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What Are These Hands?

Poem By: Aislin Kane
Poetry


Tags: faith, question

Questioning faith View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Feb 1, 2008    Reads: 148    Comments: 5    Likes: 3   


What are these hands
but idle toys,
with mastery of my universe
forfeit to divine creation,
and free will
subject to the purpose
of exaltation and worship,
salvation and damnation,
my person
captured in a purgatory of the living.
a physical limbo
a social war
waged against a realm of possibilities,
what ifs
and maybes,
maybe not’s
and if so’s,
punished by belief
and fervent opinion,
ropes of intolerance
and whips denying
the evils of uncertainty,
brutal tongue lashings,
cursing a soul seemingly
tainted,
a war against
the fear of inevitability,
the uncertainty of hopes
driven into minds and hearts
as divine gifts
empty promises
filled with meaning
by devotion,
empowered by imagination,
the void of
crucial humanly aspects,
But No,
I am wrong,
a corruption to young minds,
forsaking grace and eternal life,
an enemy of faith,
damned by conviction,
prisoner of proposed fate.
So what are these hands
if not but idle toys?


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Comments:

Bloody brilliant piece, well written. A bit self contradictive at points, it seems, but the general idea remains apperent. I liked this piece a lot. Keep writing.

Posted: Feb 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

The way forward for humanity is the knowledge that there is no God, we must be our own God and create better lives for ourselves instead of going to churches and having all these holy wars.

Posted: Feb 9, 2008

I love the way your words just flow so beautifully together. And the point you make is fantastic!

Posted: Mar 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you!

:) I loved it. This is my kind of poetry. I like poetry that not only has feeling, but means something and makes the reader think.

Your words captivated me and have inspired me as well. The language you used is brilliant!

If I must say so, this is probably one of the most promising pieces I have read on Booksie so far. Well done. If only more people could communicate more through their writing in 155 words or less, just like you have. :)

( And yes, I did count how many words you used...about 155)

Posted: May 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Well, thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it and thought it was good. XD, if only I could've saved you the trouble of counting the words...

Ha! I love it. Your word choice evokes very vivid images, and I couldn't agree more with the message. I also like the way you conveyed your opinion strongly, but without slapping the reader in the face with it. Take Care.

Posted: Nov 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey, thanks for the comment! I'm glad you liked it.



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