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Weightless

Poem By: Wandiola
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For all thos that are hurting in life, smile, cos if you just sit down and find the right path, you may find yourself becoming weightless.

In a goodway ofcourse!!
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Submitted: Jul 27, 2008    Reads: 194    Comments: 37    Likes: 11   


Outside the sky is grey

Inside my heart is broken

Nothing but failure echo's

Numbing my already desolate mind.

*

I look again and see clouds parting

Light seeping and leaking through the grey

I hear the new song of hope from the birds

And feel the gentle breeze of aspiration

*

I wipe the stray tear from my eye

and look up to the now so blue sky

My world may have toppled into ashes

My life combust right before my eyes

But something about me was different

Something wasn't quite the same

*

I felt weightless

*

I felt like I could really watch the sky,

Really absorb nature

Really think

Really feel

Like the sunshine controlled me

Absorbed and gave new life to my withered and tired bones.

*

Life's past disapointements disapeared within the blink of an eye

Time and space no longer mattered

Nor did circrumstance

Nor did position

*

I was weightless

*

As I watched the old grey clouds simmer into dust

I began to realise

that no matter what came my way

If I look up to the sky

Nothing could ever bring me back down again.

Nothing could ever hold me down.

Nothing could ever keep me down.

*

For I am weightless


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Comments:

you write with such inspiration and i just love it :) this is a very pretty and inspirational poem you never cease to amaze me :) GREAT WORK :)

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

aww thanks deanna, wow I just published it know and well I'm flattered! Your such a kind lady and I pray that God will continue to bless you!!

Happy days!

i totally agree with deannajoy...also story of my life!!! this is a great poem!!! LOVE IT!!! XD!!!
xoxoxo
DOM!!!! XD

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks DOM! have a nice day!

aww, thats so sad!

L ♥

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

XD. thanks for the comments!

That was cool. I like how the weightlessness seems to sybolize a death, but not a physical or emotional death, but the death of conflicts and turmoil. Good job.

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

yes thanks a lot for seeing that, oh and thank you for the comment! XD

pretty! very well structured and enjoyable to read! good job!

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks.

loved it, very uplifting and inspirational, i liked how you kept repeating 'weightless'


and i would love to hear about your chrisian camp

=]

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

I will surely tell you, I have like a bunch of people to tell but I will definately spill! Happy you liked it!

sweet! really good:) I like it! :D

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks.

I always look toward the sky when I need a lift. And I always start smiling no matter what kind of mood I'm in. The sky is closest to God, and even though I feel him always with me, it grows and brightens a little when I look toward the sky. This poem really shows that. Great job. =)Mandy

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

awww thats great mandy, I'm so happy that you can look to the sky and be lifted, I can too, so thats why I decided to right this poem. So happy you can relate!

very well written I enjoyed it very much :) looking forward to seeing more

♥ Always & Forever ♥
~Ciara~

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks ciara, glad your liking my stuff!

a beautiful poem . really enjoyed it , the beauty of it for me is . we all share the same sky , so we could share the feeling of being weightless.

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

ooh how intresting, but very true... we could all share that feeling if we just tried.
thanks!

yay!!
i like it

..
lol
..

thats all i can say..

&& yeah... its very well written



tops...



x

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks :)

Very creative my friend :)

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you punishment! :)

hi! wandiola. ur free spirit makes u light. lovely nuance. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks bubbly! Have a nice day!

very well written! I enjoyed reading this.
LOVED it!

Take care!

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Gracias!

wow, that was great. fantastico! =)

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks.

This made me think of clouds-weightless-in the sky...I really like it:D

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks.

Hey Wandiola! Thanks for asking me to look at your poem :). I really like your use of descriptive words in this poem. You spice up seemingly boring words and make them into something beautiful. At the same time, you have a really strong theme. This is a great poem! Take care, Regan

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks regan, that was a beautiful comment, and I'm happy you were able to notice things I didn't even know!
Best wishes~ Wandy

That was a beautiful poem. Great job!

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks piggy.

Really absorb nature

Really think

Really feel

Like the sunshine controlled me

Absorbed and gave new life to my withered and tired bones.

believe me this poem came to me at the right time when i needed encouragmentand after reading this, I indeed feel light as a feather...u know what, i could visualise the scenes...open skies,doves,breeze, lovely green fields and lovely words floating by...

indeed beautiful and soulful poems do make a huge difference in everyone's life...GOD bless you for writing such a divine poem.

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww thanks you so much Pratibha! God bless you for writing such a true poem. I always look forward to your wonderful comments!

I liked it. It almost makes one feel weightless when reading it...It is an uplifting poem. Thank you for sharing!

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for commenting! Glad it makes you feel weightless

just amazing!!
: )

i loved it! : )

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks bekah! your back! where did you go?

this is such a wonderful and very insiration!!
I really liked it, thank you for sharing it!

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for commenting my friend!

That sounds like a great feeling, for a moment then I could be sure my feet lifted off the ground a little! LOL Another great poem, you really can't be kept down with work like this. Loved it! ~ Nixie

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

aww thanks nixie! You are an awsome friend!

That was amazing! I could feel so much emotion.. You are a talented writer =] Keep writing!

Posted: Jul 31, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks ashen! You have a good day!

Wow great poem! I really enjoyed reading it! I wish I could experience the weighless feeling expressed in the poem! Keep on writing! :-)

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you bella! hope all is well!

it would b nice to just float away every time a problem comes ur way. I have gotta try that sometime!

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Sure do! Have a nice day!

the expression in this poem is very refreshing. Feeling weightless like this is often overlooked to some people. When it does appear, it's unforgettable. Well done Wandiola!

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you ruben, from someone like you, who write so well, its wonderful to know what you think!

wow that was really good (:
i love how you used weightless as like ,
well haha I agree with Aislin Kane (:
showing it as an end to suffering and a begining to a happier tune (: great job

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks cassie...its great to hear from you!

yes! awesome poem....i love that feeling of weightless....awesome job I loved it wandiola! pls keepp writing poetry -zia

Posted: Aug 2, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks zia!!

Pretty good, i like the flow and the emotion, pretty nice poem indeed. Keep writing!

Posted: Aug 3, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks!

I think this was a realy good peice. Especially the line "My world may have toppled into ashes." Nice flow and creativity that you put into this.

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you!

........I am speechless.... this was a very inspirational poem. I was sooooo welll written, I loved it

~Brad

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

why thank you brad!

Thank you for inviting me to read thus, Wandiola. I need poems like this to remind me of that feeling of weightlessness. I often forget to put down the weight that i am carrying and leave it behind. When i remember to let go of it, the feeling of freedom has me wondering why i clutched it so hard and long.

Thanks for the beautiful reminder.

craaig
weightless, and waitless, again

Posted: Aug 11, 2008

Author Comment:

ha! thanks craaig! you always leave such wonderful comments! happy you liked it!

I want to be weightless so much - oh what I wouldn't give to be weightless. I really like this poem very inspiring. I can totally relate to this and I'm currently in search for that path that'll leave me weightless - oh what I wouldn't give!

Keep up the great work, Wandy.

Olola.

Posted: Aug 11, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks my dear friend! I hope all is well!

Just beautiful...at first i though oh no another mopey dopey long long sad poem but you are inspired...and inspiring. Great piece

Posted: Aug 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, yea the beginning is a bit like that...thanks julistar!

Lovely, inspiring words! Like it!

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks!

I liked this very much, absolutely tops!

Posted: Oct 20, 2008

Author Comment:

aww thank you! absolutely tops!!! How splendid!



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