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The Masked Child

Poem By: mystory
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This is sort of a non-rhyming poem, but I tried to make it flow nicly nonetheless. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Mar 13, 2008    Reads: 108    Comments: 12    Likes: 2   


The sweet child I once knew is no more.

He was consumed by the Mask of Lies.

You think he is still the same,

but only I can see through his disguise.

Don't you see what he's trying to do?

 

I've tried to help him find himself,

but every time I've failed.

It's too late to save him now.

 

I close my eyes and turn away,

as the Masked Child makes his next move.

Can't you see what he's doing?

You say he's helping,

but behind your back he's plotting.

I know it's me he's after.

What have I done to anger him so?

He's not the person I used to know.

He hides his true self behind the Mask of Lies.

 

He hurts me...

He frames me...

He pushes me away...

I try to tell you what really going on,

but you ignore my warnings,

and listen to anything he has to say.

You think he's perfect--but I know the truth.

I see who he really is when we're alone.

 

I try to help you open your eyes,

But you're already under his spell.

He's got you fooled.

 

I close my eyes and turn away,

as the Masked Child makes his next move.

Can't you see what he's doing?

You say he's just helping,

but behind your back he's plotting.

I know it's me he's after.

What have I done to anger him so?

He's not the person I used to know.

He hides his true self behind the Mask of Lies.

 

I am only safe from his wrath,

when you are around.

But once you're gone, there's no stopping him.

I've tried to show you who he really is,

but all you can see is the Mask.

He only removes it when it's just me and him...

 

Don't you see what he's doing...?

He's tearing us apart!

 


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Kids often play both parents against each other, to get what they want.

Posted: Mar 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Very good point.

Crazyguy
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Wonderful poem. Great work and an amazing talent you have.

Posted: Mar 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!:D

afriendofyours
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I like this poem.

Posted: Mar 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, I was inspired by some of the characters in my novel, so I just thought I'd write it down before I forgot. And it turned out better than I'd expected.

I've never sat down and thought this through artisticly, but as a teacher I have seen this very thing. Its great the way you have explained it here.

Posted: Apr 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. Glad you could figure it out. :D

Trustme
(not registered user)

My friend, don't mask yourself if you want to be loved, don't play you are better then you already are...

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. Glad you liked it.

i havent read your novel, but i kinda feel like the masked child is yourself, ripping yourself apart, like an inner struggle. ^^
i like your writings so much ^^ hehe.

Posted: Jun 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much! Glad you like my writing. ^^

very good, love the repetition......

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. I had originally wrote this to be a song, so that's why it's written a little differently. Most of my earlier poems I wrote as songs.

i could def. see this being like some song. it would have to be metal though ^^

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha, thanks. =D

OMG!!!Thi poem is wonderfulll!!!Great!!I am enchanted with it.Sooo beautifull.I can't belive.You write excellent poems.Youre great!!:)You should become an writer.

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks yet againg. This was one of my earlier poems, and I wrote it about a year ago, so it really isn't as good as some of the others. haha, I'm not THAt good. :P

Gemaster
(not registered user)

Wow. I love the way it's written. Did you know someone like that?

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! ^^ Yeah, I do.

Very good, really enjoyed reading this, good use of repotition too =D

Posted: Aug 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. This is actually one of my poems from like, a year ago or something. I wrote it as a song, so that's where the repotition comes from. Thanks for reading. ^^

Wow. I could really feel all the emotion you put into this. And the repetition was good too, not annoying. Lol. :]

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha, thanks. Good to know it wasn't annoying. :p



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