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Silent rain

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Submitted: Feb 3, 2008    Reads: 46    Comments: 7    Likes: 4   


Alone I stare out my window pane

starring at the falling rain

It dribbles down the glass so smooth

fitting into every groove.

A trickle down my cheek for came

showing all my growing pain

my insides reach for something more

but its not you I am reaching for

 

The sky is sad its crying to

but you cant hold me like you do

Iwalk out side to lose my pain

and I cry softly in the rain

I hold a gun up to my head

soon I will be gone and dead

to be with you in heavens wake

 

my knees they tremble bend and shake

the trigger loose its all to risky.

With my trigger finger frisky

The shot is sounded vision blurred

Now my sadness can be cured

As I fall I feel no pain

And there I die in silent rain


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ohmygosh. thats amazing sweetie. its really powerful.

Posted: Feb 3, 2008

Author Comment:

thnx so much i luv riting poems

Bloody brilliant piece. I love the emotion, or rather the lack of it. Truly brilliant piece, keep writing.

Posted: Feb 4, 2008

Author Comment:

thhnnx :)

How sad! You really conveyed a lot of feeling in your poem. Good job!

Posted: Feb 5, 2008

Author Comment:

aww thnxx :)

I'm suprised to read you're only 15, this is a good poem, you have talent ;) ~ KB

Posted: Feb 6, 2008

Author Comment:

aw thnx

This is a great poem! I loved the emotion(:

Posted: Feb 8, 2008

Author Comment:

aww thnx

Okay dats scary and sad. Did you ever feel like that before?

Posted: May 7, 2008

Author Comment:

haha no but i like 2 express alot of emotions not just happy ones

This is very dark, and sad. The words flow really well, and I somehow can see what's happening inside this poem. Great work.

Posted: May 18, 2008

Author Comment:

thnx ur an amazing writer as ell i wuill comment some of your writings soon



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