some time!!
Posted: Sep 7, 2008
Ted, this is beautifully written. It is an endearing story but I particularly like the way you structured it. Beginning with the newspaper article, which I thought was a lovely way to start, and continuing with the statement "I have known my wife longer than she has known me" just made me want to keep reading. I wanted to see how they got to that day, and exactly what that sentence meant. And then at the end, when you repeated it after revealing her Alzheimer's disease, well it was heart-wrenching and beautiful.
And I agree with Jerry. I think this would be a terrific prologue. After this, who wouldn't want to read the rest of the book?
It's a wonderful thing you're doing for your dad. Thanks for sharing it. Sheryl
Posted: Sep 7, 2008
Great story, Ted! Full of emotion. You have written this beautifully. This is extremely good. Will you be continuing it?
Posted: Sep 7, 2008
Oh yes, I enjoyed this IMMENSELY! I have often pondered the same thing - writing a memoir from a wedding "news" item in a paper. I applaud the sentiments. Memoirs and writing about the lives of people we love for other people we love is simply the most rewarding, fruitful form of writing. You did this so beautifully in the 1st person but from your father's point of view. It is a very touching blend of togetherness, happiness and a little sadness. keep writing Ted, you have the gift.
Posted: Sep 7, 2008
Hi Ted, this is beautiful. And such a tribute ( if I can put it that way ) you've got a great gift of words. Love is something that never ends. Beautiful
Posted: Sep 9, 2008
Really heartwarming Ted, a beautiful tribute to both of your parents. I look forward to seeing it up on the Net as part of your family history site, hint, hint.
Susan
Posted: Sep 9, 2008
yes you are very right it's better to have loved for awhile than to have not loved at all. wow! wait wow! i know this isn't going to make sense to you but you remindind me that just made my day. It's absolutely right, that line. oh my gosh. I need to stop being upset over... Omygosh! I so get it now.
Posted: Sep 9, 2008
What an intersting turn at the end. Loved every word or it, great read Ted! ~ Nixie
Posted: Sep 12, 2008
Absolutely beautiful!! I can so relate to your thoughts and the events that took place in the lives of your parents. Reading this brought a tear to my eyes because my parents recently moved into an assisted living center. While cleaning out their stuff in the old house, I ran across the love letters written from one parent to the other. Everything is just so surreal (not sure I spelled that correctly). You have done a magnificent job of capturing the love felt by your parents toward one another. Excellent work!
Posted: Sep 12, 2008
This wonderful work is definitely more than your average memoir. Indeed, if you do follow Jerry's suggestion to have this as a prologue, this may turn out to be a popular work. What am i saying? It's already popular.
It is not without flaw, however, for the grammar and punctuation need a little work, if you don't mind me saying (even if you do mind). I find the paragraph that ends with the teaser about your dad's second brush with death most intriguing -- I'll have to read the book. However, (IMHO) you need a full stop (period .) after "bullet" and a comma after "however".
I do hope you don't mind my pointed criticism. It is offered in the spirit of the brotherhood of the pen. And i'm sure you'll find someone more versed than I am in the art of English prose . . . to run this by before publication.
By the by, I have a similar story about meeting my wife long before we dated; although we were not related and from different continents. That one is, as yet, unwritten. Perhaps one of my daughters will help us, memoir-wise, in future. The power of love never ceases to amaze.
Your parents' story truly touched me, as it has and will touch countless others.
All the best...
craaig
Posted: Sep 17, 2008
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