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Five Steps Closer....

Poem By: xxemoxbfsxx
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Submitted: Jul 26, 2008    Reads: 68    Comments: 14    Likes: 4   


Five Steps Closer....

By Me (lol)

♥♥

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(It means I love you in dinosaur!)

♥♥

Take five steps closer

Let me wipe away those scarlette tears

Steal your malicious demons

So you don't have to feel

♥♥

Take five steps closer

Into my warm embrace

I'll hold you forever

I won't let harm find you

♥♥

Take five steps closer

It feels really great

To be loved in a way that has angels grace

I feel that way

♥♥

Take five steps closer

Just so you know

What you mean to me

I want you to see

♥♥

Take five steps closer

To be here with me

I'll hold you forever

You only have to take five steps closer


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Comments:

Lol this was really good :D
I can tell who it's already for by the big RAWR uptop
it didnt suck like Chris' poems do.. lol jk.. or am i O:-)

Posted: Jul 26, 2008

Author Comment:

you are serious, i'm telling him! ooooooooooooo! well, he won't even read it, so it don't matter. :)

L ♥

Hehe, Yep, The RAWR gave it away!!!! Loved it babes.

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Anthony told me that one, lol. Nice. I was hoping it would turn out to be a good poem cus I wrote like 3 bad ones first. Thanks babes! ^-^

L ♥

I really loved it! Sorry I haven't been reading your stuff in a while, been super busy. But this was fantastic:D I really liked how you repeated in the beginning "take five steps closer", it added a bigger effect to the poem. Ha Ha and I loved the RAWR in the beginning:) Keep up the good work!

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

The rawr was there so to give a hint on whose its about, but if ur not that person or close to me u wouldn't know. Hehe. I was going for this to be a great poem, I didn't think it was but all of u seem to like it. :)

L ♥

Love The Dino Talk! Ha! Rawrrrrrrrrrr.......

THis is an incredible poem. Inviting someone in.
Awwww. Come on, I dare ya....a little closer.

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

hehe, thanks. I love ur comments, they're always great and funny! ^-^

L ♥

LOVED IT!!! U r an awsome and creative writer!

Can u by any chance read my script OR try my challenge? Thanks!

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

sure I will, thnx for the comment!

L ♥

LOVED IT!!! i agree with i think everyone above(cuz i'm pretty sure they all said something AH-MAZING if not they must have been smoking something) this is good, you are too creative and awesome!!!telll me when you write more
xoxo
DOMINIQUE!!!
XD

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

okay, i will ;)

L ♥

Oh WOW!!!!!!!

RAWR from me too =D

thios was so beatiful and touching!!

I absolutely LOVED it!!!!!!!


LOL

~Kritika

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

hehe, thank you! :D

L ♥

Oh man, I've been using that word so much and I didn't even know what it meant! =^.^=
Loved the poem, a lot. I love the five steps, great choice. The word usage and flow are also very well. I haven't slept in about a week, so I'll come back and praise it some more once I'm awake.
--Oral sex and blowdryers--

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol, The phrase is kinda funny. Thanks for the comment though, I really appreciate it! ^-^

L ♥

I have always told you - u r flawless soul and May GOD bless you for your lovely attempt to keep ur loved ones happy...

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Author Comment:

hehe, ur so nice!

L ♥

ROFL!! RAWWWWR WTF WAS THAT! RAAWR RAWR! That means wtf in dinosour! BURN! that's right i owned u! good poem though!

Posted: Aug 6, 2008

Author Comment:

no it means i love u crack head! thnx 4 the comment tho.... that was sarcasium! lol,

That's a really awesome poem! It's great.
btw..dino's are like my all time fave animals. =D

Posted: Aug 11, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, their awesome, right? :D

L ♥

The RAWR cracked me up!! Wow, I feel the same way about someone. This puts me in a very happy yet depressing surounding. Ooo poetry! You've inspired me!! Thanks a million!! I'm going to read more.

-Johnston C.

Posted: Aug 18, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, your welcome...and thanks. for your comment in all it's kindness and wisdom. :D

L ♥

Awww this is soo sad and beautiful.And touchy.
Greeeat poem!
:)

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

hehe, yea, but I'm band from seeing him and he can't see me :(

SOMEHOW, MY SOUL WAS LEFT BEHIND ON THIS POEM OF URS...CAME BACK TO PICK IT UP....
I WISH I COULD HAVE VOTED MORE THAN ONCE...

Posted: Sep 3, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, yea this is a personal favorite of mine.



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