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The Underworld

Script By: Cabe
Mystery and Crime


A script/screenplay for a mobster movie. More will be added as it is written. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 18, 2008    Reads: 54    Comments: 5    Likes: 2   


Scene One
Downtown New York City
22nd October, 2007
Parish Corner Store
Jack Potts, an older man of around 50 years of age, accompanied by two men dressed in dark black, walk calmly into Parish Corner Store, where the owner; Derek Parish, stands behind the counter talking to his wife, Larissa.
Jack approached the counter while his two accomplices look around the shop; one eats some food off a shelf, the other grabs a beer from the fridge.
JACK
It’s that time again, Parish.
Derek whispers in Larissa’s ear. Larissa quickly proceeds behind a curtain located behind the counter, where she ushers her two young children, a boy and a girl, upstairs to their apartment.
Derek proceeds over to the cash register and withdraws some bills from it, totaling to three hundred and fifty dollars. Derek passes the money over to Jack who counts it quickly.
JACK
You know, Parish, when I ask for five hundred dollars a fortnight, not a very big amount, but when I do ask for it, I expect to receive the five hundred dollars.
DEREK
I-I’m sorry, Jack. Business has been slow this week. Not much money coming in.
Jack’s two accomplices approach the front counter from behind Jack.
JACK
Did I ask for excuses, Parish? Did I?
One of Jack’s thugs, Ridello, a big bulky man, smashes a stand containing snacks and lollies to the ground.
RIDELLO
Answer him, faggot!
DEREK
No, Jack. You didn’t ask for excuses.
As Jack puts the money in his jacket pocket, a silver gun is seen holstered on the inside of his jacket. At its sight, Derek flinches. Ridello slowly makes his way behind the counter and approaches Derek, while the second thug goes to the front door and locks it.
JACK
You need to be shown what happens when you fall through for a business partner, Derek.
Ridello pushes Derek forward into the front counter, his ribs cracking as he does so. Derek wails in agony as Ridello smashes Derek’s face onto the counter and holds out Derek’s right arm, his fingers spread across the counter.
JACK
Give me your knife, Gore.
The second thug, Gore, walks over and gives Jack his pocket knife. Jack takes it and then flicks it open. He holds the knife over Derek’s fingers.
JACK
I’m sorry about this, Derek, really I am.
DEREK
P-Please! Don’t do it!
Jack stabs the knife into the center of Derek’s hand. Derek screams as blood is spilled over the counter. Ridello continues to hold Derek against the counter as Jack makes a deep cut into Derek’s index finger.
Larissa comes down the stairs and sees what is happening, and quickly retreats upstairs, picking up the phone and dialing 911.
OPERATOR
911, what is your emergency?
LARISSA
There are men robbing our store…
Back downstairs, Jack finishes severing Derek’s index finger. Ridello releases Derek who slumps to the floor in pain. Gore continues looking out the front door, while Jack wipes the blood off the knife.
JACK
Next fortnight, I want one thousand, Derek, do you understand?
Derek continues whimpering, clutching his bleeding hand.
RIDELLO
He asked you a question, motherfucker!
DEREK
I understand!
Jack smiles, nodding towards the door as Gore and Ridello exit the corner shop.
JACK
See you around, Derek. You might want to put some ice on that.

Jack, Gore and Ridello get inside a large black humvee and drive off down the street, Jack’s cackling being heard all the while.

Scene Two
New York Police Department
23rd October, 2007
Officer Nicholas Harp, a young man of 23, is sitting at his desk taking 911 calls. After finishing a call, he places his head on the desk and closes his eyes. Unlike most of the other cops in the station, Harp is wearing regular clothing. Dark jeans with a brown button-up shirt and a leather jacket. His partner, Luke Davies, comes over with a smile on his face. He too, wears other clothing – jeans, white shirt and brown jacket.
DAVIES
Harp, get your ass up, we’re doing street today.
HARP
Fuck street. You’re likely to get shot while you getting shot.
DAVIES
Well, life’s a bitch. C’mon.
The pair leave the station and start walking down the street.
HARP
You ever feel like no matter what you do, nothing changes?
DAVIES
What’s with this philosophy shit, Nick? You been hitting the bottle again?
HARP
I’m sober. Two months now. You?
DAVIES
Cleaner than Dettol. I don’t do drugs anymore, Nick. I’m clean and living healthy.
Davies reaches into his pocket and pulls out a cigarette. He lights it and inhales deeply. As Davies exhales he smiles.
HARP
Yeah, real healthy, Luke. That shit kills you. Haven’t you seen the commercials?
DAVIES
No, actually. It seems very time they come on TV I have a spontaneous spasm in my arm holding the remote which forces me to change the channel. I think I might need to see a doctor about that.
HARP
Yeah, you do that. While you’re at it get him to scrap the tar that’s solidified in your lungs, will ya?
Davies looks down at his cigarette and feels disgusted. He flicks the cigarette away.
DAVIES
You already ruined porn for me, why you gotta ruin this?
HARP
Shut up. Car thief three o’clock.
DAVIES
Have you heard of this thing called police brutality?
HARP
Never heard of it.
The pair laugh and bolt across the street where a man is trying to unlock a Mazda MX-5 with a bent coat hanger.
DAVIES
Oi! Prick!
The thief sees the pair, drops the coat hanger and runs away, down the street. Harp and Davies give chase, rushing through the crowd. The thief turns a corner and runs down an alley. Harp and Davies follow.
HARP
What is it with crooks and alleys?
DAVIES
I think that they think there’s some sort of magical escape route down it…
The thief comes to the brick side of a building and stops. He hits his hands against the wall in frustration.
DAVIES
…when all they find is a dead end.
Harp and Davies approach the man who pulls out a small blade from his pocket. He holds it out in front of him, trying to ward the pair off. Davies and Harp look scared and take a few steps back, shaking quite a lot. They turn and look at each other and laugh.
HARP
What are you gonna do with that? File our nails?
THIEF
C’mon! Try something, pig!
DAVIES
Dickhead…
Davies walks forward and with one quick motion grabs the thief’s arm and twists it around. The thief screams as his wrist breaks. As Davies strips the knife from the thief’s hand, Harp walks up and pulls out the thief’s wallet from his jacket pocket. He opens it up and has a look inside.
HARP
Jimmy Teller. Age 26. Wallet contains…one hundred and two dollars. Strike that, wallet contained one hundred and two dollars.
Harp pockets the money and puts the wallet back in the pocket of Jimmy.
DAVIES
What’s wrong with a life of working for money, Jimmy?
JIMMY
What? You just took my money!
Davies looks over to Harp with a confused look on his face.
DAVIES
What’s he talking about, Nick?
HARP
I haven’t the slightest, Luke.
DAVIES
Me neither.
Davies punches Jimmy hard in the stomach. Jimmy falls to the ground and Davies kicks him in the stomach while Harp kicks his sides hard. After several more assaults, Jimmy is bloody and bruised. Harp and Davies pick him up and drag him off.


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Comments:

I liked the way you portrayed your characters and used scene directions. I could "see" what was going on and it was pretty believable. I can't wait to read what happens next. I'd also like to find out how Jack and Derek's relationship started.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Cool, thanks. The start of Jack and Derek's relationship will be shown in a scene in the near future. Thanks for the comment. I'll let you know when more is added.

awesome! Please tell me when you have more

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Author Comment:

righto. i haven't actually thought about the next scene in this one. lol

hi! cabe. this is such a realistic and chilling portrayal of mobsters. and a scene enacted everyday somewhere in america. u seem to be in the know of things. good work. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jun 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for the comment. Mobsters and people of the sort are being portrayed more and more realistically in movies lately (The Departed, American Gangster) and this is probably what it really is like.

I loved the script!PLease write more.Recently I started to like mobstars,crime,mafia,and all things related. This script is real. It shows readers what really happens instead of the so many steriotipical mafia shows and movies.

Posted: Sep 6, 2008

Well done. I am writing my first script. Would you read it? It is a tale of how a popular song from the 80's delivers justice from the grave and offers two people a chance at redemption. Thanks

Posted: Oct 27, 2008



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