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hey all....i have to give the inspiration for this piece to solafidas...he told me to write about something else and not to focus on myself...his example was something with a rock. So when i went to attempt to write poetry, all i could think of was a rock...haha so here it is! :) thanks solafidas and enjoy! View table of contents...
Submitted: Sep 6, 2008 Reads: 42 Comments: 6 Likes: 3
it cannot move
it is silent
it is lonely
it is forgotten
we walk past and glance-
but we turn away
it sits
and waits
for the whispering winds
for the tentative trees
for the repetitive rain
all to wake and comfort it
its only companions
are Mother Nature's children-
and it never complains that
it is forgotten
it is lonely
it is silent
it cannot move
but
it is happy
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very true and thoughtful.
Posted: Sep 6, 2008
:)this is great, im allways thinking about stuff like this... like how trees and nature just are.no free will persay, but the chance to just be. im glad you found some inspiration!
Posted: Sep 6, 2008
An enjoyable read!
Good visuals with your choice of words...
"it sits
and waits
for the whispering winds
for the tentative trees
for the repetitive rain"
Happy writing.....Jerry
Posted: Sep 7, 2008
Hello Zia,
Thanks for sending me your new poem. I really liked this one, very much! I liked the way that you gave your rock feeling and a soul and that it was waiting to be picked up, held, and touched.
Many Native American and Far East cultures believe that rocks are alive and have a soul. Maybe they do! I don't know if this was your intended meaning or even if there was one but, it was what I got out of it! Thanks Again!
Posted: Sep 8, 2008
ZIA, this is really a great one...INTENSE, POWERFUL...
and all my GOOD WISHES will always be there for u...
remember that writers' block can never take out ur creativity...u r special...
Posted: Sep 9, 2008
Very interesting. I have always found that your writing is down to earth and elegantly simple. Good alliteration. I enjoyed it and please don't take the simple thing wrong that is a compliment. You don't need the fancy jewelry to make your writing classy it just is beautiful from the core to the flesh. Cheers
Posted: Oct 23, 2008
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