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End This War

Poem By: Amity Willows
Poetry


Tags: war, iraq, end, soldiers

This poem is my belief that war in Iraq should end. It's actually titled "End The War" but someone on here beat me to that title, so I changed "The" to "This". But that's alright. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Nov 4, 2007    Reads: 66    Comments: 9    Likes: 5   


Soldiers cries fall on deaf ears,
No one is there to hear,
They die, they fall,
They suffer through it all.

Where are we?
Not where we’re supposed to be,
Help our families and our friends,
Can’t this war ever end?

We’ve been there for to long,
Those who opt for war are so very wrong,
We sit and argue while they die,
We sit and argue while they fight.

Soldiers fall never to get up again,
They’ve lost hope, they are abandoned,
No choppers wings beat the hot air,
No reinforcements, they’ve already been there.

Crying mother bids goodbye to son,
For the last time not knowing where he’s gone,
Son left in brilliant innocence,
Simple unknowing ignorance.

How many flowers lay in the cemetery,
How many families are left lonely,
How long has this war gone on,
Don’t you think it’s time for it end?

(Copyright (©) 2007. All rights reserved)


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Comments:

Deeply moving. I can't believe you're only thirteen.

There were a couple places where the meter got thrown off with a line longer than its complements. I think you'll catch those and can clean them up if you read it aloud.

Once again, a very powerful poem.

Posted: Nov 6, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for the complements, and for the suggestions! :-)

Amity Willows:

Well written. Liked it. Powerful emotions well expressed.

Thank you for becoming my 98th fan.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: Nov 9, 2007

Author Comment:

Thanks! :-)

Ienne
(not registered user)

It's so true!

Posted: Nov 17, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for your feedback! :)

Clemmy
(not registered user)

I love this poem and it's so sad but so true.

Posted: Nov 17, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you!

I LOVE this poem!
I wrote one about the war... It is called 'Ovrestimated or Underestimated'
Anyway, I like how you used the rhyme sheme on this one, it really made it flow!

(P.S. I posted chapter Five on 'Courage Under Evil!')

Posted: Nov 17, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you so much, and I have to go read your chapter now!!

Good job. I agree :)

Posted: Nov 18, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you! :-)

You write well whatever your age. Good poem.

Posted: Dec 1, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you!

James gaggikwe
(not registered user)

A line in an old song reads: "Willow, weap for me."

May I invite you to read my:
"Requiem in a Small Town", and
"Fleets In!"

Posted: Dec 8, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you! And most certainly. :)

Very Good. I Wrote One About The War Myself Titled "Our Loved Ones". Feel Free To Check It Out.

Posted: Jul 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! And I will, sure! But I procrastinate something terrible, so don't be mad if it takes a little while.



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