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Finding Myself

Poem By: Ama
Poetry


to all those people who are in a quest to find themselves.. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Mar 11, 2008    Reads: 52    Comments: 4    Likes: 3   


Awaking one day
From a witch’s charm,
I followed the map
I found on my palm.
 
The sky, it was blue,
The grass, it was green,
I had this funny feeling
That I was in a dream.
 
I met a deer, I asked:
“Who am I? Who am I?”
“Go on and try
To find yourself before you die”, he said.
But a different path he had.
 
I dived into a pond
Filled with thousands of keys,
Then I followed the song
Of the birds and the trees.
 
The colors were bright,
The shadows were cool,
But losing my way
I felt like a fool.
 
I met an owl, I asked:
“Who am I? Who am I?”
“Go on and try
To find yourself before you die”, he said.
But a different path he had.
 
Gazing at a mirror
Of frozen ice and snow,
I followed the sunlight
That in my eyes I saw.
 
At last, lonely, helpless
And tired of the game,
I arrived at a land
That was called by my name.
 
I met a lark, I asked:
“Who am I? Who am I?”
“Go on and try
To find yourself before you die”, she said.
And to my heart she led.


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Comments:

This was an awesome journey to read^_^! The first part caught my attention. The line, "I found on my palm," made me smile because I could just imagine that person waking up to find a map upon their palm.

I also really liked how you repeated one specific part throughout the poem, and then at the end the lark was the one who led the person to his or herself.

The whole thing was really cool-- the details, the words-- I loved the whole thing^_^!

Lot's of chocolate to you,

Ghiradelli Girl.

Posted: Mar 16, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks for commenting. I actually like repeating stanzas very much because I feel that it gives an emotional emphasis to the main idea of the poem. Maybe it doesn't always work, but I like to think that it does. ;-) -Ama-

a lovely poem, i find it v. spiritual in a fairy tale kind of way. i agree totally with Ghiradelli's comments, and the repetitive parts really work

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks so much. I will check out your works when I have some time. :-) -Ama-

when i was reading it, it felt as if i was in a dream and it also felt like a fairy tale.
i like it.:)
it was well written and the descriptions was very clear. this is one of my best for u. keep it up.
...lexie

Posted: May 19, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you, and I'm really happy that you liked it. This is a very personal poem, and also one of my favourites, I think. xx, Ama

wow i really liked it. The imagies were so clear in my mind, i felt like i was lost for a second. Hope to see more and new stuff Ama---xxx

Posted: May 20, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks a lot for reading. I already have some new poems in my mind. Hopefully I'll have time to publish them soon.



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