wow wow wow. you're my hero, i love you and your magnificent writing. [:

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

I am certain that many on here have mentioned this, but you truly do have a remarkable talent that I certainly hope you will not allow to go to waste. As far as the "Shakespearean" language, I think that you might have pushed a little too hard with the personal pronouns (thee and thy, etc.) but not enough to detract from the poem

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Dreams tied in crimson ribbons of bliss,
True love's kiss,
Oh sweetest angel, cradle me in thine arms,
Let us escape from reality's harms

That was my favorite part..:D
I have to agree with clslater about the thee and thine part, but I still liked this poem alot

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Together we will fade into galaxies afar,
You, my angel and I, your star

-This is my favorite line alice! =)
Hahahaha! So we both like angels, now don't we? hahahahaha! ^^

Great read. I actually liked the Shakespearean language. ^^

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Got any room in the trunk, for that trip to the heavens.

Posted: Apr 8, 2008

ok, first of all, you left me COMPLETELY speachless. Honeslty like, I don`t know what to say. It was the most beautiful thing I`ve EVER read, not just on Booksie, in ,my life. NO JOKE. It was amazing, I can`t believe it, i think my heart is aching. lol. Yòu`re on fire, lmao, don`t stop now.
Steph:)

Posted: Apr 8, 2008

this is a really beautiful poem..the language and images are perfect..i love the last line, there's so much longing and passion in it..i will read this over, and over again!!!!!

Posted: Apr 8, 2008

A strong poem filled with emotion. Very Nicely done. *I like it Vote*

Posted: Apr 8, 2008

This is so beautiful. I tend to relate poems I read to a song that I know. And this poem reminds me of Into the Night, one of my favorite songs! It's so romantic and romantic like. Sorry, I'm having a hard time explain this. I also like to put colors to poems or stories. This poem is off white, pale almost silver gold and an icy sea blue! And that's a good thing, some of my favorite colors to describe a poem.

This comment might be a tad confusing but these are the just the things that came into my mind when I read it. If you're curious, your Eternal Trilogy's colors are a sand color and forest green ^.^ yup. That's about it!

Posted: Apr 9, 2008

Hugs and Kisses has an interesting way of looking at it, but its a good way to express how we see a poem. I'm going to give it a try; I imagined the colour to be a yellow white with tinges of a passionate red to express the more intimate parts. Beautiful!!!

I have to agree with Punishment, my favourite lines were:
"Together we will fade into galaxies afar,
You, my angel and I, your star,"

You are doing great with your poems!!! Thanks for the invite, feel free to ask whenever you feel i will like something ^^

Posted: Apr 9, 2008

wow, this is an amazing poem! i thought it was really good!! great written!

Posted: Apr 10, 2008

I think this is your best work ever in the history of everness. This was so awesome! This like #1! For just trying out Shakespearean language it was so wonderful! And I'm an obsessed with Shakespeare, so it was awesome! The words to describe, and the imagery...oh the imagery was so beautiful! And I could picture the whole story, the whole thing in my mind. It was very very lovely:D

Posted: Apr 14, 2008

One day these shackles that hold me back will shatter

And I will be free,

Hi Birdie.....I liked this line....loved it actually....

The shakespearean accent swet me off my feet and I reached back to my high school period.

Posted: Apr 16, 2008

WOW...i love this...its really good!

Posted: Apr 17, 2008

It's a good poem..

Posted: Apr 17, 2008

O.O that was incredible

Posted: Apr 19, 2008

hahaha first of all, the note.. i like using Shakespearean as well.. =) it was used throughout the poem very very well.. now for the poem, i love it.. angels are.. DANG! you know? lol.

i absolutely adore the last line!! very romantic.. =)

Posted: Apr 28, 2008

Thus with a kiss I die.. It reminded me of Romeo and his Juliet..
We share the same hope, to speak like Shakespeare..

Very, very touching. Lovely poem.

Posted: May 2, 2008

P.S.
Gave it an I Like It vote.

Posted: May 2, 2008

Beautifullly written! Love it! Great great great job!
Broken Silences =)

Posted: May 3, 2008

Wonerfully composed, bravo!!! I loved it!!!

Posted: May 3, 2008

first of yours I have read... although I have to agree with others here you pushed the fews words a bit much, however the way you spun the words impressed me and moved me... the amount of comments shows the merit of the piece.... good job!... write on my friend!

Posted: May 4, 2008

I'm speechless, that has to be the greatest poem I have ever read in my life. You are one talented teenager...wow..wow

Posted: May 10, 2008

Wow, this was such a deep, and beautiful poem. Your wtiring style is so unique! I love it! Outstanding piece, here. :)

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

Absolutely inspirational =]
Well done.
Love it =D
x

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

So beautiful, alice (i beleive they call you birdy?)....you have such an insane amount of talent! Just one place where you should've used 'thou' instead of 'thee'...(fourth line from the end)..but i only picked it up because i'm such a shakespeare junkie...hehe. Lovely work, regardless.

Much love
Ash

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Hello,
very very nice. It was so romantic and wistful you've incorporated elements of longing and despair so subtely in this piece, like a true master. bravo!
just one thing i would like to point out, why not make the stanza's more or less the same length that is 4 lines, or if not maybe you could make it 4 3 4 3 and so on. This way i think the pace and rhythym of this piece will improve further, it will flow more fluently and naturally. Plus i think poems that evoke the feel of old world poetry like urs do better with an exact symmetry.

Posted: Jun 12, 2008

did you just said kiss? lips? hmmm... ahah! sweet!
want some chocolates?

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Amazing! You have got a great gift for writing. Keep it up!

Posted: Jun 29, 2008

this is great. loved it.
tillz

Posted: Jul 2, 2008