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He is MY brother....

Novel By: Kritika
Non-Fiction


This is a true story of a sister who embarks on a journey to find her long lost brother..........


The details are not accurate but the story IS true.... View table of contents...

Chapters:

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Submitted: Jul 10, 2008    Reads: 203    Comments: 17    Likes: 6   


It has been 4 days since mom died.Dad had passed away last year,around the same time.All the rituals were over and I decided it was time to move on.

We were a small but happy and contentedfamily.I went to the only Catholic school in our small town.Dad worked as a sales manager in the antiques' shop in the town.Mom was a housewife.

Then I had got admission in college and I decided to leave home.

I entered my parents bedroom at 12.30 in the night and told them anout my decision.They were glad that I had got admission ,but were sad because I was going to leave them.Next day I left for college.

In college I had met Alex.He was an year senior to me.Within five years of our first meeting,we were married.

That had been 10yrs ago.And it had been 10yrs since I hadlast entered my parents' bedroom.Today I was back in the same place where I had been standing that day.

I had to clean the house before selling it and I decided to start with this room.

I began with the closet.

I had sorted the clothes when I found the diary.It was mom's.The first entry was on the the day before I was born.

She had written everything in her diary,from my first steps to the first time I uttered "mama".I was going through it,when a picture fell out of her diary.

It was that of mom holding ayoung boy of about 5yrs in her arms and helping himcut the cake on the table.Mom had written "Brandon's 5th birthday party-19th March,1983" behind it.

alt

I tried remembering if I had ever known any Brandon,but din't come up with anything.The fact was I hadNEVER known any Brandon ,and to my best knowledge neither did my parents.

Then WHO WAS this BRANDON????


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Comments:

I'm sorry but the chapters will be short and i'll try updating ASAP!!

criticism is more than welcome...........and i guess my style of writing is very childish but i'll try to improve upon it further!!

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Cool beginning. I'm wondering what happened to Brandon. Write more soon! Update me, too.
If you like my novel "Crash" go to my page and go to the youtube link in the profile section and tell me what you think. There are three videos of me "teleporting". lol

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you caleb!!

ANd dont worry i'll try writing a daily basis!and i would update you too!............till then i'll check out u "teleporting"!!

This got a great start...really...i liked it...the suspense...
keep me updated sweety
will read all ur posts soon...been bit busy at new place...

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL

This got a great start...really...i liked it...the suspense...
keep me updated sweety
will read all ur posts soon...been bit busy at new place...

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Yea it is a hectic job.........shifting to a new place,unpacking,getting used to the place!!!!!!

but anyways........i'm glad u like it

Surely i'll keep u posted di


LOL"


~Kritika

ooooooo
nice beginning

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you gigi......i'll surely let you kno whenevr i ost the next chapter........

aight intiguing start, off to the next!

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

Author Comment:

lol....=D

LOVED IT!!! I'm so... sorry, but I can't read the rest right now! :-(
I promise 2 read it later!
P.S I would LOVE if u read my script! Thanks!

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha!! Never mind jess.......i know you will read it!!!
And im glad that you liked it!!

Intresting...very intresting beginning! I'll continue to read! Please do find the time to read my novel "chrysanthe"

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes I wanted to read your novel for a long time.......i'll do that next weekend!

LOL

i just finish reading it now...
wow.. great story soo far...

"im gonna go read the next chapter now.."

soo bye
...i just wanted to leave e comment..
lol hehehe


.x

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanx......and dont worry the chpters are not too big.......

so keep reading!

Your writing isn't childish at all! Wonderful writing style you have! Great detail and very capturing writing. Love to read more! =)
~Maple

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Maple....I had thought that my style of writing was too simple and plain.......thank you for your encouraging words!

I really like your style
and I agree with maple about it not being childish
and so far the stories great
off to read more!

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanx ALly........I guess that my style is quite simple...nothing too difficult to understand!!

LOL

~Kritika

this is cool and sad man i love it i wonder how this girl is?
going to read more:]

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

=D

Thanx.........

really liked it, can't wait to read more! :)

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

thnx...

Hello! Pratibha just brought it to my attention...Did u see my challenge I completed of your's? If not...the title is the sentence u gave me! I would love it if u read it!

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

Author Comment:

okies.....ill read it!

Hi Kritika, this is a very good story and the flow is great too. The only thing you need to improve upon is to make sure you don't mix the tenses. I'll be back to read the other chapters.

Posted: Jul 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Well i'll be glad if you pointed out the mistakes!

hey this is a very good start to your story. But I am going to stop writing this now so I can read more! lol


Brad

Posted: Jul 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Hehe!

Thanks a lot Brad!
I hope you like it

ITS SOOO KOOL AND INTERESTING!!! luved it! ill keep on reading cuz i know it will just get better.

Posted: Sep 15, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks you for your INTERESTING AND KOOL comment BloodyBlade!!!


LOL

~Kritika



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