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Submitted: May 13, 2008
Reads: 30
Comments: 4
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so please excuse
the author of the story
he's just spinning tales of glory
on someone else's time
and im chomping at the bit
to see you decked out like a diamond
you're my pearl im your horizon
sniff me up and catch my drift
and i
am perfectly numb
i can't be your shooting star
when im lit up like the sun
and i
apologize for myself
in advance to only me
and never to anyone else
but don't think about the bones under the bed
even though we both know what i did
i'd much prefer
to make my skeletons dance
and don't worry about evidence
i've got innocence
built up in my veins
enough to last for days
but i
am perfectly numb
i'll fade like a shooting star
but i'm lit up like the sun
for now
im just living in the moment
breathing for my last performance
one more round to go
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I'd like to hear the music to this! I love the part about making your skeletons dance. I agree - pull them out of the closet. Great job!
Posted: May 13, 2008
and im chomping at the bit
to see you decked out like a diamond
when I read these 2 lines my sight got blurry with emotion. love it.
and then when I read these lines:
i can't be your shooting star
when im lit up like the sun
I wanted to run and jump on a man that I like. (woops..is this my outside voice??)(altho you are referring to being stoned most likely, it also speaks of how your spirit shines...why settle for a star when you can have the sun??)
Oh fucker...get those skeletons jumping! Damn right, yep...I made a mistake and I am growing from it. Take that! Look the other way or help me deal.
Man I hate people who look the other way.
Anyhoo....dubl you are neat.
Posted: May 13, 2008
Just so you know...i came by to read this one again. Maybe I'll start showing you how you write in many levels, i thought you knew you did.
Anyhooo....i've got a phrase in my mind "Diamond Tongue Sparkling Imagination" and your diamond line in here reminded me of that.
Cool.
Posted: May 14, 2008
wowza.
this is really really good.
I would love to hear the music for this!
=]
-Ally
Posted: May 17, 2008
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