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Her Four Seasons

Poem By: Alice Oiseau
Poetry


Goes through the four seasons and the growing up of a young girl. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 6, 2008    Reads: 96    Comments: 8    Likes: 5   


Her Four Seasons
 
Autumn leaves fall to the ground,
Where children jump in collected piles, laughter is found,
The trees painted orange, red, and gold
The memories she will cherish and hold,
Windbreakers to shield her from a chilly breeze,
There a child sits on her knees,
A wood burning aroma carries in the air,
Where she bows her head –
Her head of ribbons and bows tangles in her hair,
And the sun goes to bed,
Dawn breaks and light gleams,
Daylight grows short and through clouds by midday the sun gleams,
Winter knocks at her door,
A season a child couldn’t love more,
Snowflakes dance and twirl as they fall,
Jack Frost makes his call,
Snow angels and snowmen,
Snowball wars with armies of ten,
Cozy fires,
Children’s desires,
Bitter cold and wicked breeze,
Tickles her nose and makes her sneeze,
After the day is done and said,
She goes to lay down her head,
With dreams of bliss, she takes flight,
And wakes up to spring’s delight,
Spring is a time of rebirth and beginning anew,
Where flowers blossom and bloom,
Warm rain storms and showers,
Roses, daffodils, lilies and all the flowers,
The earth covered in green, a color of life,
Mother Nature’s sign that she made it through winter’s strife,
A young girl closes her eyes,
And there she kisses spring goodbye,
Summer welcomes her with joy,
Young love is found in a boy,
She opens her heart to the blazing sun,
Where summer nights grow long and fun,
Clear starry skies,
With 85 for a high,
Swimming pools where water caresses her skin,
Another year older and another one of her journeys begins.


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Comments:

I like the fact that I have discovered on here a young writer that is touch with her ability to see life as it is, and not through the tunnel vision many of the younger writers do. It is refreshing...BTW...a high of 85 in the summer? You must not be from the south! 85 is a cold front during the summer! (should sound familiar...you asked for reposts!)

Posted: Apr 6, 2008

Author Comment:

ah thank you! haha you're so kind. i'm glad you read my news. and now i will repeat my response, well what i remember of it that is (ha): ah yeah i'm from good old missouri where we have bipolar weather. 85 is a high one day. and then the low the next. haha

In all of the things of yours that I've read, I have to say your strongest skill is your imagery. This poem is no different; you're pretty good at painting vivid pictures with just a handful of words. Good stuff! :)

Posted: Apr 6, 2008

Author Comment:

aww thank you! *bows* imagery is one of my first goals. :)

Alice thanks for visiting me so I could in turn read your poems. I really like this, cleverly and with effective imagery intertwining life with the seasons. I love the transgression into summer and your ending where the girl "opens her heart to the blazing sun".

Posted: Apr 8, 2008

Author Comment:

oo thank you! i love the way you described it "imagery intertwining life with the seasons" - a lovely way to put it.

this is a really touching poem. it sounds sort of like an old counrty song, lol. it's very very sweet. i really like the part, "Swimming pools where water caresses her skin,". it's a lovely way of putitng it.

Posted: Apr 12, 2008

Author Comment:

aw thank you. you're so sweet

The trees painted orange, red, and gold...

Dawn breaks and light gleams..

I also had the trip of all 4 seasons through ur vision....

I am not tired of voting all ur writings as "I like it"

Birdie....i really loved all the seasons even the depressing winter...thanks

Posted: Apr 19, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you for the votes. they are always appreciated. depressing winter? i thought winter was a rather blissful season as described in the poem. i guess you don't like winter, eh?

Oh, wow... This gives you an amazing mental picture. What great imagery... And you have a great way of writing every single describing word possible, such as in the second-to-last-line,
"Swimming pools where water caresses her skin"

An amazing piece of work - keep it up!

:)

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

aw thanks ^^ i will admit, imagery is a forte of mine. ha, everything else is all right, but i'm glad you enjoyed it! thank you so much for the sweet comment!

I love the way you make the person reading the poem feel like their right there, experiancing it all, its wonderful!I wish I could do that with my writing lol! keep it up!

Posted: Jun 12, 2008

Author Comment:

lol thanks!! i didn't know i brought the reader right there so they could experience it too.. :)
thank you leah!!

LOVE IT!! so well described... great metaphor..

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Author Comment:

aw well thank you! ^^ glad you liked it :D



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