I'd just written a whole two hundred word comment before this one, telling you to pull yourself together. As you can see, i didn't post it.

Why?

Because I know it's not an easy time for you, and you need to work this out with yourself first, before you put it all behind you. We all care about you Alice, and though I was not easily conformed with the idea, ( and am about to contradict my thoughts) take all the time you need. :)

And by the way, depression is not something I will be able to get used to seeing from you. Trust me, it doesn't give a soon-to-be Psychiatrist much pleasure, or anyone else for that matter.

Posted: Aug 16, 2008

Angela depression is more than just "pulling up one's socks" - alas. Alice describes the desolation and sense of darkness it evokes poignantly. Alice I hope you are getting the help you need for this, I at least am pleased to see you are writing. For while you are there is hope. And you are indeed a beautiful writer.

Posted: Aug 16, 2008

oh Alice this is SO heartfelt!
God, i feel so, so bad for you, I know we can say 'time' jsut takes 'time' but what about Now.
this helps, this writing doesn't it? I get the feeling by reading this that it helped some.
even if only bits by bits every little bit counts.

'An Angels Cry' is heard ^_^
hang in there sweetie, we are all here and we all care
ALOT K?

Posted: Aug 16, 2008

Everything will be alright.
You haven't broken your wings. ^^

Posted: Aug 17, 2008

well Alice its a lovely tho sad poem. really says how you must be feeling, tho i didn't realise you had been hurt so much. life can be beautiful and cruel at the same time. it gives you something beautiful which you treasure and would never swap, but then it takes it away, tho you would never change the memories they can be so painful.
Express your pain through your work, i always find that a good part of the healing process. unfortunately pain produces beautiful poetry, which is what we have here!
Oh sorry i havent read the last few chapters of your novel, i've been away for a week and will be gone again soon for a week or so, so l'll have to catch up before i go.
Good luck, and take care!

Posted: Aug 18, 2008

awww Alice ,I'm so sorry you're feeling like this. I really am, if you ever need to talk bella I'm here:D Even so I loved the poem, you expressed yourself so well, which I guess wasn't hard for you...once again I'm so sorry, and I hope things get better and you find your hapiness again ma belle.
Keep smiling
Steph(:

Posted: Aug 18, 2008

Things are going to be better...just keep that in mind. Great expression of emotion!

Posted: Aug 18, 2008

Aw, Alice, you just made me cry - I was reminded of the days when I was in the same stage in life. No, healing does not occur as fast as one hopes. It takes a long, long time. After pain comes numbness, and that is so fearsome that you would wish for pain instead. But even that will pass. As long as you keep placing one foot in front of another and keep walking. You will get there.

Posted: Aug 19, 2008

You will find that an Angel only falls by their own will. It is not every day that an Angel is knocked down by force.

The drive of emotions was definitely there, but I think you let the emotions take you away from the potential this showed. The first three lines for example. Not very original. Although it is understandably hard to write through emotions, it is better to take a step or two back and take a breath. Exhale the impulsive writing caused by emotional involvement. Tell the story of this Angel, do not write to say 'I am the Angel'. Did that make any sense?

Master the power over your emotions and you could write brilliant things.

Onion Knight.

Posted: Aug 19, 2008

you need to many big hugs. That reminds me of my mom and I, when I was little, I used to hate it wen my mom went away on a business trips, so she's set up a "hug bank" for me, where she'd hug me a lot and say that she was putting all the hugs in my hug bank, and she said that when she was gone, I could take the hugs out of the hug bank. So whenever I missed her I'd give myself a hug.

I'm not sure if that's comfort or just a story, but whenever I'm mad at my mom I try to remember the hug bank thing to try and not be mad at her. But the poem itself is really, really good, I'm really impressed, it's emotionally driven, and clouded with mystery and sadness. But you did a good job, I really wish I could help you somehow...but I'm not very good at comforting, because not much has happened to me so I can't give advice or anything. All I can say is something someone (I forgot who) told me: "Smile once a day and eat lots of chocolate."

Posted: Aug 21, 2008

Hello Alice,

I found Onion Knight's comment very interesting and it's true you know. "You will find that an Angel only falls by their own will. It is not every day that an Angel is knocked down by force."

Loved the Poem, and know that you will change the situation.

Think of you often.
Susan

Posted: Aug 21, 2008

I truly empathize with your poem, and your situation. Life sometimes feel like a prison from which you can't escape. But you have to remember that it can always be better no matter your situation. Keep your chin up.

Posted: Aug 25, 2008

mmm Alice....This is one of my favorite work I have read so far in Booksie!!XD

I so totally loved it! Loved all the stanzas equally!!!
Not even one flaw...totally flawless!
AWESOMENESS!!XD

Keep on writing...and take care my friend. :-)

Posted: Sep 10, 2008