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In the Band (actually a song)

Poem By: Hugs and kisses
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Tags: song, rock, band, music, concert

I'VE FINISHED IT! Well, I think it's OK. Not exactly phenomenal or anything. But, good enough all the same.

Hugs and Kisses
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Submitted: Mar 16, 2008    Reads: 83    Comments: 14    Likes: 7   


I’m all alone; I crank up the radio,

I could do this I think to myself,

Right now I could be playing on my show,

I grab my guitar and lose control,

I wanna hear a crowd screamin’

And they’re screamin’ for me.

I wanna be able to see-

See the crowds see me rockin’

I wanna be in, not with-

Yeah, I’m in the band

I’ve learnt my three chords,

Learnt them and more,

I buy a CD at the music store,

Why can’t I be making my own?

Why can’t I be on the road?

I wanna hear a crowd screamin’

And they’re screamin’ for me.

I wanna be able to see-

See the crowds see me rockin’

I wanna be in, not with-

Yeah, I’m in the band

Life right now is so ordinary—

Which is a nice way of saying boring,

I’ve never wanted to date a musician

(Wait—actually I have)

But even more, I want to be the musician

I wanna hear a crowd screamin’

And they’re screamin’ for me.

I wanna be able to see-

See the crowds see me rockin’

I wanna be in, not with-

Yeah, I’m in the band


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Comments:

Hi. It's a real buzz being in a band, you're right.
A song needs an audience! Ricky.

Posted: Mar 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey, thanks ^_^ I feel so happy now. Which is good, cuz I have the WORST stomach ache IN THE WORLD right now...

Hey my friend,

I'm guessing the reason you weren't at school today, is because you're out abroad, but anyway I read this and was totally surprised at the imagery it gave me! As for some ideas... I can't think of any at the moment-- but I'll come back^_^.

Lot's of chocolate to you,

Ghiradelli Girl.

Posted: Mar 17, 2008

Author Comment:

You silly little girl, I wasn't abroad, as confirmed yesterday. But THANK YOU SO MUCH! I came and checked and their were THREE comments waiting for me ^_^ (two were from you)

Hugs and Kisses

I would say at one time or another we have all wanted to be in a band. Fantasy for some, can happen for others! Great chorus, I too would need to think of the main verse etc.?? It may come to you.

Posted: Mar 18, 2008

Author Comment:

I hope it does! And it bugs me that I can't :( But if it does I'll definitely post the rest so that everyone can see

Can you believe this-- my friend-- you're number one^_^!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Sorry... I'm really hyper and happy that you are-- because you're my friend=).

Lot's of chocolate to you,

Ghiradelli Girl.

Posted: Mar 18, 2008

Author Comment:

I thought you would tell me your ideas...but oh well. I'm happy too ^_^

i really liked it! it makes u seem a little thakless though [sorry i had to say it] i gave it a I LIKE IT though!
ROSE

Posted: Mar 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Yay! I don't mind really, I mean, I don't think I'm thankless, but I guess that the song sort of makes it look that way.

Interesting..... Nice poem

--Hoodling--

Posted: Mar 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, I think?

awesome.

Posted: Mar 22, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! I'm really glad you liked it ^_^

I like the additions - contrast between your "boring, ordinary" life and the adulation and excitement of being in a band. Excellent poem.

Posted: Mar 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! I'm glad you like the additions!

it was really good. I like your style, really cute.
Steph:)

Posted: Mar 24, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad you liked it! And I'm glad that you think I have a cute style (that sorta sounded weird, but on well) yeah....thanks!

Liked it, very Avril Lavigne-y real cool!!!

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Awesome, I love Avril Lavigne...now that you say that I can see that it does sound like her ^_^ thank you for commenting!

I really liked it.
~muffins~

Posted: Apr 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Yay! Oooh...MUFFINS! They rock! Wait. Your name is AppleCherryMuffins. I get it now ^_^ lol but anyway, love your pen name and I love that you commented, thank you for commenting!

I'd definately buy the cd this song was on. It was good.

Posted: Apr 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Yay! Thank you soooo much, not just for commenting on so much of my work, but also because you like the poem. I'm super surprised that so many people like this, besides the chorus I think this is one of the worst things I've posted...but people like it so yay! I guess. Anyway, thanks!

This is good, I think we all feel this way. I know I do when I write. lol. oh well, I really enjoyed the narrative in this. keep writing.

Posted: Apr 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I'm really glad that you liked it!

WOOT! makes me wanna air guitar!! its really upbeat!! love it =D

Posted: May 17, 2008

Author Comment:

AIR GUITAR OH YEAH BABY!!!!! *rocks out* ummmm....yeah. Thanks I'm glad you liked it so much!!!



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