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MAmberconrad challenge/Orange/Haiku

Poem By: air
Poetry


ok there are two, the first is of course about the sun duh.
and the second, well, it is about Orange sunshine, which was popular in the early 70's. "LSD" so, anyhoo, the title she gave me to write a Haiku out of is "ORANGE"
and this is it.................* View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 2, 2008    Reads: 33    Comments: 11    Likes: 8   


ORANGE

an orb seems to fall

orange glares; is it on fire?

and now it is gone~

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fear or ecstasy?

a drop of orange sunshine

oh, where could I be?


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Comments:

*Gasps*

This is soooo beautiful!!! I have goose bumps and tears in my eyes!!!

Katie, you never cease to amaze me. You have such incredible talent, a wonderful way with words, and such a romantic heart.

You took the challenge, took the bull by the horns, and totally did it!!

MA

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Lololol! *smiles*
can't wait to read the others :D

Wow katie!! :)
Beautiful haikus. I especially love the first one.

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

Author Comment:

ya, the socond is about a drug that was popular in the 70's
gee 'Orange' and the sunshine how could I not remember 'orange sunshine' ? Lol!
oh-boy, those were some days Lol!
Thankyou sweetie, yes I am off to read you guys in a moment here. :D

Oh my...i'm gasping right along beside MAmberConrad.
I flippin love it.

Great use with the letter o throughout which does not go unnoticed.

Ooooh. (pursing my lips)
Gooooood.

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

Author Comment:

*smiles* Gee, I did not know it was that good. :D
Thanks bunches ^_^

Irwin
(not registered user)

Nicely done Katie.

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

Author Comment:

^_^ Irwin, you have not tried a challenge yet?
don't be shy (hehehe) haha just kidding.
Thankyou Irwin. :)

WAHOO!!! Yipee!!! Mama Mia!! YES! YES!! YES!!!

KATIE CONQUERS THE HAIKU!!!

Wonderful haiku, Katie, with a tough title 'Orange' from MA. You've inspired me enough to believe it must almost be time for me to come up with something decent again!!! LOL

I wish for you today and always, the warmth and glow of an orange sun!!!!!.....Jerry

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Author Comment:

(gasping laughs) :D
oh Jerry you are on top of an inspiration whirl Lol!!!
hahaha I can feel it through you Lol!

come down, I can't reach you way up there, oh, nevermind, I'll just fly up with you, what the heck. ^_^

hahaha Yes "Orange" was not an easy title. at first I thought "orange" that is my worst color Lol! haha
maybe those old lsd memories Lol! but that orange sun though you know? that is a remarkable thing! Thanks Jerry, am looking forward to you guys's. see you soon...:D

Wow! beautifully written!!
So many has done this challenge and did so well!
great job!

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Author Comment:

^_^ Thankyou LeAnne :)
yes they seem to write even better when there is a challenge.
isn't it great! ^_^
I will go check yours out.

OH MY GOD KATIE, for today, i am transported to a completely new environment.....I have always loved sun and the positivity associated with Surya namaskaram....

And look your poem is posted .....

U know Katie, Baba used to say that early morning Sun comes and wakes us up and so our feet should never face towards east side....that is we should sleep with our head towards east side of the room so that Sun blesses us with positivity....
lol...there i go again...

But this is the effect SUN has on me buddy always....
I stopped doing Surya namaskaram when i joined medicals till date due to various reasons....busy, gettin up late, sleeping late due to studies etc etc etc

But this poem brought back those lovely memories of childhood back....lovely memories....

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh YES! never sleep with your feet towards the east! ^_^
I know this too! yes if you sleep with your head facing west, you will have restless sleep. it is also very good to have your head facing north ^_^
surya namaskaram "sun salutation" YES! ^_^ ^_^ ^_^

hahaha it is always so good to talk with you Pratibha ^_^
Thankyou so much, I have a so very good day ahead of me today ^_^ I hope you do too ^_^

I love this air, oranges conjure up to me just what your words do. Love the orange sunshine!

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

Author Comment:

^_^ Thanks Anna! Thanks a bunch! ^_^ ~katie

double delicious
you're very good with these

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Author Comment:

HA! it's strange how these Haikus come out like that for me?
I never much understood them, and then when they became popular here, well you see what happened. You are one of the "Grand Masters" of these ^_^
dang, well I jsut got home and I gotta look up "odes" still
hmmm you say: 'in awe of yourself' oh no LOLOLOLOLOL!
well, I have ideas, ok (giggling) if this is real hard for me, you just wait and see what kind of challenge I send you
Lolololollololololol! ok, love you bunches *

My my...this is amazing. Perfect haiku format- and so beautifully and thoughtfully written. Simply cannot wait to read more.

Much love
Ash

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

^_^ well, Thankyou Ashleigh!
you give me a big smile ^_^
~katie



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