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Submitted: Apr 7, 2008 Reads: 50 Comments: 8 Likes: 1
What girls want is up to them
Sometimes they share it with their friends
Boys can't push them around
just like a merry go round
they do what they want and don't give in
to almost anything anyone says
they want to have a party life
and not get old and die
their parents try to stop them
but they feel like they want to drive
away, from everything else
and go for a carnival ride
relieve of all their stress
in the end it's still up to them
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MAN HAS HIS WILL - AND WOMEN GET THEIR WAY
Posted: Apr 8, 2008
haha, this is sooo good!! great poem!
Posted: Apr 8, 2008
yeah, that comment is a tad bit strange (i meant the one before)... frankly it isn't true! haha, yeah well i really like the poem, so i recommend that you ignore the strange guy commenting!
Posted: Apr 8, 2008
Thank you for your welcome to Booksie. This seems like a fun, fantasy type of poem. I enjoyed the youthful exuberance of the words "have a party life" and "not get old and die." It's strange how generations change based on the world they live in. When I was your age I was convinced I would not live to see thirty years of age. Good work, thanks for the opportunity to read and enjoy. rainy (Stop by and take a look at my page when you have time).
Posted: Apr 12, 2008
Ah, I liked this. I liked the freshness of it. What I mean is that it sounded like it really did come out of a teenager's mouth. Of course, not all of it is true for all girls but for most, yes, it is true. I enjoyed this and am looking forward to reading some more of your poems.
-SnowQueen
Posted: Apr 13, 2008
I loved this one is was really good.
Posted: Apr 22, 2008
I like your poem.It's nery interesting
Posted: Apr 23, 2008
Very nice poem. I like the youthful freshness of the language, and the sense of freedom I get from the last 4-5 lines. I really enjoyed this!
Thanks for reading my poems and becoming a fan, it really means a lot!!
Stephanee :)
Posted: May 8, 2008
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