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In some parts of India,girl child is still considered a burden and even the highly educated mass of the society are engaged in the homicide of girl childs who are mercilessly killed. Kaveri cannot come everytime to get justice for several unexplained deaths of girl childs. We have to find a Kaveri within ourselves to stop this act forever by educating our sons. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 4, 2008    Reads: 177    Comments: 24    Likes: 10   


Kaveri

That was the night when the wind was blowing really hard and there was no electricity in our campus.

My husband, Sanjeev, who is an Anaesthesiologist, was on-call duty that night. He came back home at around 7.00pm and said, “Today there was a fire in a marriage hall near city centre. According to officials, the number of deceased has exceeded 200. But I am sure it is more than 500. Hospital entrance is full of burnt corpse, heart rending cries of relatives of deceased. So many dead bodies could not be identified. I have to hurry back quickly and report to the triage room."
I was shocked to hear that piece of news and hurried back to kitchen to serve him dinner. In the dim candlelight, we had our dinner and I went to living room to help my maid, Arti, feed our 2 year old kid, Krish. He was unusually irritable today since there was no electricity and also Sanjib had no time to play with him as he used to do everyday. So, I decided to take him to roof top for fresh air as he could play his favourite foot ball. And so, we both took a lantern and went up.
When Sanjeev was getting ready to come out of the home, his pager bleeped. He went inside home again to answer the call. It was his colleague, Saajan, who wanted him to report in the Operating room 5 (OR 5) immediately. A 7 year old girl was posted in OT for burn debridement and resuscitation.
Sanjeev rushed out immediately. He decided to take a short cut through the paediatric ward on 3rd floor since none of the elevators were working due to power cut. Except the main corridors, rest all corridors were pitch dark.Sanjeev had taken this route for the first time today and he was almost running thinking about the young patient and mentally getting ready for starting the operation as soon as he steps inside the OT.
Suddenly, he stumbled over some form in a dark corridor and he focussed his torch towards the obstacle. There, she was, a beautiful young girl, sobbing quietly. She was sitting with her back supported on the wall and a tiny lifeless form on her lap. She must be around 7-8 years old. When she looked up, Sanjeev could see that her eyes were swollen and now she started sobbing even harder. Sanjeev bent down and asked her, “What is the matter? What are you doing in this darkness? Where are your parents? Is anything the matter? Can I help you in any way? Please tell me.”
“No, uncle, it is okay. Now, nobody can help us. This is my baby sister and she is dead. Will you believe me if I say that my father burnt her by pouring hot kerosene on her? The reason being he did not want a baby girl and when he came to know that mother has delivered a baby girl again, he burnt her. Uncle, my sister was only 1 day old.”
She started crying loudly now .Sanjeev sat down next to her and took a closer look at the dead baby. The baby was badly burnt and was wrapped in a torn cloth.
Sanjeev’s head started reeling with the sight of a tiny creature burnt so badly. How could a father do such a ghastly act? He did not know what to do or what to say to the sobbing girl. Suddenly, he thought about the emergency case and he jumped from the floor and asked the young girl to accompany him.
She asked, “Where am I supposed to go?”
“Do not worry; I will take you to the Paediatric ward. My friend will take care of you until I come back. Okay? You need to have some food and rest. We will think about what to do next tomorrow morning.”
“Uncle, nobody will listen to you.” She sighed.
“What makes you think so?” Sanjeev asked, anxious now to hurry back to operating room.
“My father is the younger brother of the Director of this hospital.”
“What?” Sanjeev’s eyes popped out.
“Can you please take me to your mother? Where is she?”
“I don’t know uncle.Mama did not talk to me when I went inside after the baby arrived. She sat motionless, staring outside the window.” she again started sobbing harder now.
“Oh, God! C’mon, sweetheart. Don’t worry, we will surely find her. Tonight you take rest in the Paediatric ward. On the way to the ward, you tell me what happened in detail. Okay?”

“Ok!” and she started talking, pausing in between to suppress her tears. “My name is Kaveri and we live in Bangalore. I study in fourth grade. I was my Mom’s darling but Dad never liked me. He would always ask Mom to keep me away from him. I could never figure out why.When Mom had told me that very soon wewould get a baby at home, I was so happy. One week back we came here for the marriage function of my favourite aunty, my Mom’s youngest sister and day before yesterday, in the evening, Mom had severe pain and Dad rushed her to this hospital where Mom delivered a cute baby girl yesterday morning.When I was brought to my Mom, I could hear Dad shouting badlt at Mama. Then, Dad hurried out of the room with my baby sister in his hands. I kept on asking Mom what happened. She did not answer and sat there like a stone. Then the lady in white dress came and took her away somewhere.”

“Uncle, I could not do anything. I could not save my sister. I could not save my Mom.” She started shaking like a leaf.

“I was taken by those ladies in white uniform to a room where they gave me biscuits and milk. I asked them what is happening. Nobody answered me. I slept there on the cot. Today morning, I was woken up by my Dad. He asked me if I want to see my baby sister and Mom.”
“I jumped with joy and hopped behind him like a rabbit. I was going to see my baby sister and Mom. Whatever happened yesterday was a nightmare. When we reached the marriage hall, where my aunty was getting married, I asked Dad where is Mom. He kept quiet and looked at me sharply. I was scared to see his face. I had never seen him so angry, before. I was wondering, what I did do to make him so angry?”
“He took me upstairs near a small room and asked me to change into a nice dress. Once I stepped inside, he closed the door behind me. I was scared. He had locked me inside a small room with no windows.”

“I screamed at the top of my lungs. Nobody heard me. I did not know what to do? I was suffocating there. Suddenly, I noticed that the room was getting filled up with dark smoke from below the door. I crawled under the old cot kept in one corner, out of fear. Suddenly, I felt something under my feet. I dragged the bundle towards me.”

Her voice choked and she could not speak. Horror was clearly written all over her face.
Sanjeev gave him water from his bottle and asked her to keep it with her.
“Then, what happened? Was that bundle your dead baby sister? How did you know that your father killed her?” Sanjeev started having this strange feeling inside his gut.
“Yes, uncle, that bundle was my dead sister.” She sighed and looked pale and white.
“The room was now full of smoke and I could not breathe and then I don’t know what happened. I fainted. The next thing I knew when I woke up was that I felt lighter and I was in front of my father. He was talking to his cousin. He did not notice me. I don’t know why. He was telling him how he burnt my sister, how he killed me and how he has planned to kill Mom as well. He said he had made arrangements to have her killed in the ward itself. Save my Mom, uncle. Save that poor creature from my evil Dad.”
Sanjeev’s face became white and he could not turn back to look at the girl with whom he has been talking since past 10 minutes. She was dead. She was a ghost. She had come back to save her Mom and get justice for her and her sister’s death.
When he turned back, she was gone. He did not know what to do and in shock he dropped the dead baby which he was carrying so long, and ran towards the operating room. When he reached OR 5, he was gasping for breath. Nurse Alice was surprised to see him like that and offered him a glass of water. Sanjeev asked her about the case in OR 5. Alice looked even more surprised and said, “Doc, are you alright? Don’t you remember that OR 5 has been closed since today morning because of the septic case which was brought to the OR for burn debridement? It was a 7 year old girl named Kaveri, the daughter of our Director’s brother. So sad, Sir, she was such a cute girl. Her face still had that innocence even after death. She died on table. We could not resuscitate her. I was posted in that OR today morning and Dr Saajan was the Anaesthesiologist.”
Sanjeev’s face became white and rushed to OR 8 where Saajan was posted for another debridement case. When Saajan looked at Sanjeev’s pale face, he asked, “What happened to you? Are you not supposed to report to the triage room?”
“But you paged me to report to OR 5, 10 min back.”
“No, I did not. OR 5 is closed for fumigation.”
“Yes, Alice just told me everything now.”

“Sanjeev, what is wrong with you? Why are you shaking like a leaf? What is the matter? Will you please tell me what has happened?" Saajan looked concerned.
Sanjeev was in no position to report to the triage room. Saajan asked head nurse Dorothy to page the stand-by call to replace Sanjeev. He then asked the ward boys to take Sanjeev to Doctors’ rest room and instructed Alice to sedate him so that he sleeps off.
Next day morning, when Sanjeev opened his eyes, Saajan was right there beside his bed.
Sanjeev told him everything in detail and they both rushed to the Maternity ward.
On reaching there, they searched for Director’s brother’s wife. She was indeed admitted there day before yesterday. But, alas! She committed suicide that day morning by hanging herself from the tree outside the ward.
Her suicide note read –
“I am responsible for my death. My husband killed my daughters because he wanted a baby boy. Please punish him so hard that never ever any family member will kill their daughters. Why should I live when my sweethearts are no more? They need me. I have to go. Kaveri is calling me. See, she is running towards me with open arms! I am coming, I am coming ...”
Kaveri’s father was arrested immediately on charges of homicide. The dead body of the baby girl was also found near the Paediatric ward. How it reached there from the marriage hall was everybody’s question.
Saajan asked Sanjeev not to reveal anything about previous night to anybody. Nobody will believe him and the Police will harass him. Plus what was the proof that he did meet Kaveri.

Sanjeev came back home with so many questions unanswered in his mind and this is certainly one incident he will never forget in his life, for sure.

Fumigation: Disinfecting an area or an operating room with formaldehyde gas after a septic case has been admitted or posted for surgery there, to control the spread of micro-organisms from the septic case to an uninfected wound.
Triage:The practice of sorting out casualties after a disaster or in battle into categories for priority for treatment.
Resuscitation: Revive
Burn debridement: The surgical removal of dead tissues and cellular debris from the surface of the wound.


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Comments:

Gripped me tight from the very beginning!
I feel this story is based on a real incident. I wonder how much of it is fiction! You make it sound so real!

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Love yu so much for such a lovely comment,sweetheart

sharafine stephen
(not registered user)

sounded so real. good.

Posted: Apr 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, pa, for taking ur time out to go through it. Thanks a lot. Your appreciation means a lot to me

Just given this one 'I like it' as well. Gripping story. You manage to fill the reader's mind with shock and horror. Waiting for another story from you.

Posted: Apr 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Urja. Thank u so much for appreciating,though it is quite predictable one,right?
I am eagerly waiting for your novel to get completed.

Wow, that was so powerful! I don't know what to say other than it gave me chills. The narrative beginning as told by a third person just made it so real. I know that these things do happen in the world, but I can't understand how someone could do something like that. Powerful!

Posted: Apr 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes,Apodiform, it indeed is terrible that girl child are being burnt mercilessly in some parts of the world,not only in India, but also in various others parts.
I wish we could do something through our writings.
Paper and pen are the best media. right?
your comment is so cute and beautiful that i got an idea for my next story immediately.
I Think I am getting addicted to your presence in my life.
Thanks a ton !! :-))

Baskar Manickam
(not registered user)

infant death, ghost, murder,suicide,fire,doctor,operating room- all the essential ingredients of thriller in one short story. well done.

Concept-good
Backdrop-very good
Narrative style-excellent

Hope you do more medical fiction stories.

Posted: Apr 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Hi Baskar,it's really a great feel to get this wonderful comment from you. It really means a lot to me, honestly.
This comment will encourage me to write more medical fiction stories, indeed. Hope u will read my future entries and give your suggestions and feebacks. I will act on it immediately and I am looking forward to all the constructive criticism as well.

very very well written! Very powerful! Its great that you were able to express the topic through your writing, sometimes its a difficult thing to do. More people should read this, it's great! Wonderful! :)

Posted: Apr 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you sooooooo much for this powerful comment, I loved it

WOW! Oh my God Pratibha, this story will certainly stay with me today. It is so sad but also I hope it will bring promise of change. This has grabbed my heart through the entire reading. such an AMAZING story, thankyou!

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Katie,I know it's so brutal but it does happen in some parts of the world even today.
What will stop this brutality,GOD only has the answer.
I guess,mothers have to stand up for their kids. A mother can make the entire difference. KAveri's mother should have been more strong.
Thanks a ton for your lovely words of encouragement.

Uma Baskar
(not registered user)

The way you have narrated the story from start to end is very good. I enjoyed reading it, especially the characterization made me feel it was real. Thank you for writing such a WONDERFUL story, waiting to read the next one............................

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Uma. It surely makes me extra special to receive gr8 comments like this.I do feel encouraged to write the next one with gr8 enthusiasm.Hope u won't lose ur patience reading all of them

Reading the story reminded me of the TV. show *MASH* then VIET NAM came to mind and the carnage of man's folly and tragedy's.

Posted: Apr 9, 2008

Author Comment:

i can identify with the pain . Thanks a lot for understanding my emotions as well and empathising with me
We r 2 sisters and my mom had to hear lots of comments.
So sad.
BUT my Papa brought us up like sons.
And asked us to never give up

VIjayan
(not registered user)

i read all the comments didi, they said all i noeed to say.
so i ll say one thing. it was simply superb

Posted: Apr 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Vijayan, I know u r busy with ur internship postings...thanks for taking time out for me....buddy
take care....

Hannah (South Africa)
(not registered user)

wow... it held me right through...

Posted: Apr 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank u so much Hannah.....I always knew u will encourage me....

It is a mad world huh? I could tell ya some stories, watch this space. Very good write, 41 thumbs up.

Posted: Apr 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Wooooohooooooo.
u made my day...
i was beginning to think this is not so good.

is this true. it sounds very true but it's good in my non western class my professor was telling us about the girl killing in india and other countries.this is good.

Posted: Apr 16, 2008

Author Comment:

I wish this stops forever...difficult though...
MOTHERS of the daughters have to be strong....
that's the only answer

How sad. It is a sad thing, that does happen. I feel sorry for the mothers who have to deal with these acts of violence. It was a great story.
~KAori

Posted: Apr 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes, Kaori, really sad. But u know what,Mothers can only change this. They have to be brave and not give up.
Thanks for this insightful comment

Wow, I really enjoyed this, though it was sad for obvious reasons. You write so well and kept me captivated from the very first word till the end. Great job hon! ~ Nixie

Posted: Apr 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Hi Nic,I feel I am amongst a family in which all of you have accepted me so well....As if I was never a stranger to any one of you...Thanks BUDDY...buddies for life...

Oh my god! This gripped me from the beginning-- the way you told this story-- how it happens to some girls in India-- it moved me. This was really sad-- and I'm glad that mothers are trying to fix this to teach their children better-- has it been getting better? I hope so-- because no girl deserves what happened to Kaveri and her one-day-year old sister.

Lot's of special chocolate to you,

Ghiradelli Girl.

Posted: Apr 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks sweety, things r still raw and sore in India when it comes to a girl child. It's so sad.
But what each of us can do is to teach our sons to be a strong strong human being with lots and lots of respect for women.
I hope that will solve the problem.
90% of the times the culprit escapes by bribing.

aru agrawalla
(not registered user)

hey pratibha, never knew you had such a good talent. the story had my hairs stand on their ends. i have two daughters and they are my darlings. i dont understand how could people do it to their children. dont they ever think it was because of their mothers they are in this world and they had to have a wife to get a kid. as fetocide is on the rise and with the sex ratio already skewed the days are not far when you have to pay a dowry to the girls family to get your sons married. nice story / real incident or fiction, whatever it is it is an eyeopener to all those who think a girl child is a bane to the family. my blood boils whenever i hear or read this type of news. recently this happened in nayagarh district where they found skeletons of fetuses dumped in an abandoned well.
hope to read more from you.

Posted: Apr 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Dear Arun Bhai,
What a pleasant surprise. never thought U will have time to read this.
Thanks Bhai.

This story gave me the chills! Very sad, but excellently written.

Posted: May 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Dear Steph
Thanks buddy.
And be ready for the surprise ahead ....ur writings are going to ROCK.....did u read "My Amzing booksie family"

The girls' death was terrible. I can't imagine a father destroying his own family just because he didn't get what he wanted. There's no value in it

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

unfortunately this is a true story except that the ghost met sanjib.
so sad,even in this ERA, all this is happening....
thanks a lot for reading this Indie....i am honestly grateful

Good job Pratibha. The story is so real... I just can't belive a father killing his own daughters, becuase he did'nt have a SON! Inhuman, but true. I also appreciate your narration style and usage of the ghost element. I liked it.

Posted: May 19, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks *smiling*
i was so apprehensive about this one, i tell u...so relieved to read ur sweet comment

WOW!
This is so sad, yet so powerful!
I almost cried...
you're an amazing writer :)

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Buddy....it was so tough for me also to write this...i have met kaveri in person...it's hard to believe that she is no more.....

That was freaky. I hope I never have to deal with this. That's just sad and scary and bizarre! Ghosts! Really! *shudders* now I'm going to have nightmares about this!

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Please don't buddy...stay away from nightmares...they r the worst thing on this world...i have suffered lots and this 'ghost' of kaveri has haunted me as well

Hey pratibha,was it a true story?
Its vry sad,shocking and bone chilling.
I knw atrocities against girl child in india and many other countries still exist bt to this extent,i never could imagine.
I have a new maid sunitha, who has 2 kids- one 4 yrs old, the other 2 and half yrs. She was married when she was 12 yrs old.Can u guess whats her age is now? 16yrs and earning for her family while her husband juggles btwn jobs coz of one prob or the other(where he is to blame).
Anywez,ur story was very gripping and it'll take me awhile to get out of it.

Posted: Aug 16, 2008

Author Comment:

yes it's true buddy except for my hubby part...it is so very true...i was also aghast after reading this ....

Poor Sunitha...a child only right?? I wish we both could so something for them...i wish

I just had to read this story again. It holds a great meaning for me somewhere, probably because the sight of such a little girl would have brought me to tears.

It is a lovely story, except for the ghost bit, which still freaks me out.

Posted: Sep 20, 2008

Author Comment:

believe me it freaked me out too...what a surprise....how r u ??



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