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Memoirs of an Angry Heart

Poem By: Alice Oiseau
Poetry


This is my time to break away...
This bird has taken flight...

"I once wrote a poem with absolutely no topic in mind, I just let the words flow and eventually it came to be Screaming Silence. Have you read it? It's a poem full of torture and anger and agony, I wasn't feeling any of those emotions that day. People told me that I wasn't the one who was writing. It was my heart, trying to come out and say how tortured it really feels inside. So about your poem now, don't try to stop any sudden change of emotion. It's your heart at work" - Punishment

These words stopped me from holding it all back. I was about to change it because I was rather worried since the poem was coming off with a rather angry tone. My heart was at work when writing this though, and I didn't supress my heart and the emotions bottling in it, and I got this in return - a poem that to me, is more than words.
Thank you Punishment. ^^
Now
First of all, this poem may not be my best. It may be poor. Don't expect something breathtaking... because I honestly don't think it's that wonderful.
Secondly, because this came from my heart and not from my creative mind, there's so much meaning and significance behind it to me. I wrote it because I needed to get it out. I've held this poem in me for so long and I was ready to explode. There will probably be more to come about this particular event in my life because it had a huge impact on me.
Third, you may or may not pick up everything. It's impossible to know the details. The poem is rather general.

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Submitted: Apr 25, 2008    Reads: 484    Comments: 24    Likes: 10   


Memoirs of an Angry Heart

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This is my Curtain Call and Bow.
This is my Renaissance.
It’s raining now,
But all the raindrops in the world
couldn’t equal the amount of tears I’ve shed over you…
 
She was a porcelain doll,
You invited her in, held her, and let her fall.
                      *
You were her everything.
You tempted her by playing the Snake,
Little did she know that your smiles, your words, and all your promises were fake.
                      *
You wanted to break her, that porcelain doll,
You wished to hurt her,
Planned to use her…
Planned to abuse her
You longed to rip her heart apart,
And you did it so discreetly.
                     *
She became afraid.
Your cold and cruel hands
– get them away!
She clenches her fists
When you grip her wrists.
                     *
She pushed you out,
“Let me be,” she would plead,
But it didn’t matter how loud she would shout,
You still carried out your deed.
                    *
Lies! Lies! Lies!
Just go away!
                    *
She thought you were a gentleman,
Thought you were kind and respectful,
So she thought…
Your true colors were revealed,
You hurt her terribly,
And these emotional wounds may never heal.
                   *
Crushed her dreams.
Stomped on her beliefs.
Locked her in darkness.
She thought she would never see the light again…
                   *
She’s running.
From you.
From life.
So sick of this…
She’s screaming!
She’s breaking on the inside!
There’s nowhere to hide.
                  *
You were everything.
Now you are nothing.
                  *
She trembles.
She cries.
She’s suffocating because of you!
                  *
She will rinse this all away…
She will paint you black.
You held her heart in your hands,
And you squeezed it until she couldn’t take it!
 Couldn’t fake it.
                  *
Oh how she wanted to be free,
Wanted eternal slumber,
Anything would have been better than this
 – Her dance with Lucifer and his ice cold kiss.
 You knew she was fragile and vulnerable,
But you kept pushing –
Going further –
                 *
You persisted to hurt her,
She was drowning,
And you held her down under the water!
                *
Wretched Devil,
Stay away!
Your heart is black.
You killed her,
But when she came face to face with her death,
She was revived.
She doesn’t need you.
She doesn’t want you.
                *
She’s stronger.
She’s wiser.
She’s learned a great deal.
And now she’s more awake than ever before.
Nevermore
Will she cry over you.
She’s done, finished and through.
Once she would have laid down and died for you,
Once.
But not anymore…
              *
She gave it her all,
She began to stand tall,
Put forth her strength and might,
And she broke through the darkness
And found the light.
             *
She was…
Your doll.
Your toy.
Your lies.
Your marionette!
But never even a friend.
 
In the end she just wanted to fly,
In the end…
 
I spread my broken wings and said goodbye…


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Comments:

That poem held a lot of depth and you could truly feel the emotion pouring from within it. As you said, it is not necissarily a poem of wonderful articulation but it was extremly powerful and a breath-taking poem. Poem's are a wonrful way of expressing what truly lies in oyur heart. They are a way of getting out what you need to get out. They are a way of sorting out a jumble of knots, into a row of less confusing lines of order. Woderful poem. Well done. :)

Posted: Apr 26, 2008

Author Comment:

yes indeed and thats what this poem was - a way to say what i needed to say. thank you eternal night!

Doesn't it feel good to have written something out of your heart? ^^ I'm glad to have read a piece of your soul alice.

It was a great read. Wonderful even.^^ I felt your urge to break away and let go of the man who ruined your heart..

Alice, thank you for trusting me. What you have here is poem not from your creative streaks or from your powerful imagery, it is a poem flowing from the depths of your heart.

Keep writing poems alice (whether from your heart or from your creative imagery) because you seem to be very talented in both. ^^

Take care always alice.
^^

Posted: Apr 26, 2008

Author Comment:

aw thank you!!! but you know i couldnt have done it without your encouraging words. thanks punishment!!

OH MY GOSH ALICE! that was incredible. thumbs up to punishment for unleashing this side of you cuz WOW.

She was a porcelain doll,
You invited her in, held her, and let her fall.

were my favourite lines, so sad and powerful, made me really *feel* if that makes any sense.
Beautiful Alice. Simply divine!
Steph:)

Posted: Apr 26, 2008

Author Comment:

awwww thank you!!!!
i love your comments! i'm glad you really liked it... i dont think its my best, but i'm glad i wrote it and i'm glad punishment told me to not worry about the emotion coming out of it.
thanks for reading hon!!

My favorite lines were the same as Steph's...just so you know ^.^ this is such an empowering poem! I feel so good now. Like at the beginning I got all depressed and stuff and then by the last stanza I felt all empowered and LOOK OUT WORLD-y. Anyway, this was such a good poem and anyone could relate to at least some part of it. Anyway, I'm leaving soon *screams* so yuppers ^_^

Posted: Apr 27, 2008

Author Comment:

aw thank you!! empowering? yay!! haha glad you liked it.
you're leaving?!?! *gasps* NO! where to?? and how long?

This is my Curtain Call and Bow.
This is my Renaissance.
It’s raining now,
But all the raindrops in the world
couldn’t equal the amount of tears I’ve shed over you…

She’s stronger.
She’s wiser.
She’s learned a great deal.
And now she’s more awake than ever before.

You thought this wasn't WONDERFUL?? Alice, this is the most strongest, most emotional, most actual poem I've ever read in my life. This is not words on paper. These are not emotions thrown to be put away. This is a masterpiece. This is a historical piece. This is a piece that should always be read, remembered, and loved. Alice this was I think your best piece yet. And thank you Punishment for believing in her. This side of you...the parts that come from the heart...they're so much more out there and strong. They are really thrown out at you. I cried. Literally. This poem made me cry. It reminds me of how I feel. I feel like that. Hurt. Drowning. The feeling of suffocating beneath the invisible darkness. I'm sorry if you feel this way. This poem really opened up my eyes. It really made me think stronger about everything. About life. About the emotions I feel. About how I take them in. About poetry. Screaming out your emotions like that was so wonderful that I have no more words. I can't even fathom the amount of feelings I have for this beautiful poem. Don't ever stop writing Alice. If you do I will track you down and smack you silly until you do. Your writing is so magnificent...it should already be published.
I love this poem so much:D
You are just so talented it's unbelievable. Great job, and never give up.

Posted: Apr 27, 2008

Author Comment:

0_0
i think thats one of the longest comments i've ever gotten.
lol
and one of the nicest (real word?) things anyone has said!
*faints in happiness*
i'm so happy that you thought it was a masterpiece. yes, i dont think its wonderful but apparently it is. thank you for the sweet comment zoe! omg! i can't believe the poem made you cry! i had no idea it was that strong. but i'm so glad you liked it. :)
well today i dont feel this way. lol i'm actually quite a cheerful person. but like i said, my heart was at work when i wrote this... and apparently, deep down, my heart was raging with anger because of what this guy had done to me. he would be who the "you" is directed at. and because punishment encouraged me to write it, all the anger was unleashed onto my notebook paper. but i wasn't angry when i was writing it... its like my heart told my hand what to write. not my mind. its a rather interesting experience.
ahahaha you will smack me silly? dont worry! i will NEVER stop writing. its been about 8 years since i started. why stop now? :) and you better never stop writing either! or i'll track you down and smack you silly! =P
once again, thank you for the lovely comment. XD

Lionheart
(not registered user)

Finally letting go huh?

I have to say, writing pieces from impulse come out better than planned pieces. ESPECIALLY YOURS!!! Punishment is right, whether it be creative or from the heart you write well.
That last line cut really deep! What an ending...
It was a very powerful piece because you could tell it was written from the heart and there wer no overwhelming words to complicate it. It was simple language to show how you really are.
Great job, its nice to see something like this from you and that guy should be into a pit of jagged bananas!!! [gasp]

Posted: Apr 28, 2008

Author Comment:

yup. i'm finally letting go!
aw and thank you!! i find that writing from impulse so much more emotional and has more depth to it. planned pieces are nice but for me they lack that connection about poetry that gives it its depth.
hahahaha yes he should be put in a pit of jagged bananas!!! lol but unfortunately i can't exactly throw him in one. but he's leaving for college soon so he'll be out of my life for a loooooong time. XD haha
thank you for reading lionheart! i always appreciate your comments b/c you always give me great feedback!! =)

hi, ok this is a good piece of writing, maybe not your best – which only shows how strong your writing is – but this piece is full of really strong emotion. Alice I think the first few stanzas are as good if not better than anything you have written

This is my Curtain Call and Bow.
This is my Renaissance.
It’s raining now,
But all the raindrops in the world
Couldn’t equal the amount of tears I’ve shed over you…

She was a porcelain doll,
You invited her in, held her, and let her fall.
*
You were her everything.
You tempted her by playing the Snake,
Little did she know that your smiles, your words, and all your promises were fake.

*

That first stanza is actually stunning, worthy of any great poet, and throughout this poem you show glimpses of brilliance. I just think that as the poem goes on you loose a bit of control and you seem to get a bit lost in the emotion. Maybe at times there’s too much anger and emotion being expressed. If you could have carried on the metaphor of the porcelain doll a bit stronger you would have had a stunning poem. Sometimes the strongest emotion can be devastating in just a few words or stanzas. I understand this idea of letting go of your emotions I just believe it needs to be tempered with a bit more control. To produce a really powerful poem you need to work hard. Yes have an initial outpouring of emotion, write down everything in your heart, but then build it up, work it into metaphors like the metalworker in his smithy, beating the iron until it takes the exact shape he/she desires. Poetry is hard work, especially to produce fantastic works. You certainly have the ability Alice, I love your work (as you know) and I see flashes of genius there. Sometimes we can spend hours, days, weeks writing just a few lines or a phrase, just so it can sound like a moments thought to the reader.
As writers and poets we put our hearts and souls into every piece we write, or at least every piece we publish, that’s why I don’t understand these comments saying its good you’ve written from the heart? Isn’t everything we write from the heart? I don’t see any difference between this and your create imagination. They are both born from the same place. They are both products of instinct. The only difference that I see is that one can ramble away into nothingness while the other takes form and structure through a certain amount of control. As far as I can tell Alice all your poetry is written from the heart, through your creative imagination and into the world. That’s why I find myself inspired by your work. Don’t neglect control though. Make sure you are in control of your pen, make words obey your call.
I am a sucker for metaphors tho and I can’t get this one of the porcelain doll out of my mind. To me the subject of this poem using that metaphor over four or five stanzas would have or would make a stunning poem. I hope I haven’t been a little harsh here Alice, you know I love your writing, and will read it over and over again!!!

Posted: Apr 30, 2008

Author Comment:

haha not too harsh at all. i can take it like a man! :) ok first of all - THANK YOU for the solid feedback!!!!!!!!!! of course i love all the flattering comments but i love constructive criticism just as much. so THANK YOU!!!
mk. now, secondly: the first stanza is my personal favorite. i wanted to write the whole poem using the metaphor of the porcelain doll, but as you noted, i got caught up in the emotion and lost control of that specific metaphor. when i sat down to write this, i wanted to make it all about the porcelain doll. but i couldn't seem to find all the inspiration for a poem about that one metaphor. so then i just let it all out and poured it all into this... which resulted in a not so orderly and nicely structured poem.
i do put my heart into almost all my work, but i've noticed a difference from writing with my mind than with my heart. this poem came almost entirely from my heart. hence all the emotion. some of my other poems were written from my mind, they are more structured and yes they have clips of emotion, but its not my emotions. i'm the kind of person who writes more about other people and what i observe than my own emotions. and thats why this poem is written from my heart, because it comes from MY emotions. get it? kinda? sorta? i'm not the best at explaining stuff... but i think you understand what i'm saying.

ahah, yes poetry is hardwork and i'm sure i could have molded it to be exactly how i wanted it to be (which would be just the porcelain doll metaphor) but i didn't take the time. sometimes i lack patience with my work, which is one of my weaknesses. and its something i definately need to work on. i'm slowly getting there, but i have a long way to go before i can mold the iron how i want it to be precisely.
i will try to be more in control of my pen. i tend to have a better grasp on it when writing from my mind whereas heart, as you mentioned, can allow you to open up and ramble.

glad to hear that you love metaphors. i'm a sucker for them too. :)
anyways.
long comment and long reply. but i'm SO happy that you provided me with honest feedback and constructive criticism. you've pointed out some things to me, that i usually look over and don't pay too much attention to. and with more practice, i can improve and learn from my mistakes, making me a stronger writer. ^^ i will definately try to apply the suggestions and tips discussed in my next poem which is going to be Part 3 of this - the last and final one of these memoirs.
once again, i can't thank you enough matthew! you've really helped me out here and i'll definately be taking much from this comment to help me grow in my writing - not just in my poetry but in whatever else i write.
thanks a million!! and would you look at this! i've just about reached the reply limit. 95 freaking percent! ciao! ;)

*I like it* powerful poem but yet darkly beautiful as well. Very unique in strength and flow. the readers can be captivated by the style and grace of the poem. write on.
p.s. adding it to reading list to read again.

Posted: May 3, 2008

Author Comment:

"darkly beautiful" i believe i haven't heard that one yet. thank you for the kind comment! ^^

I like how you mentioned in your summary that you "didn't hold anything back" in this poem. I think like Matthew mentioned, poems are meant to carry those kinds of feelings in them. I've written some things like this before, and it just feels GOOD to write how you feel on a piece of paper; it helps put everything in perspective, and usually I realize that it's not so bad. I can tell you were feeling really strongly about things in this poem, and I can certainly understand reluctance for showing other people these kinds of intimate emotions, but sometimes I think it's important to write without worrying about what your audience may think, as these are often the most genuine pieces around. Thanks for sharing! I'll be reading the other two parts :)

Posted: May 4, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! yeah, i let loose on my emotions and it took a while before i felt able to write about it after everything. i just had bottled it all up once it was all over. just kind of sucked it up and dealt with it. its like holding your breath for so long and then you just can't hold it any longer. and you release and you feel so much better b/c you can breathe again, and you ask yourself, why did i ever try holding it for so long in the first place?
thanks for the read and comment ^^

I Like It vote for you, birdie..

I'll read the rest first..

Posted: May 6, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! much appreciated ^^

Oh my gosh! Such a beautiful poem-- so sooooo beautiful! It was sad and dark at the beginning with a man full of decietful smiles and eyes gleaming in the candle light full of promising lies. And then at the end-- the sound of "I Hate Everything About You" came and the girl spread her wings and flew away^_^! I absolutely loved the rhyming going on. I liked how you compared the girl's fragileness with a porcelain doll, and how at the end she flies away. The beginning was really really beautiful too. It was like a splash of the sea breeze-- it pulled me right in.

Lot's of special chocolate to you,

Ghiradelli Girl.

Posted: May 6, 2008

Author Comment:

awww thanks ghiradelli girl!!
i love that song! haha but yes, that song does kind of follow the poems. the theme of it anyway. ooo a splash of the sea breeze, beautiful comparison. ^^ thanks again!!

wow. honestly sweetie; i think this is one of the best pieces that i have ever read from you. it's moving and powerful. I get the essence of her pain in a way in which i can relate. i'm off to read more of your writing. way to totally not update me! ]:

Posted: May 6, 2008

Author Comment:

awww thank you cris!!
i always find that a poem is so much more meaningful when you yourself can relate to it. so i'm glad you can relate, yet its a sad experience to go through.
ahh! and i'm SO sorry i didn't update you!!! *cries* can you ever forgive me? *puppy eyes*

Alice, I wish I could hug you right now. This poem touched me in ways you'll never know. I know what your going through. I know how it feels to be manipulated and deceived into doing something you weren't ready for. Nevermind the outline or your use of words. You can plan a poem for days and months but it will never be as powerful as one written on the spur of the moment...100% from your heart. I salute you for letting go. I wish I had the courage to let some things go but luckily Booksie and writing gives us a positive way to get release on those feelings. I hope to read more of you "heart" poems. You are a true and talented writer.

love Lien

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you lien!! aw you're so sweet! yeah it can be rough but i'm glad the poem touched you in so many ways! take care and dont forget to SMILE! :D

Very good piece, strong and fraught with emotion. Was this therapeutic for you Alice? 33 thumbs up.

Posted: May 10, 2008

Author Comment:

haha yes it was therapeutic! and it helped soooo much! thank you eric!!

cool!!! really long long way to go

Posted: May 11, 2008

Author Comment:

ahah yeah.
but thanks for the read and comment ^^

oh wow, this is really really good! it's full of deep emotio and heart! it's just fantastic! Wonderful job, you're an amazing writer!

Posted: May 19, 2008

Author Comment:

haha thanks seesawmae!!

That was really inspiriing. I enjoyed every minute of it. It was beautiful, even while being a little dark. It could really connect to a lot of readers. There was a couple of lines that really made the poem.

She was a porcelain doll,
You invited her in, held her, and let her fall

You were everything.
Now you are nothing.

She gave it her all,
She began to stand tall,
Put forth her strength and might,
And she broke through the darkness
And found the light.

Those three were my favorite sections, such strong emotion!

(I would be honored if you would read some of my poetry in return, but you don't have to.)


Great work!

Posted: May 27, 2008

Author Comment:

aw thank you very much ^^ being able to connect is one of the beauties of writing.
lovely sections you chose as favorites. "you were everything. now you are nothing" is one of my personal favorite lines.
i'll definately check out your poetry when i find the time... time is always the enemy. haha but i promise i'll get around to it, and i keep my promises 100%
thanks again and take care :)

That was deep and sensible. You seemed to get drowned into the depth of your emotion. They say that a person's greatest enemy is himself and his emotions. But you were brave enough to face them and let them out. I admire you, Alice! Great work! :-)

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

Author Comment:

oo thank you! you know, that phrase is really true. its the emotions that are the scary part. its hard to face.
thanks again :)

Emotions are hard sometimes to put on paper especially when it hurts and burns to think what you've been through, but the way you've written this truly defines a brilliant master piece, I admire your courage and strengh, all your writting is beautiful put this tops the charts, please let me know when you have more. =)

Posted: Jun 12, 2008

Author Comment:

oh thank you! well, the memoirs of an angry heart is a 3 part poetry trilogy, just so you know.
thank you so much! yes, emotions can be hard to put on paper before you, especially if its something so personal. but i'm glad you thought i did well.
have a nice day leah!

BEautiful. How could you not think that this wasn't great? I loved it. You captured the emotion perfectly. GReat Job!

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you ^^ sometimes i get iffy about my poetry lol
some people say i'm too hard on myself... but whatever.
haha
thanks again!

Wow, such long comments! sorry for this short one then! I LOVE IT!!!!
With Unbroken Love,
KR

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Author Comment:

lol haha yes, there are many long comments, but no need to be sorry ^^
thank you KR! your comments are always appreciated! :)

I can tell you put so much of yourself in this. You've expressed your pain so beautifully. Love, or what you think is love can just completely destroy you. There's always gonna be people out there who have no intention of loving you, even when you think they do. It's so tragic. Thank you for being honest.

Posted: Aug 25, 2008

Author Comment:

love was the last thing on his mind... *sigh* but anyways... yes, this situation is tragic. glad you liked it :) t'is only part 1 of 3 if you care to read the rest of the trilogy ^^
thanks bluebear

Jamie
(not registered user)

hey there. I absolutely love this poem. It is completely amazing. I am a forensics participant, almost 16 years old, and I was dating a guy within the last year that was horrible for me. We dated for sixth months, on and off becuase he kept dumping me. All my friends were mad cause I deserved better, he was hurting me, and even tho i saw it happening, i refused to let him go because i loved him too much and i couldnt picture my life without him. over this past summer, i finally let him go. after i found out he had cheated on me with a girl at my school who used to be my best friend and then turned on me and threatend to kill me. The last time I say him, almost three months now, was a night in july. I slaped him across the face and walked away. And I have never been more proud of myself.

Anyways, i think your poem is amazing, and i feel that i can kinda relate to it with the multitude of things ive been thru. I was wondering if you wouldnt mind if i possibly used this poem as part of a forensics peice. I thought Id ask your permission. I would be using your name with it and giving you credit.

Posted: Sep 27, 2008

Author Comment:

wow thank you :)
you go girl! thats the spirit! i never got to slap this guy, though i wish i would have. instead i just told him it was over and i was through with his games. but i'm so glad you found the courage to march up to him and slap him. he deserved it. i felt the same way. i couldn't imagine my life without him, but he treated me so poorly, and i knew it in the back of my mind, but i just didn't want to let it go because there was the "what if" playing in my head. i'm sorry though that he treated you horribly. tsk tsk. but it's great that you finally stood up to him. bravo!

you have my permission, thank you for asking. please do include my name and the credit. maybe word will spread and reach a publisher - farfetched, but you never know.

take care ^^

Jamie
(not registered user)

haha. thanks for the permission. and idk. but people compliment our peices all the time. ill be like. yeah i got it from someone who posted it online and it was awesome! WOOT!

and there is nothing sweeter than revenge. lmao!

Posted: Sep 29, 2008

Author Comment:

hahahaha XD

you're very welcome ^^



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