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Another love poem to Prince Black. This one's a bit more serious than the previous poem addressed to him, and maybe a bit less optimistic. View table of contents...
Submitted: Jun 4, 2008 Reads: 40 Comments: 2 Likes: 1
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Seriously, i didn't like the second verse. it similarities didn't match to me; like old and strong, tears not falling like blood... i just didn't get it.
on the other hand the third verse connected to me. to me it brought out the meat of what you were expressing. And from there i could appreciate the poem more...
very creative though :) all the best lexie.
Posted: Jun 4, 2008
You've got to love a good vampire poem and I think this is good. I liked the line "For I was watching, searching for the one, Someone with the same expression
Of bleak reality." You did a nice job.
Posted: Jul 12, 2008
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