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to all those people who are in a quest to find themselves.. View table of contents...
Submitted: Mar 11, 2008 Reads: 52 Comments: 4 Likes: 3
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This was an awesome journey to read^_^! The first part caught my attention. The line, "I found on my palm," made me smile because I could just imagine that person waking up to find a map upon their palm.
I also really liked how you repeated one specific part throughout the poem, and then at the end the lark was the one who led the person to his or herself.
The whole thing was really cool-- the details, the words-- I loved the whole thing^_^!
Lot's of chocolate to you,
Ghiradelli Girl.
Posted: Mar 16, 2008
a lovely poem, i find it v. spiritual in a fairy tale kind of way. i agree totally with Ghiradelli's comments, and the repetitive parts really work
Posted: Apr 4, 2008
when i was reading it, it felt as if i was in a dream and it also felt like a fairy tale.
i like it.:)
it was well written and the descriptions was very clear. this is one of my best for u. keep it up.
...lexie
Posted: May 19, 2008
wow i really liked it. The imagies were so clear in my mind, i felt like i was lost for a second. Hope to see more and new stuff Ama---xxx
Posted: May 20, 2008
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