I descend
I descend to the body and see
The snake of my spirit
Lodged in my belly.
I climb in a spiral,
Towards the motor of the world,
Fleeing--
Fleeing from the dizziness
Of the sea of being alone,
So alone between vices.
I climb to the latitude,
I lodge
In its arrhythmia and discover
The face of a snake
Adhered to the valves,
And I descend,
I keep descending in search
Of a reason that will give
Meaning to my existence.
I slide,
Blocking the words,
Ascending
I slip. There is water
Viscous behind the eyes,
I slip and they stick--
Images of the world stick,
Barely insinuating.
Ascending and arriving.
And there I discover
That its smooth walls,
Transparent, and empty,
Have the Fleshy
Texture of my belly.
I have lowered down to my spirit
I have risen to my instinct.
The same tense snake.
The axis that maintains
My waist raised.
The name that I shall give it
Will now be yours,
But its name is
That of those I have loved,
Those that I will love
It's all and none.
The axis that maintains
My waist raised,
It comes up from you.
It believes in my measurements
And assumes the challenge
Of being much
Of being many
That gives the impression
My spirit won't fit
Inside this body;
That this body won't fit
Inside my spirit.
That is why I die a bit,
Every time I say your name.
Without barely calling you.
I reach to define myself.
My belly is what pronounces
The secret syllables
And inscribes them above.
My existence is a sign
Of a flame
That burns eternally
In itself.
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Submitted: Jun 24, 2008 Reads: 59 Comments: 18 Likes: 11
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I found this intense but it would be presumptuous of me to say I 'understood' it. Your work belays your age.
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
I'm with secondchance, definately intense, I felt like i was in a different world, like when I'm reading a novel. once again, brilliant work!
Steph(:
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
this is intensely deep within a mind of vast proportions and infinite unlimitation-very much enjoyed...
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
I agree with the 3 above me
Intense.
I wasn't in the mood to read something long but once I started reading this I had to finish.
It was that good.
Another Awesome peice of your work
Loved it
Now I'm off to read the 5th peice that you wrote last night
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Posted: Jun 24, 2008
O_O
why are you so gosh darn good at poetry?
this is brilliant! a very intense read indeed. i need a new word b/c everyone else is using it to describe the poem -_-'
so hm. this is a very power-packed poem! :D
and it went way over my head -_- i may try disecting it later... but right now i'm not in in the zone to break it down.
anyways - i loved it :)
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
It seems like something you would hear someone tripping say but with much more elegance obviously. It reminds me of an out of body experience and the realization of who you are as a person. The machinery references were very well placed creative and just clever. Loved this one a lot keep up the good work.
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
this is intensely deep
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
Very interesting concept indeed, I can invision the snake, and it's perception, but then toward the end you pull me into another world, that is beyond me. My favorite by far.
~DarkFairy~
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
I agree with Raya, done with such brilliancy that one would think the author is much older. I don't usually read long poems, but it just gripped me and I couldn't stop reading it. Great work.
~ô¿õ~
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
well i thought this was awesome :)
tillz
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
i thought that you said they where all short this one was long but it is really good
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
Waaaaaah, now I'm really speechless.
o.O
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
Sorry, but diz one confusing,2.
Posted: Jun 27, 2008
This poem is very powerful. And i understood it greatly. I love the thought of your soul being a snake and trying to find yourself or escape. I know exactly what you mean because over the pass 2 weeks I have tried to this myself. Bravo, another excellent piece.
Megzbo-x
Posted: Jun 28, 2008
You are a very talented poet. I loved the poem.
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
Ur poems are so close to life ...no pretention...just pure poem written straight from heart and soul....
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
First of all, your work shows a maturity far beyond your age.
Secondly, this poem was amazing. Flat out awesome.
My meaning for the poem was that by feeling alone for having flaws, one internalizes the conflict and discovers that the rest of humanity is flawed in the same way, and that flawed humans are what makes humanity essentially human. Also through this one realizes that humanity and its cycle of betterment is eternal and every person, flawed as they are, has a part in the ascension of mankind.
Sorry that this was so long
And that i'm probably wrong about what you meant the poem to be. that is just what I personally took from it.
It was great.
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
hi! angela. this one tastes even better than ur earlier poems. there is maturity of thought and philosophy too finds its way. ur existence leaves a trail on this poem. well done. lol. ;-)
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
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