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By: Itania
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Hey everybody. I've got this story in my head, but I don't know how it's going to turn out. You all know that I'm writing like, ten other novels at the momment and why would I want to write another? Because they draw me in and help me develop characters in my main novels. But I want to know your opinion on this one. So I give you: Zwillinge View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 27, 2008    Reads: 36    Comments: 10    Likes: 1   


Zwillinge is a three part story, with how it all began, who is affected and how they all come together, and the final battles.

It's really confusing so I've spilt it up.

Battles of the Heavens

Die Offenbarung (The Revelation)

Battles of the Earth.

So what happens is that the gods are upset with the constellations for something. And this argument truens into a war, culmanating in the most ground shaking battel that the heirarchy of the heavens has ever faced. The Constellations (horoscopes) are banished from the sky. But the Constellation's souls plant themselves in thirteen spesific hosts (yes thirteen, not twelve. There are the Gemini Twins). These souls activate at approx. 10 years of age, in which drastic changes happen to the various hosts bodies (Ie, No eleven year old should be THAT muscular). Even so, the gods find out about these thirteen kids and seek to destroy them. All of them. And these thirteen preteens must fight for their lives.

Zwillinge means Gemini or twin in german. the chapters will have names, most pertaining to something astral in various languages (german, spanish, and french mostly)

I hope you'll tell me what you think of this idea! any plot ideas are welcom!


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Comments:

I like it!

I don't have any plot idea's, but if I think of some I'll post a comment.

You could steal the real names of your commentors/reviewers for this *hint hint*

XD!

Keep writing,
Wish

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks for the offer, but I have a few names picked out, but I might change them.

=D Sweet! Sounds awesome!

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

awesome. thanks!

i also agree that u should continue...

Posted: Sep 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! I really need to start on this....

Hey Itania, glad I read this now - It does kind of explain more about where things are headed and its a great plot!

I can't think of any plot ideas right now either, except maybe that the 13 kids aren't all in the same place. . .Sorry, s'all I could think of.

Legacy.

Posted: Nov 4, 2008

Author Comment:

yeah, i was wondering how they all meet up... it could be awkward if they all live in the same place... too convienent

Author Comment:
yeah, i was wondering how they all meet up... it could be awkward if they all live in the same place... too convienent


I'd have put them all on the run from the gods and maybe meet up one by one - Couple could maybe get captured and rescued (Assuming it's not in the gods nature to just kill them straight off)

If they all head to the same place of refuge (If you can think of one) then some could meet up on the way in seperate groups then the rest when they get there.

Legacy.

Posted: Nov 5, 2008

Author Comment:

it's a bit more complicated than that. I need to have relationships that are ruined, relationships between the thirteen characters that fail, and work out eventually, and they all need to know each other in some way whether it be foaf, or just facebook

Ahhh, it's set on the modern world. - Why not make them all booksie writers?
They could all know each other that way.

Posted: Nov 6, 2008

Author Comment:

oh, good idea! *thinks* very very good idea...

Author Comment:
oh, good idea! *thinks* very very good idea...


Hehe, Thank you very much.

Posted: Nov 7, 2008

Author Comment:

it is an excellent idea... I might do that for a couple, one will be people that know that the other exists, and never have actually talked, and some other random things.

Author Comment:
it is an excellent idea... I might do that for a couple, one will be people that know that the other exists, and never have actually talked, and some other random things.


I'm glad I could help, I can't wait to read it.

Posted: Nov 7, 2008

Author Comment:

thank legacy. Unfortunately! You'll have to wait until I finish Battles of the Heavens!

Author Comment:
thank legacy. Unfortunately! You'll have to wait until I finish Battles of the Heavens!

Unfortunately, yes.

Posted: Nov 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Good luck with waiting. I'll try to have another chapter up in a few days. Maybe...*thinks* you'll just have to see my new idea in the next chapter!

Author Comment:
Good luck with waiting. I'll try to have another chapter up in a few days. Maybe...*thinks* you'll just have to see my new idea in the next chapter!

I look forward to it - Let me know when its up.

Posted: Nov 9, 2008

Author Comment:

why of course



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