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Life Always Changes

Poem By: xRAINBOWx
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This is a poem about losing friendship, and not really knowing why it happend. It's just things that I was feeling when friendship was dying and I knew it. But, don't think of me when you are reading this. Interpret it the way you want do. It sort of goes with a lot of problems in life. Thanks for reading! View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Mar 24, 2008    Reads: 55    Comments: 8    Likes: 4   


Changes

By: xRAINBOWx

We were always hoping

That this was going to last,

But now we all sit moping,

Thinking about the past.

We were all blinding

By the happiness and the craze,

But now we’re all reminded

Of our better days.

All we felt was contentment

When we followed our own directions,

Now, most feel resentment,

Pointing out all the little imperfections.

As far as the friendship came

We all wondered what had been pretend,

Looking back, nothing is the same,

We knew it was time for the end.

We could all just sit and cry some more,

Watching as the jigsaw puzzle of life rearranges,

One think you need to be prepared for

Is that, no matter what, life always changes.


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Comments:

wow, i think that this is really good! I understand this whole losing friend thing, as it's happening to me now. And this poem is really great!! I like it!

Posted: Mar 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! It's just something that came to me last night and I thought maybe others could relate. It's happening to me too right now, so I know exactly how you feel.

Wow! That goes so well together. The rhyming scheme was INCREDIBLE:) It was very strong and had a lot of meaning. It actually refers to me also. I have a couple poems about losing friendship, so I understand. Ha Ha it was a great read!

Posted: Mar 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much. I tried to write it so that it could relate to others aswell as myself. I'm glad you liked it :).

What goes around comes around - life

Posted: Mar 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Very true.

"we could all just sit and cry some more
but no matter what, it's all the same
this friendship we once shared
is nothing more then a loosing game."

Haha. =)
that's my own varriation to your last stanza. To me, it just seems like it would fit. =)
This is an icreadibly powerful poem, I had no idea you had this in you. (okay, maybe I did, I just had no idea you could express it in such a way)
I really did know that someday, you'd find out we have a lot more in common then anyone would see. =)
enjoy booksie, you're going to get a lot of attention, and this time, it's gonna be from people who will understand you more then you could ever comprihend.

You're the colour in our graying sky, cause you're the rainbow. =)

lots o' love ♥
Princess

Posted: Mar 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Well, as you know, I don't have as much writing abilities as you do. So, I did the best I could. You were my inspiration to start writing. You belived in me. Thanks for all your help. Awwwh. Your last line is cute. I try to be the rainbow.. but even the rainbow fades sometimes.

xRAINBOWx

btw- most people on booksie, don't put their pen name in the title of the piece! it sometimes ruins the look and the meaning that people would otherwise gather from the title. when someone sees the title "Changes", they are intrigued. seeing "rainbow" in brackets beside it, not so captiviating...

Princess ♥

Posted: Mar 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Well, the title was taken :S. I didn't really know what to do, because I have no other ideas for a name for the poem.
I'll see what I can do.
Thanks for the help, Princess! ♥

xRAINBOWx

A really well discriptive poem......like it alot....Take care Juliet

Posted: Mar 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you. :) I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I have one suggestion to make this poem flow a little better... in the line:
"Watching as the jigsaw puzzle of life rearranges",
I would take out the word "jigsaw", and leave it. =) I understand you were trying to add more depth and perception to your poem, adding more detail... but I think it's lovely without it =)
anyways, I was just looking thought this again and thought of it... hope you don't mind the friendly criticism too much!

Xx Ash xX

Posted: Jul 31, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm too lazy to change it. :) But thanks Princess. Maybe I'll change it eventually. You would know how to set up the poem. :) I don't mind at all.
Thanks again. ♥
xRAINBOWx

great job :)

i know how it feels to lose a friend. ;)

i'm pretty sure everything turned out fine though. am i right? ;P

you should try writing some more. this is phenomenal. the emotion comes out exceptionally, and it all flows very well. keep it up. :D

always here,
lifexsucksxlovexsucks

Posted: Sep 15, 2008



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