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Bite Me, Baby

Poem By: Ama
Poetry


Another love poem to Prince Black. This one's a bit more serious than the previous poem addressed to him, and maybe a bit less optimistic. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 4, 2008    Reads: 40    Comments: 2    Likes: 1   


Look, here we are,
Dressed as Death and Princess Death,
Skeleton-white faces, our eyes too black.
We are too black.
 
And look, there’s our bond,
Two hands clutching just like roots
Of trees so old and strong,
No storm ever could tear them out.
Our tears will never fall like blood.
But oh, that is just fantasy.
 
Do they know we are in love?
Does that gleam in my black eyes
Say something of our dark secret?
That when you cast your shade on me,
I die of love. I die of lust.
And I can tell the same is on your mind.
But oh, that is just fantasy.
 
For I was watching, searching for the one,
Someone with the same expression
Of bleak reality. A mate who bears
A vampire’s heart, but lives like a child
Lost in his time.
 
Now that I have found a swan,
Black as the night and fair as snow,
I know that he will fly away
Without me.
 
Look, here I am.
Dressed as the Longing Lady’s fake,
Swimming in my dreamy thoughts,
And I wish you knew I’m in love with you.


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Comments:

Seriously, i didn't like the second verse. it similarities didn't match to me; like old and strong, tears not falling like blood... i just didn't get it.
on the other hand the third verse connected to me. to me it brought out the meat of what you were expressing. And from there i could appreciate the poem more...
very creative though :) all the best lexie.

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Hi there! Thanks for reading and commenting. I was happy when you wrote that my poem finally managed to reach you with its third verse. Maybe you're right and the second stanza is really not among my best creations. Anyway, thanks again for reading, and all the best. xx, Ama

You've got to love a good vampire poem and I think this is good. I liked the line "For I was watching, searching for the one, Someone with the same expression
Of bleak reality." You did a nice job.

Posted: Jul 12, 2008



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