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Equalizer

Poem By: Lionheart
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I wrote this on the same day as "A New Sky" so it has a similar feel.
I am not feeling upset... ok i lied, i am always annoyed by something but i dont need to be told not to be hard on myself. I need to write from the heart, and its not all sunshine and kittens hAhHAhaHAhA!!!!

Dont get too emotionally involved people, you may find yourself being dragged down. Observe from afar. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 5, 2008    Reads: 56    Comments: 11    Likes: 7   


Lights bounce against infinity,

Horrific sounds drone in the little spaces,

Synthetic roars deafen your ears,

Aesthetic ideas without acknowledgment,

 

In the higher place flies a wingless bird,

In the deepest place swims a finless fish,

Over the mountains the winds howl angrily,

In your heart a visitor gets too comfortable.

 

Systems designed for failure,

Buildings designed to fall,

Grounds designed to collapse,

The horizon designed to fall…


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Rats are full of raby goodness...

:D

Posted: Jul 5, 2008

ohhhhhh brother of mine, you sure do have a way with words. very descriptive words at that.
'In the highter places flies a wingless bird.'
'In the deepest place swims a finless fish.'
When I read that, my mind actually saw it.... I started laughing. come on, picture a bird, with no wings, flying.... it's impossible.... and I just woke up so that's why I'm laughing. =) Mandy

Posted: Jul 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Hhahahaha, i hate waking up like that... well i hate waking up in general haha
Thankyou. Yeah im really sure how the wingless bird came into my head... but the fish kind of just naturally followed... to equalize heheheheheh
Thanks.

I don't know why but.
I Love it, =]
yet again the horizon.
It just mad em jerk a laugh,
when i read the last line
thinking of *A New Sky*
hmmm.
Great poem Lionheart
=]]

~Chumb bum~

Posted: Jul 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you chumb. Your becoming a faithful visitor, which i like. :D

Ooooh this was cool. It had cool like descriptions and imagery. I really liked the poem it was good. Awww no sunshine and kittens :( How sad. Oh well...that would actually be kind of creepy. Having kitties in your heart. They'd probably tear something and chew stuff up. Hey! That's a cool analogy lol. Anyway, good job I loved it!!

Posted: Jul 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Well you can use that analogy... but if you dont use it i will use it!!! HAhAHAhAhAhHAHAH!!!!!
So maybe i do have kitties...
Thanks a lot.

why do i keep finding myself to always comment after hugs and kisses? o.O and i keep getting to read all of her crazy comments.. hahahaha!
ok
wow.
this is stunning lionheart. every line stands on its own, and then when you put them together - voila. a genuine masterpiece.
brilliant indeed ^^

Posted: Jul 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Thankyou... you say too much, really.
Yeah you should be competing with hugs and kisses haha.
Thanks a lot Alice. ^^

Wonderful, Lionheart ^^ (even if this poem is about potential destructuion and malfunction)

Your imagery is wonderful
Its been a while,
But you still wirte
just as good
if
not
better

Posted: Jul 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Why thankyou. I know, i have kind of stepped out of the flow i was once in. I hope to make up for it. Thanks again Krystina.

The rhetorical effect of the oxymora in your poetry scrapes my arms like a kitten claw, such a sweet thing but it sure hurts. Equalizer eh?!!? I like the idea behind this one, it's the perfect length and a nice change for you.

Equalizer....a superhero who makes oxymorons out of his super power. "I'll make that wingless bird fly! damit!"

Posted: Jul 8, 2008

Author Comment:

HAhAhHAHAHAHAhAhAhHAHAhA!!!!!!
HahAhAHHAHAhAHAhAHHAHAhAhA!!!!!!!
HAHAhAhAhAhhaHaHAhahAhHAHAHAhAhAhAH!!!!!!

Yes... haha

You should hear what my sister has to say whenever i make a comment like this poem. She HATES it!!! I cant help it though, i have that oxymoron character. Yes thats right... i am like this in real life hhAHhaHAhHAaH!!!!

Thanks again peach.

ah, I take the wingless bird to mean that we don't need wings when we are that high, (high in spirit)
and the deepest place, a fish with no fins, same thing.
so the poem to me speaks that these things are too far to reach and get a hold of, and the system (body) designed to failure without the higher, and the horrific sounds of the lower.

haha ok well that's my interp, even though it may be so way off, we all see things different, and hey that's the way I like it lololol ^_^

yes and i have not seen you in uh... let's see about 30 years or so....ya, whas up with that ??? lolol

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Katie... katie katie... its been up and down for me...
Time issues have held me tightly by the reins. Also i havent felt motivated to write... not sure what it was but for a little while i just didnt want to come onto booksie...
Yeah i had different ideas with this, but i like the variations in everyones thoughts too :D I like your interpretation a lot. You make it sound so normal... when the lines made no sense hAhAhHAHAHAhA!!!!

Im sorry... didnt mean to make you feel abandoned. I have moments.

Lol, as my cousin likes to tell his friends "Look a dead bird flying," and half the time they actually look!

Yes brother you do have a way with words, and I'm not awake, I'm tired, and this has woken my up.

~DarkFairy~

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

Author Comment:

HAHAHAHAHAH!!! You know what? I used to say that too HAhAhAhHAHAhAhAh!!!!!
(sigh) That brings back memories. Glad to give you an imaginary slap to keep you awake :)

Hey Lionheart :) This is a really good poem. I like how the emphasis seems to change between the 1st and 2nd stanzas. It really lends itself well to the theme. On top of that, you have great word usage and placement. This is an absolutely wonderful poem! Regan

Posted: Jul 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thankyou! I do what i can, and as little as it is, im glad it still has an effect :)
With practise and determination, you cannot get worse!!!

Thanks Regan!

I loved the first line.
For me (and so this will be a very specific interpretation) it was about the backward evolution of all art, since that is something I think about often. The first stanza represents how art has become simple aesthetics with no meaning (synthetic was a great word to use there). The second stanza represents how art today still resides in higher and deeper spiritual places, yet are undeserving of them and cannot rise higher (or go deeper). The second half of the stanza represents in the mountains, the higher places as of now unattained, the winds the spirit of art. The last line of the stanza(my favorite of the whole poem) shows how this "art" has become to familiar to people. They love it when they shouldn't.
The last stanza represents how these things are destined to fail to do anything of real importance.
I loved this poem. A lot.

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Cant tell you how happy i am to hear that. For me this one stands out as an odd one among the others. You put a lot of thought into my work and i really appreciate it. I dont really remember what i had in mind at the time of writing it but i was in an oxymoron kind of mood haha.

As a result it kind of contradicts itself... hence your line: "They love it when they shouldn't"..

Thanks a lot.



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