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Oblivious ending

Poem By: senseless
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Tags: confusion

something that only rare people will understand.

- to me it also makes sense reading it from the bottom to
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Submitted: Apr 25, 2008    Reads: 58    Comments: 4    Likes: 3   


Dreaming my scream of surrender

While my forgotten spirit laid tied

Magnetized to noises of the dark whileI cried

Hearing words of hate but yet so tender.

My eyes were then shut

With a force so strong

Making right seem wrong

My cheast ran blood, with words I was cut.

Feasting from my soul like sacrifice

NowI realize the dead end.

My trustI shall never more lend

Found wasted frombelieving your advice.

This is just the pay back

For sucking your life out

Under my command and shout.

Understanding the end is what we both lack.


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The end will come just wait

Posted: Apr 25, 2008

Author Comment:

hummm....if u suppose...

My sentiments exactly. I feel empathetic to how you feel... I do the same as you: write about it. But anyway, I love this poem. It represents denial and regret and feeling alone so well. Incredible job, Senseless.

Posted: Apr 25, 2008

Author Comment:

geee thx....well it was a real fast job what I did there, but Im glad u could get the most of it atleast.

I did read from bottom to top as you suggested, and I enjoyed it much more :-)
Welcome to Booksie...~katie

Posted: Apr 25, 2008

Author Comment:

cool.... i didnt do it onpurpose, it just came out like that.

Hi! What's up?

Once again, very good job.
I Liked Nevermore more, but this is also great...
:)

Posted: Aug 30, 2008

Author Comment:

ur such an encouragement, believe it.



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