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XBrokenHeartedX Challenge: Lovely Lamppost

Poem By: Alice Oiseau
Poetry


XBrokenHeartedX aka Zoe's Challenge.
Focus on themes in poetry with a given object.
She gave me a lamppost... *looks over at Zoe and growls* when Angela got poison... but that's besides the point.
Here is my poem.
It's rather symbollic, so lets see if you pick up on what represents what ;) View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 14, 2008    Reads: 29    Comments: 11    Likes: 6   


Lovely Lamppost

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lamppost-copy.jpg lamppost image by marcstck

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A lamppost stands ever so lonely,

White frost blankets the black surface,

The light is dim - fading - flickering,

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A lamppost waits in the cold night,

Snowflakes plastered to it,

They sparkle when light touches them,

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But this lamppost lacks such luster,

thus it doesn't sparkle.

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Dawn breaks dusk.

A new day.

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The glorious sun rises in the east,

Sunlight caresses the lamppost ever so tenderly,

The bulb stops flickering.

It grows brighter...

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Ecstatic at the touch of sunlight,

The touch of life,

The touch of happiness,

The touch of warmth,

The touch of love...


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Comments:

Lovely poem. I liked it very much.

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you susan! ^^

Oooooh I like it!! To me the lamppost symbolizes a woman who was about to give up on love until the man who was worthy of becoming her light, her sun, her everything, came and rekindled the love in her heart. I love the symbolism that allows a reader to interpret the poem in a way that means something to them, regardless of what it means to anyone else. Very lovely, touching poem. It brought a smile to my face.

Stephanee :)

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you stephanee! you pretty much got the symbolism down :) not exact, but pretty darn close ^^ but thats a-okay b/c its how YOU interpreted and thats what matters :)
thanks again!
take care ^^

Oh Alice, This one is a definite favorite. :) The summary made me laugh by the way :) *hee hee* ( Who wants poison anyway?) lol.

I'd try and guess what the symbolism is all about, except I'm really tired and I should be going to bed *sigh* Maybe I'll guess it in the morning. That is unless someone beats me to it. (Zoe) *cough cough* :)

I'm giving this an " I liked it" vote!!!!!

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

Author Comment:

lol zoe will prolly figure it out. she's a smart cookie lol
thank you angela!
take care ^^

Very clever m'ange.
I'm really in-love with this poem of yours. :)

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

hehe :)
thank you my love ^^

Mmm...Got the symbolism too. The woman bit. Loved it....it was beautiful.

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you ^^

THIS IS TERRIBLE.

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

bite me.

u know, i'm open to constructive criticism - but slamming something and being rude is a whole different story.

!!! How rude !!! The guy who posted above me should get out more. That was completely uncalled for. Why if I wasn't a sensible girl I would say things I would most certainly NOT regret.

On another note... ( by the way I am quite appalled right now)

Your poem was amazing Alice. I agree with everyone EXCEPT that very rude guy. ( I think I'm going to be sick)

I should really stop saying how upset I am every couple of lines, shouldn't I? Lol. You're an amazing writer Alice, don't let anyone ever tell you you're not :)

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

haha thanks hon ^^ you're so sweet!
don't worry about the guy. it didn't bother me. but thank you for standing up for me ^^
thanks for the lovely comment!
take care :)

Gorgeous poem - why is "Ihatebooks2" here? Who really cares what he/she thinks in the scheme of things.
I love the way you "lit up" the lamppost in the sunlight.
I have another challenge poem up (Hilarious challenge)you may like to read "forever or never,beyond my words" ?

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

ha i dont know why he/she is here. but no worries. nocturnalmuse sent an email to booksie support b/c this person is seriously just here to insult us.
but ANYWAY
thank you anna ^^ i'm glad you liked it
i'll go check it out right now :)

Alice this was wonderful! And I gave you the hard one because I KNEW FOR SURE that you would still be able to make a fantastical poem out of it, ha ha:) And you did! I agree with the woman thing too, but when I was reading it I was kind of thinking of something different. Kind of like an abandoned or lonely child, but finally he's accepted. I guess it relates to the woman thing just with different (characters?). I thought this was really really good. You used nice words, and I loved the first stanza with the "The light is dim - fading - flickering," Just completely beautiful, and gave me the most vivid imagery of that same lamp post you were describing. I THOUGHT I gave you a good one:) He HE:) And that STUPID PERSON GOD I HATE HIM. IF HE'S GOING TO SLAM DOWN YOUR WORK THEN I WILL TRACK HIM DOWN AND BEAT HIM TO DEATH. ALICE YOU ARE SO WONDERFUL, don't let ANYBODY tell you differently. -wipes hands on pants- ok I think I'm good now:) Ha Ha once again, fabulous job! :D

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

lol thank you zoe!
don't let him get to you. he said like, what, 3 words? 1 of which was negative. "This is terrible"
"this" is simply a subject
"is" is a helping verb
and "terrible" negative adjective. SO only 1 word out of his pointless comment was negative. and it didn't even leave a scratch. don't worry my friend ^^ i'm a-okay!

haha, well i'm glad you liked how it turned out. i was pretty surprised. i was like hmm. not bad for a lamppost! lol ...though poison would have been fun. hahaha!
it could work for an abandoned child as well, there are many many different things it could work for. everyone reads in differently and that's the beauty of poetry :)
thank you so much zoe!!

hey Alice i really love this poem. I seem to say the same things about your poems, but hey its because you really r producing some wonderful stuff. These challenges seem to bring the best out of you!. When I read this I got the image of a man standing alone waiting, needing the love of a beautiful woman. Her light, her touch, almost like that of an angel brings him warmth and life. I also love the images of dark and light, they really contrast well, and your words are really tender and loving. The images and descriptions are beautifully executed. Fabulous stuff again Alice!!

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Author Comment:

hehe :) thank you matt!!
pshhh! you never say the same things about my poems. you just think you do. lol. i always appreciate what you have to say and it never is the same thing to me.

i absolutely loved the way you saw it ^^ thank you matt!

awwww, this was fantastic darlin'! hehe. every word was simple and beautiful. bravo ma belle!
Steph(:

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Author Comment:

:D thanks steph! glad you liked it ^^



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