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Looking down

Poem By: BloodyBlade
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Tags: death, misery, pain, fear, hell

I can almost taste the fear and the depression. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 9, 2008    Reads: 89    Comments: 11    Likes: 2   


I look down from the 50 foot building

my girlfriend tries to call me

to stop me

but I'm not going to stop now

I'm tired of getting mocked at

I'm tired of getting beat up

I'm tired of this pain

I can hear fear

Cold sweat

I see a shadow from the ground

watching my every movement

he himself came to watch

I feel like misery

I jump and feel air trying to stop me from falling

but nothing works

I hit the ground

but that doesn't stop me

I keep falling

Into the most hated place in every world......


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dude you make me cry and i know you cut yourself but plez dont hurt yourself to this point and if you feel like you are loseing it then you should wtight your stuff like you are doing or you can um...talk to me if you want. i like your poem thought it scares me a little who am i kidding it scared me alot. but plez dont do anything to harmful. and i know i sound like a counaler or something but i know this is going to sound weard but i guess i care for you because i know what you are going threw and i am and have been going threw this ever sence i was four. i think i'm going to stop talking now and if you hate me for saying all this stuff and dont want to talk to me anymore i will understand but i'm still going to read your stuff. your friend: Rat:]

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

I hate you rat.... LOL! Just kidding. GOD! I don't hate you rat. IDC what you say. BTW I'm not going to hurt myself. Don't worry. I won't commit suicide.

I'm not going to say it's okay, it's okay. Cus it's not. I'm not gonna lie, you're as fucked up as I am. If you ever need to talk or anything, I'm here. I'm mostly on at 1-2 in the morning though. haha.

L♥

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Dam... Okay LOL!

If you ever need to talk I am here. I have done it before with others. Yeah. . .just don't do stuff like that. 'hugs' Really I am here. I liked your poem too, but it also kinda scared me. . .

Posted: Jul 12, 2008

Author Comment:

lol. I scared everyone. And yeah I would love to talk to you. lol.

Hmmm this poem is very sad,and a bit deep.
I hope you will get better.And comon,you have to.I was like that...Everything was like so miserable and stupid,and I hated my life...But Im with my bf now,and like he's everything to me.
So try to be happy with your girlfriend,and everything will be ok.
:)

Posted: Jul 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Er... I hope so.. =[

nice poem:) but it made me sad...

Posted: Jul 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. I guess my depressing powers worked. =(

This kind of remind me of myself. Have you got any idea how depressed you really are? My psychologist keeps rambling me. Anyway, I like it. Try reading my 'dark death' poem and 'wait', you might be surprised how similar we almost are.

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Oaky I'll read them When I have time.

This poem is so sad...This is how I feel all the time, this poem represents me aswell. This work is amazing I wish I could Write like you.

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much. I feel like this only a couple times.

Wow, this was very dark and sad. You must really have a lot going on. It seems we have a lot in common. I'm here if you ever need me. =D

Posted: Jul 21, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm sad most of the time. But okay, I'd love to talk to u.

I shan't say everything will be okay, because that woulc be a lie. But I can say that I sympathize with you.
~Kaori

Posted: Jul 24, 2008

Author Comment:

K. Thats All I need! Some sympathy. :)

This is pretty good, I'd like to check out more of your writing. Hey, I also have this picture posted for one of my novels, LoL. =)
~Maple

Posted: Aug 5, 2008

Author Comment:

rofl. thats pretty kool. my other writings r also pretty good?

Of course all your writing is good! But I forgot to say something. Don't kill yourself dude! I almost did when I was in a terrible state, don't mess with the death yet. You understand? Suicide is a solution for a temporary problem. Gosh, I sound like a mother. Screw me, but seriously, don't commit suicide. If you need to talk to someone, I'm all ears. My life is crap too, if that helps any....

Posted: Sep 1, 2008

Author Comment:

mmk. everyone says that these days -.- but mmk. thanks for reading!



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