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We the arrogant dud.

Short Story By: Tina Fen
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Submitted: Mar 17, 2008    Reads: 43    Comments: 1    Likes: 1   


"—he gitso mad'bowdit—you can't hava conversation with'im without'm yellin. S'ridiculous. "

"I know—he hasn'unloaded onmee yet, but ahm waitin'. He knows ahlike Obama, buddee'asn't said innything yet. "

"Well- …I'mna vote fur McLain.. –cuz ahm jussnot reddeefurruh woman president. An' ahm not reddeefurruh bla—fur Obama—"

"Y'know, Mom, furmee, snot really abou'tha parties itthis point. I wannus out'v Iraq. Period. N'that's whud Obama an' Hillary saythur gonna do—an' they may errmaynot hold good t'that, buddif McCain getsinn, whir def'nit'ly not gettinowt—"

"—yeah, thass true. Yerdad jussmakes s'me so mad withollis rantin'. Like'ee knows better'n inny'v the rest'vus. "

"Well, I don'blame'im fur havinnis s'pinions. But furmee, wuddahwant is uhlittle bittuh both. I like some things abou'tha Democrats and I like some things abou'tha Republicans. I jussdon't fit inta wunner the other—"

"—well, he swears tha Democrats er gonna spendall th'money—"

"—right, like theyc'make it inny worse'n Bush oready has—"

"—I know! An'he's uh republican!"

"—lotta that sbin war-spendin, but, uhginn, it's uh war ahdon'think ever shoulda been started. "

"—well, no, I'm gladthey got S'dahm, 'specially if'eeyad innythindadoo with 9/11, bud'ah think we need tuh gitt outta there now. "

"—If they'd put alluh that money'n effert intuh findin' Binlodden, it woulda bin justified, buddah thinkit was jus'Bush livvinout some childhood superhero dream. N'Dad n'Tara kin say what they wanabout 'winnin the war,' buddif Hank goes over there'an gets killed, are they still gonna feel that way? Becauz I will be PISSED if'ee goes over there n'gets killed. Becauz it'd be fur NUTHIN'—"

"—Ohwyno.. Me too. Well, iss juss like Vietnam. N'think'vall th'moms n fammlees who lost people ovathere—and thass exackly how they feel. But issnot juss'Bush—y'know heesonly one man—heesgotta whole teammuh people who make mostha decisions for'im—I mean, I think the only thing heekinoverride… isslike… world war. "

" Yeah… Well, yerright abou'one thing—issnot juss one person—the governmennis one big messed up machine. "

"—n thaswhy ahm voting fur McLain, because I know issnot juss him—I don'really know thahmuch abowdim, so I dunno iffah like'im, bud issnot just him—he's justa front man furruh buncha peepulloo make those decisions. N'ahm jussnot ready furruh woman president—"

"Why not? Ah mean, ah don'really like Hillary all that much myself, but ahm curious—"

"Well… s'juss my time, ah guess. Ah juss don'think uh woman could hol'that position. It juss needsta be uh man—I-ah don'think uh woman could handle it. An'I think we would lose uh lotta respect from uh lotta other countries. Those Muslims jus'wood'n deal withuh woman. "

"Maybe. "


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Comments:

HA! It sounds like you recorded a conversation and then wrote it out. Was this hard? Very well done. The only one that caught me was "reddeefurruh". Well, done.

Posted: Mar 18, 2008

Author Comment:

The phonetics are tricky. It's hard to type out what I perceive to be our regional slurring patterns. I think it reads more "redneck" than we actually sound. Maybe I just hope it does...



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