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Submitted: Dec 31, 2007 Reads: 51 Comments: 3 Likes: 3
Oh How i long to here the sound of my moms beating heart how i long to have her hold me in her arms and tell me everything is going to be ok how i long to feel the warmth of her love oh how i wish she would tell me she loved me how i wish i could talk to her and not be afraid of the rejection i might recive how i long to maybe one day see her smile or to here her say she loves me or to here her say shes proud of me and glad i am her daughter oh how i long.
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I love this poem, it shows the desire a child has for a mothers love.
Very well written
Peace
Boneman
Posted: Jan 2, 2008
I donot intend to stay on this site,
but im glad i read your poem,
you sound a lot like me (with the spelling mistakes and all)
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hope ur good.
Amelie Montreal
Posted: Jan 4, 2008
I like this poem too ^_^ I liked the colours you choice for it, however, my only "criticism" would be I believe this poem would flow better if it was formatted differently, starting a new line with "how i," otherwise the reader is reading it too quickly, and the sadness lacks. I had to read it a couple of times to get the flow in my head to feel it.
Posted: Mar 8, 2008
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