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By: KitKat123
Poetry

Tags: love lost, heartbreak, poem, challenge response, emotional

This was a challenge response to Mysory's challange. I was given 8 words and had to use them in my poem. My words were: timeless, flying, death, forsake, lies, misunderstood, unreliable, and star. So, here it is!! View table of contents...

Submitted: Jul 25, 2008 Reads: 41 Comments: 3 Likes: 1

The Cheating Heartbreak:

You were so unreliable, so I walked away

Neverknew that your death would come the next day

I guess I just misunderstood

You cheating on me, didn't think you could

But you cheated constantly and you told me lies

Timeless tears fell from my eyes

So here I go, flying out the door

Not knowing I'd here from you no more

Thinking as I flew that there must be a mistake

He told me I was the one, and yet he was going to forsake

Well I left first, and no longer do I have to question where you are

Because you'll be dead and gone and I'll just have to look at the heavens in the stars.

By: KitKat123

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Comments:

mystory

Oh wow, you did a fantastic job with this! I love the story, too. Someone thinks they are being used, so they leave, only to have the other person disappear permanently from their lives, and regret having left them. So touching and full of emotion. Very good! =D

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!!

Pratibha

honest one...continue writing with honesty and there would be no looking back...

Posted: Aug 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for the comment! But, are you saying don't write honestly or do?

Pratibha

yes honey bunny, do write with the same honesty as u r doing now...ur posts revive something inside...not getting the right word Now...but something good happens after reading ur posts...
and a post written with ur honesty reaches soul directly....

Posted: Sep 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I try to reach out to people with my writing because I feel that should be the true purpose of writing. I'm glad to know that my writing is doing just that.