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Bullets for Smiles

Poem By: Aleksander Azrael
Poetry


A poem about removing all of one's fears and doubts. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 8, 2008    Reads: 45    Comments: 8    Likes: 4   


I know that it might be strange,

To ask this small favor of you,

I’m sure you have better things to do,

And I certainly don’t want to waste your time,

So please, take this gun from my hand,

And put a bullet in head.

 

Please lift this heavy iron,

And pull the hairline trigger,

Please remove all these faithless voices,

And all the pathetic doubts,

Once this is done, please lower the gun,

And shoot another into my chest.

 

Let the bullet rip through the flesh and bone,

Destroying all the worthless fear,

And all the pointless worries,

In exchange for these two bullets,

I can only offer you this smile,

I hope it will be enough.

 

Thank you for your assistance,

My anonymous, passing friend,

You have been such a great help,

Here, I’ll give you another smile,

Completely free of charge,

You can even keep the gun, if you want.

 

I don’t need, or want it, anymore,

You’ve killed my personal beast of despair,

Thanks to you, there’s nothing to hold me back,

So go ahead and keep the gun,

Because you may need to ask the same favor,

Of another anonymous, passing friend.


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Comments:

Hi Alek - I swear you're getting better at this all the time. At first it was so sad, until I realized it was about destroying a personal demon. I think this poem is awesome. Seriously, you have limitless talent I think. :)

Posted: Apr 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Well, I wouldn't say my talent is limitless, but thanks anyway for your sweet comments. I always look forward to them.

This was a very good poem. I liked it.

Posted: Apr 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Well thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

In exchange for these two bullets,
I can only offer you this smile

-alek, these are wonderful words from a very talented poet such as yourself =)

I loved the idea of the poem and how you presente it. Well done!

Stay safe.^^

Posted: Apr 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Well thank you. I'm really glad you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for your comments. I always look forward to them.

Interesting to ask that kind of favor from another person.

Posted: Apr 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Indeed.

Interesting of you not to ask a friend, but a stranger.
So to speak.

This poem is outstanding.
The line length, the metaphors, the visuals...perfect.

Posted: Apr 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Although I don't think it's perfect, I am proud of this one. Thank you for your nice comment.

Oh...how I wish...and I will do as you ask only because I need to die myself...or at least the part of me that's already dead for it's a weight of blinding sorrow pointed at my head

JoKa
Evelyn

Posted: Apr 10, 2008

Author Comment:

I hope that means that you like the poem?????

really great poem, i can relate to it very well! I enjoyed it very very much!!! thumbs up!!

Posted: Apr 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much. I'm glad that you could connect with my piece.

Yes, I agree with all above, an excellent poem quite beautifully written. One I can relate to.

Posted: Apr 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Well thank you. I'm glad you can relate to my work. Thanks for reading.

Alek Azrael



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