I am the relic, I am past tense

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I am the relic, I am past tense

Poem By: Qcontinu
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this is no poem, it is just something I need to say but I cannot say to the person until I write it elsewhere. View table of contents...

Submitted: Nov 20, 2007 Reads: 71 Comments: 4 Likes: 3

Its happening all over again

The recurring theme of my life

I try to avoid it but it always comes back

Like a strong magnet pulled to pure metal

The story of my life I am the relic, I am past tense

I introduce people to other people

I introduce my friends to my other friends

The people I thought to be my true friends

And they leave together

Leaving me in the dust from the old dusty road of my life

I am like a gun that is thrown away after its done being used

The violin that is replaced by a better one

I could stop this cycle

I could be selfish and keep them all to myself

But I do not, therefore I lose them

I lose all that is precious to me

All but my creativity

That is locked in an unbreakable box

No one can touch it but me

I lose my friends to other friends

Those friends become lovers

As they become lovers I become a rotting piece of bread

Forgotten in the old x-men lunchbox in the closet

I am the relicm I am past tense

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Comments:

zer0

Reads like a poem to me. Not a bad one either. Perhaps it could use a little editing a better structure maybe and its a little repetitive at points.

Posted: Nov 21, 2007

Author Comment:

Yes well when I wrote it I was simply venting the anger that was building up within me, and still is but has slightly eased. I thnak you for your comment and if I have the time I will edit it, the repetitivity of it is to insist on the point of the poem that I am always left behind.

DarkFairy8907

It's funny how when we vent our anger into writing that it usually turns out good to most people. But when we view it we really don't know what to do with it. I liked it though, it wasn't as horrible as you probably first percieved it would be.

~DarkFairy~

Posted: Nov 26, 2007

Author Comment:

I thank thee for the great comment. Its true that emotions are a strong power when you let them consume you. Love can be powerful but anger is the most powerful emotion, and when your powered by it you write genuienly without restraint or pretense of nicety. Thank you again for your comment, its always appreciated.

FunnyBunny

I usually write when I'm angry and afterwards I think my writing sucks but thats when the best comes out of you. Greate read!

Posted: Dec 29, 2007

Author Comment:

Thanks, I always appreciate your input when it comes to my work.

Trinity88

i love that line... "i am the relic, i am past tense"

i hate when people edit poems...poetry that is too polished never actually says what it was intended...though it may appear nicer on page..

i enjoyed the overall feeling of this

Posted: Sep 24, 2008