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Because of the tune

Poem By: air
Poetry


Tags: shy, cry, tune, eye

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Submitted: Jun 29, 2008    Reads: 65    Comments: 16    Likes: 11   


I won't throw curses

to where I've been before.

I look upon life as door leading to door.

*

Although I find nurture

in a long lost friend,

I don't see the death

as if the end.

*

I can't imagine why

the state of mind is so perplexed,

but isn't that the way we are,

we think inside a standard text?

*

There is a tune that bids me on,

so when i'm affraid I still go on,

and some glory that fell in my eye,

I don't know why,

but it made me cry,

and still I'm shy,

but I go on

because of the tune.

~


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Comments:

I like this line in particular:'I look upon life as door leading to door' I am not a believer in anything but this is a well written poem with a nice light touch.

Posted: Jun 29, 2008

Author Comment:

hahaha, well thanks, thanks a bunch ^_^
best wishes secondchance and have a great day :D
~katie

Ahh, you're shy too, like me. That poem was so beautiful, Katie. You probably let your feelings come out through your writing. Sometimes I can't speak especially with the loud mouths I live with and I have to retreat in a quiet place where I can think. Such a great poem.

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

Author Comment:

hehehe, yes I think alot of us have a little shyness.
quiet places, yes, it is so nessesary to have that peace.

'loud mouths' lol! well I don't have people living with me but I have three cats that can have big mouths sometimes lol!

yes, that can be hard when everything around you is loud, then to create a place inside of harmony is special treat.
sometimes even when I have peace my mind will still create the disharmony though you know? our disorganised thoughts and what not. yes, writing is a wonderful tool. I am emensly grateful for it. :)
Thank you Susan, have a nice warm day ~katie

"but I go on beacause of the tune"... YES!! YES!! YES!!
Me too!!

Such a feel good poem for me, Katie. Just lovely!
Peace and love.....Jerry

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

Author Comment:

oh, thankyou Jerry, it always makes me feel so good just to know that a poem through me touched and made someone else feel good ^_^

my computer is in the shop as we speak :(
I hope it is only a little bit sick and not deathly ill lol!
well, it is a good thing that I can use this one at work for a little while. take care, much love and peace.....* katie

Excellent, Katie.

Great attitude to start off and then . . . well . . . that last stanza is me as well.
My identification with this one could not be more complete.

I don't think that any poet on this earth, or beyond, could improve upon this diamond.

craaig

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

Author Comment:

wow craaig thankyou so very much, I am very happy that you can identify with it so well.
your comment is Very touching to me.
God Bless
~katie

Tell me, in your words, what "the Tune" is a matephor for?
Great poetry, but I wonder, is there an actual tune or is it a metaphor?

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, yes there is this music that plays inside of my head lol
hehehe, well actually yes it is a metaphor for the song of life, or the mantra that metaphorically echos, or the desire that pushes you on or the magnetic pull or your soul, it is a feel that is always there moving you. I think it keeps getting stronger once you begin to actually listen to it.

There is suppose to be a life song and a healing song for every individual with the exact rythmic vibrations of thier soul, although it is not easy to hear. in fact I have just picked up a book about it called: "sound medicine" by Laeh Maggie Garfield. and she speaks of this. it's quite interesting.

and Hey I was going to visit your page and ask you, 'um, who are you anyway' lololololol!!! :D
yes you keep changing faster than I can type sometimes lolololol.... oh i love it!!!!! ^_^ ^_^ ^_^
I really liked the last picture but I'm gone for a couple three days and now you are different again lol!
you are great!!! ^_^

That's a beautiful inspiration, motivation...whatever you want to call it.
Do we flow through moment, or does the moment flow through us?

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

Author Comment:

lol.....oh-no lol!
now you're gonna have me thinkin' again lol.
'hmmm, do we flow through moments or does thye moment flow through us'?
well, (pondering deeply) hahaha, how does this sound:
they go through us, ignite us and then send us out of our self. hehehehehe haha, ya, so they do flow into us but also we flow with the moments see? ok does that make sense to you? I jsut stood and felt the moment and that is what came to me. well, so that was only a glimpsing so to speak but I know there is a melting effedt that goes many times much more deeper than that... ^_^ ^_^ ^_^
thank you sweetie, I love this connection with you ^_^

I don't know why,

but it made me cry,

and still I'm shy,

but I go on

because of the tune.






I won't throw curses

to where I've been before.

I look upon life as door leading to door.

Hiya KAtie....we r thinking similarly lately...i was so 'down' and ws wondering....what am i running after? what is my husband running after? What do we want? don't know...blank faces., empty eyes....no tears....

STAGNANCY is the call of the hour.....this is what i feel...Buddy...i don't know if i am right or wrong....

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Hi Pratibha ^_^
it has taken me this long to get back to people after having my computer down, wow stuff sure does build up huh?

hahaha, yes we all seem to be going/running after something but then when we stand still we realize it is not 'out there' somewhere. do you know why gravity is so powerful?
because it doesn't move. *giggles*
yes isn't it fascinating? I think if we go by how we feel our intuitions guide us, we some how 'know' intuitively what is right and what is wrong. When we react defensively it is our small personality in play, and not that it is wrong but only there to teach us more about ourselves, (what apparent struggle is there in our thoughts/beliefes?) you know?

Thankyou Pratibha, today is fourth of July (fire cracker day) hoopla!!! ^_^ do you do fireworks today too in Canada?
or an another day? I'm going to go to the end of town and maybe I will see them from a neighboring town along with the sunset oooooooooooooooooh ^_^ ^_^ ^_^
happy day sweetie, sunshine and big smiles xoxoxox

Katie, I didn't forget you.. I tried three times to leave a comment on your poem but booksie was having problems of its own. I really like this poem. Not just one line, but every line here seems to flourish within my thoughts.

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

*smiles* ^_^
oh that's ok, you know I am still trying to catch up with everything, after my computer was fixed I still had a couple long days at work plus the weather is oh so nice I have jsut HAD to be outside! ^_^ my cats wish for me to take them out on the leash but only one at a time sinse one wants to go one way and the other one another hehehehe. One day we might have a little house with our own back yard, then they can go out on thier own ^_^ . hahaha see, I am yack, yack, yacking, that is why it is taking me so long to finish up these comment box lol....oh-well.
I'm glad like this poem Vee, it's so nice that we can connect with others thoughts; our hearts song so to speak. ^_^
thenkyou so much, happy fourht of july ******* katie

Very good poem..........nice read...........

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

^_^ why thankyou subbu, I am creating some time throughout this weekend to do some reading and corresponding, I ahve not as yet read your work and am very much looking forward to it.
best wishes and will see you soon ~katie

hi! katie. u've said it, death is not an end but a lead to another lively world. well written. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

^_^ hehehe, yes a very lively one indeed ^_^
thankyou bubbly, it is taking me a few days but I am now getting to all the comments and have much reading to do as well. I see you ahve one on the front page, so I will be reading as yet today. have a wonderful fourth of July, and happy sunshine ~katie

Katie, as usual, I'm speechless. Your poetry is a breath of fresh air, and I just love it.
Personally, I'm a bit unsure of the line, "as door leading to door".... Maybe something like, "from door to door"??? I dunno. I understood exactly what you meant by it, going from one place to the next.
Anyway, I'm sorry your computer is away at the time. My boyfriend's $3,000 gaming computer had to be sent away too, so he's having to use mine for now.... Ugh.

Anyway, like I was saying, I love this poem. Beautiful and absolutely charming.

MA

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

oh, yes, I was so pleased that the price was only $30 dollars to fix it. you know it was my own fault, the thing was so slow and unresponsive so I began deleting things and unfortunately I deleted some things I should not have (oops)lol, yup, oh-well, we're all better now :)

oh, let's see door leading to door. hmmm I guess I see it as one door leads to another and another. but either way is good.
yes I know my vocabulary is not the best lololol!
well I will look at is again and see :)
anyway I am glad that you liked it, thankyou sweetie ^_^
Hey-HAPPY FIRE CRACKER DAY ^_^ ^_^ ^_^
happy smiles and lots of love....katie

Kenra
(not registered user)

Hi, This is Kenra.
Very nice poem there, easy rythm but deep in meaning..

I can't log into Booksie lately.
So I haven't been in and it's hard to put in some work, and read and all. I don't know what to do.

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Author Comment:

kenra :) HI, you can't log in? did you forget your password?
if that's all it is maybe you can ask the booksie guy.
yes you should be able to get to him by the front page there.
I sure hope you can get in soon so you can express yourself again through your poetry. thankyou very much for the nice comment. Hope you are well and having a nice fourth of July
~katie

I love your sentiments. One can glimpse the beauty and optimism of the author.

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

^_^ thankyou Anna Therese ^_^

hows your night? real good I hope :)

Katie - I love this. The tune keeps you going reagardless of the situation. Its that inner strength that we all have, but not everyone has it tuned it like you must. This wonderful and smoothly written Katie. I just love your poems!

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey ^_^ happy Friday Buttercup
yes to tune into it ^_^
I wish I could tune other people into it, today we were laughing cause you can't just say to someone: 'NOW,, get inside yourself right now' lol hmmm. you know what I mean?
to tell someone to step away from the forms and go beyond....ok, oh-well, anyway, ya, thanks so much,,
and hey, I'm still not sick yet lolololol ^_^
ok, it will be a good weekend, see ya soon ^_^
sunshine smiles and luck stars ~katie

i love the poem , significant for me too . i wake most sunday mornings to hear a brass band playing in the park opposite . it goes on and on and on but strangely , when the band have packed up and gone home . i still hear the tunes in my head , i need treatment .
lovely verses air , really enjoyed it .
terry

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

hahahahahah, well I know how that is, hahaah maybe terry that IS your treatment LOLOLOL. oh, but yes you knwo if its a good tune that's ok but if its something obnoxious then taht's another story lol. there is a comercial lets see it goes: 'first,,there was a mountian, then there was no mountain, then there was' hahahahahhaha ok, ok, it is a car commercial of course but I just LOVE that sone only I CAN NOT get it out of my head once heard LOL.

nice you live across from a Park though. :)
thankyou terry, I'll see you later on,,,,take care
peace * ~katie

Superlative writing. This one I like.

Posted: Aug 5, 2008

Author Comment:

hey, nice word 'superlative' ^_^
thankd Ken
~katie



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