Alice miss Alice; if you don't mind I would like to suggest adding a couple of words to make it the true haiku form of 5, 7, 5

if you were to place the word 'cut' in the first line
'such biting words cut' would amke it 5 syllables
in the second line:
'seethe and desperse from cold lips' would make 7 syllables
The third line does have 5 syllables but I wondered about the word 'caress' though I am sure you know sinse it is personal. I thought of
delve into the soul' cause I thought if the words were mean then what would they do to the soul you know?
although I guess that you could think that the soul would caress the words? haahah ok enough thinking for now lol. take care have great day
~katie

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

Wow, you must have had one hell of a mix of feelings there - personally for me, no biting words could ever caress my soul - as soon as there is any indication of such a behaviour, I tend to unsheath my fangs and give a bite for every bite! Good to know that you are where you ought to be now as far as emotions are concerned. Alice, it's really good to see you back on your feet.

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

A form of romance dance

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

LOL, Haiku shmaiku, I think we can make up our own rules sometimes. hahaha, no, no don't worry at all.
the poem stands even so.
takes some 'thinking' to understand that last line?
well thanks alot LOLOLOLOLOLOL!
there goes my evening LOL!
oh, I am so kidding ^_^ lol
just havin fun
be good, stay sweet ^_^

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

Shmaiku!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm bouncing up and down in my chair right now laughing!!!!!!!! It's so funny!!!!!
Ah! Okay okay poem... hmmmm you know I kinda feel like I dont need to say anything, cause we've already talked about the reason you wrote this, but... u know wut? I'm not gonna say anything, cause right now You Know Who is kind of on my bad side, even though I know why he's acting the way he is... But I liked the Shmaiku.... lol!!!!!! =D

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

Well, if your fangs aren't quite as long as Urjas (the mind boggles,Urja the Lurcher)you could always substitute the delete button.

Think of you often.
Susan

Posted: Aug 28, 2008

I loved this alice!
Who knew that three simple lines could be so brilliant!!! You're writting is so great, never stop, it will take you far;)
Steph(:

Posted: Sep 1, 2008