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Silver sickle moon

Poem By: Wandiola
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A very ill young girl is about to pass on, but before she goes her soul has to admire for one last time the beauty of the moon. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: May 7, 2008    Reads: 104    Comments: 29    Likes: 13   


Her feet follow the sillhoutte of the moon,

No reason, just impulse compells her to pursue,

Thoughts trickle through her mind, but evaporate like the wind,

One direction.

Her only thoughts are on the moon

The silver sickle moon.

*

The shimmering bridal train guides her every movement

Conducting her through puddles and ditches,

Hills and troughs, but her soul is absent

Just one with the moon

The silver sickle moon

*

She arrives at a cliff, faces the moon,

Spreads her arms, closes her eyes and exhales,

The ocean throws itself against the foot of the cliff

The wind whistles a song of admiration

For her, and the silver sickle moon

*

She gazes at the moon

God's beautiful creation

Cold breath clouds her face as the frosty air seeps in

She just stares, in awe of thebeauty

Andpower this moon seems to hold

The stars bow down

The tides obey

The night light of time

The tanslater of light

The silver sickle moon

*

Memories prick her mind,

Forcing her to remember,

the burden the world has put on her small frail shoulders

Her only escape

Her only comfort

Her only refuge

Lies in the silver sickle moon.

*

Before she leaves this earth to be with the lord

Beforethe pending illness swipes her life

She just had to get one last glimpse

And show her Value

For the one and only

single sickle moon.

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Comments:

I love this poem, I love anything to do with the moon, though it’s really sad for the girl, and only fitting that the melancholy moon should obsess her mind so much. very sad, very moving, but very beautiful!!!!

Posted: May 7, 2008

Author Comment:

awwwwwwww thanks! I'll have to reas um of your stuff now!

Wow. Great imagery, and a beautiful poem. I like the picture you put at the end. =)

Posted: May 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! Got it from photo bucket!!

aw thats soo good you should be proud i love the moon!!

Posted: May 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you!

Absolutly beautiful. I can't think of any other words to digribe it. It just took my breath away.

Posted: May 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Really?!?! WOW thanks!

Very good and poetic. 9 thumbs up.

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Why thank you!!!

i really really really love it! and the image at the bottom goes perfect with it. =)

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

awwwwww thank you very much!!

I have to agree with invisiblexme. The picture is perfect for the poem :) Or even better... Your poem was perfect for the picture :) Either way, They're both beautiful and you did an EXCELLENT job!

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow! Your comment was absolutely wonderful (probably spelt this wron! ahhhhhhhhhh)

i like this poem and nice picture. i like watching the moon at night.its really great poem.

Posted: May 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much!

this was marvelous! you have this gift for imagery! beautiful work! it was a wonderous read. i loved it!! keep up the fantastic writing. this is a great piece of work and the picture goes well with it too ^^

Posted: May 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much! I love to write. It sort of just bursts out of me! I'm not as good as you though!

wow, so very powerful. I'm speachless!
Brillaint poem my friend, absolutely brilliant!
Steph:)

Posted: May 12, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you very much!!! I'm glad you liked it!

brilliant! it is so powerful and inspiring!

Posted: May 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Why thanks!

brilliant! it is so powerful and inspiring!

Posted: May 14, 2008

Author Comment:

you like me soooo much!

brilliant! it is so powerful and inspiring!

Posted: May 14, 2008

Author Comment:

your repeating yourself!

Sorry I didn't get to your work earlier
I really enjoyed this piece, I thought it was very moving, powerful, yet calming at the same time.
Well Done Wandiola ^_^
~katie

Posted: May 14, 2008

Author Comment:

hmmm, repeated

Sorry I didn't get to your work earlier
I really enjoyed this piece, I thought it was very moving, powerful, yet calming at the same time.
Well Done Wandiola ^_^
~katie

Posted: May 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank! I thought it would be intresting to write about the moon!

Hey Wendy. This almost feels mysterious. What does "value" stand for.

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

I'll have to come back to you on that!

i loved the image of the bridal train and the silver sickle moon. great imagery. snow

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you very much!

Such imagery! I'm jealous, I've only just started reading your works and you've already put my writing to shame. Amazing!
Great work
~Kaori

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you! but don't be like that!

This is sad, but everything is very mesmerizing... *sob*

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I don't really know why I wrote it, I just thought about the moon and...

What's not to love about this poem? The story is wonderful and your imagery is flawless. You really are very talented. Plus, very cool picture at the end. I hope things are going better for you. I guess summer vacation is coming soon. Do they do that in Texas? Anyway, wonderful poem.

Posted: May 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes summmer!!!! i'm jittery with excitement!!!!!

Beautiful poem , great one ! I loved your way of image and put this on the paper . Just 15 but a head full of ideas.

Posted: May 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!!! That is sooo nice!!

this is a really good poem:] keep up the good work

Posted: May 18, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you rat!

oh my gosh! this is so amazing! This sounds like something you'd actually find in a poetry book...mass kudos to you!

Posted: May 25, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks, im ever so flattered.

awww this is my favorite! by any chance are you a christian? i love nature poems they are the ones i love reading!! good job!

Posted: May 29, 2008

Author Comment:

yes i am a christian!! why do you ask! im really glasd you like my poems!!!

I felt it. It was so deep!
Your descriptions were very clear and connected beautifully to the readers imagination.
all the best.

Posted: May 30, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks lexie. it was just something random that popped into my head!

Datz a sad poem. And I like it...Give it 8 out of 10.

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

Author Comment:

yay yay!

Wow, you have a way with the dramatic mood of your writing. Sad, melacholy, but ultimatly a beautiful connection.

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks. very kind, i appreciate your comments!

Hey WANDY, do forgive this late comer....
better late than never...right??

OH MY GOD....look at the poem and snap .....

do i have any words to describe what i am feeling?? lemme see....nope....

MINDBLOWING BRILLIANT

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Author Comment:

pratibha!! your such a sweet darling!!! thank you for the gorgeous comment!!

*stares speechless at the computer screen*

That was really well done!

I love love love the photograph at the end!

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

The picture is terrific!! thank you sooo much ananas I do adore how you stare speechless at the computer screen.



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