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Poem By: Vampire Angel
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Tags: feeling, free

My friend told me to just write anything down and don't think about it and this is wha i came up with View table of contents...

Submitted: Jul 24, 2008 Reads: 51 Comments: 7 Likes: 4

Black feathers circle around me

i feel so free

finally it's my time

don't care what you think

When that burning sun sets my day can begin

no more hiding in the shadows

i will let myself in no matter what

The waves slap against the shore reminding me it's ok

The moon shouts out to all those mysterious enough to come and join

The breeze chills my whole body

The Wolves howl reminds me this is were i belong

That rush of water always showing me that i am free

far and high you can't stop me know one can

Try and get in my way you'll just get hurt

I'm tired of everybody telling me what to do over talking what i have to say can you ever just listen to me

All the whispers that follow me can't ever just fade away in the darkness

But i can let myself go cause i'm free

I can put a smile on my face again

Can you hear that? My heart beats again and whole

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Comments:

You did a great job! What do you mean 'I don't think it's that good'? Ha Ha I KNEW my advice would work on you. Joanna this poem was super good! I really liked the meaning beneath all the words; the message that you sent out. The pictures goes great with it also. You need a bit of punctuation work, but seriously, I think this is my favorite poem by you so far!!!! The independence and bravery of the girl/boy in the poem was so strong that I could feel it too. Great poem J, one of your best:D

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow thanks you really know how to make a girl feel better. Are you sure it's one of my best i didn't think it would be that good. But thanks i really appreciate it. Oh and thanks for reading it.:)

Rafael King

once again another great poem keep up the good work =)

Posted: Jul 26, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you again! and i will:)

Dark Skylight

This is great.I like it very much!Especially the last 2 lines.
:)

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it and thanks for reading!:)

Truthdefiesreason

Nice, I can tell the feeling you put into it. Good work.

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. I just wrote what i felt and i cam up with this. Thanks for reading and commeting!:)

ReganFinch

Hey Angel :) It is such a strange thing when you just write and don't think. It's weird sometimes what comes out. But this is a great poem that shows who you are and how you think. You definitely have great potential! Regan

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey:) Yeah same but i just tried it and i guess i liked it enough to publish it. Thank you and i agree it did show a little bit of who i am. Thanks for reading i really appreciate it.:)

Daemonic Resplendence

As I said after reading the poem : "Because Nothing Can Last Forever", 'You are an Artist!'

I Have a friend who loves Ravens...
I'll tell him to take a look at this masterpiece of yours.

Posted: Aug 11, 2008