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The Way I Am

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Submitted: Jun 15, 2008    Reads: 87    Comments: 15    Likes: 7   


The Way I Am

I walk down the city streets, alone on this empty sidewalk.

The dark brisk of the night begins to fall; the grey curtain rolls back, as the sun begins to set.

I walk alone, side by side with my shadow right behind me.

I care not for the luxuries of life, nor the problems of those around me.

I'm a simple boy, living my life.

* * * * * * * *

I am strong but scared.

My un-ending pain continues on as time goes by.

Happiness, is close, but seems so far away.

Can it get any worse than this?

My secret bloodlust; my secret weapon.

No one knows the rage that drives me, the impulses running through my veins.

I take revenge for the fallen.

This, is the way I am.


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...holy shit you just satated everything i EVER wanted to say. Dude your amazing at writing.

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

Author Comment:

I know you better than most ppl do..

... Lost for words, Is all I can say. I told u, u could do it.

Sarah

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

Author Comment:

so is it good or bad?

Jack the Knife
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Creepy, man. Sounds like Charles Bronson in "Death Wish". I like it. I would change the third line, though - "I walk alone, side by side with my shadow right behind me." If your shadow is behind you, it can't be next to you, but this does not distract from the overall mood of the piece. Good job.

Posted: Jul 5, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, I never noticed that before. I dedicated this poem to a friend however. Thanks again! :)

haha, i got bored and of course I read some of my favorite poets work ^-^

haha, okay bratface this is wat i think: it totally wicked awesome man!

L ♥

Posted: Aug 3, 2008

Author Comment:

lol :D glad you liked it :)

WOW this was totally cool!

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

lol thanks..

Oh, this is awesome!

Posted: Aug 11, 2008

Author Comment:

hehe thanks alot. It was dedicated to The Fallen, a friend of mine.

This Is freakin Awesome!!

Posted: Aug 14, 2008

Author Comment:

=)

Ant
I don't know if this holds together in any coherent way.
Is the disposition of the boy in the first stanza consistent with the pent up rage of the one in the second.
Maybe they are and could be the same person. Its just that change in tempo ( and psyches) from the placid to the rage is abrupt and leaves one wondering.
No hint is given as to why their is so much psychotic rage . This guy needs attention.
I recoil at the thought that he could be going to buy a gun;
This is more likely than he going to the YMCA .
But maybe he's just having a real bad hair day.
Which is intended .
I would really like to know.
I give it a 'like ' in any case.
Just maybe consider some of us slow learners.- I am .
But I'm always open to learning

Posted: Aug 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Well the reason why I never gave any real reason as to why there was so much rage is because I wrote this poem for a friend of mine that I actually know. And the poem was dedicated to him and he himself would understand it. But also isn't that a good point of writing? Leaving a spot open for the readers imagination to take over and let them create or imagine what might be happening or how they would just simply like to see it. I know the poem may be confusing to some, but it wasn't intended for a 'typical' poem. Knowing this person and giving an incite to his personality and who is he I guess is the point of this poem. Anyway, I appreciate the comment, and thanks for reading =)

very good. you are a good writer.

Posted: Aug 17, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! =D

This is great!Ending is strong.And poem is really greeat!
:)

Posted: Aug 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you =)

Oh I adore this one, makes me think of a friend, if only he would have read this.

~DarkFairy~

Posted: Aug 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol thanks so much ^-^

You sound like a person, living in pain and anger... nice piece, you are really good.

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Hehe this isn't about me, I dedicated this to my friend The Fallen

That was really good.

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks ^-^

that was awesome, especially the way the boy changes. I can't think of anything else to say, so....good job!

Posted: Sep 10, 2008

Author Comment:

lol thanks

! Yea.Everything's fine.But you are dying.And no one sees.All they see is just a person with a smile.I love this poem.Great awesome work. !
:)

Posted: Oct 26, 2008



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