They have come.
They invade the heart.
They smell of thorns,
Tears,
Solitude,
But you feed the fear,
And weeping,
Like two small birds,
Abandoned in a tree.
They have come,
To set afire the age of dreams,
To bid you adieu.
But you embrace yourself,
Like a desperate man embraces himself,
Like a man should only embrace his lover,
Because there is no one else.
You cry underneath your deception.
You open up the coffin of your desires,
And become richer than the night.
But there is too much remorse,
That the words commit suicide.
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Daughters of the Moon
Poem By: AngelaSteele
Poetry
This is the translation of " Hijas de la Luna". If you haven't read it yet... It's on my profile. Or you could just read this without looking at the Spanish version. However, I don't really like the English version. View table of contents...
Submitted: Jun 12, 2008 Reads: 67 Comments: 21 Likes: 7
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Danggg..I can't belive you managed writing this in english let alone spanish! Btw, what spanish level are you in? o.O Like 1, 2, 3, etc? o.O
Posted: Jun 12, 2008
You amaze me my friend. ^^
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
It 'sounds' wonderful as I can read it in Spanish but to actually understand it all, I must read it in English!! Somehow, I think that many pieces lose their true flavor when translaterd so I understand that you prefer it in Spanish!
Nice work, Angela! And I love the title!!
Peace and happiness.....Jerry
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
HA HA ok this one was better. So *sigh* I was terribly wrong by guessing what it means. Goes to show why I'm so horrible at spanish. But you're in high school right? I guess that cuts me a break:) Heehee:) But this was really beautiful! The idea was just really really...gah no words! It's 6:30 am and I'm already having commenters block. But I really loved this poem Angela. It was intense in a kind of deep, night time way. The words you used were marvelous! Another great job, this is definitely a favorite of yours:)
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
Wow this was really good, lol I wish I could understand Spanish...!
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
this is really good i like it keep up the good work
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
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WOW! Well I loved it!!
Like totally.
I got absolutely no where with the spanish version.
But it looked really awesome! lol.
Anywayy fantastic job.. XD
~!~Megan~!~
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
Im with u, i like the spanish version better. it soundz sssoooo peaceful, but the english one...
*Speech lesslook*
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
Its well written, original, i couldn't read the spanish poem even though ive learn't spanish for three years!!
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
oh now i understand.it's really good.
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
amazing poem i loved it
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
LOVELY READ.....AMAZING BUDDY.....
Posted: Jun 13, 2008
Hey I like it, I tried reading the Spanish version, recognised a few words as my dad speaks Spanish but I saved myself the trouble and read this instead, ha! It's awesome, totally loved it! ~ Nixie
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
Angie!!!!! this poem was great. I liked it better in spanish though. And the last line was priceless by the way. Excellently done!!
Posted: Jun 15, 2008
haha i can actually understand it! lol
gosh i loved it. you never cease to amaze me angela! you are sooo talented!!! dont ever stop writing :)
very lovely poem
the last two lines were brilliant!
Posted: Jun 15, 2008
Now that I can actually understand it, I LOVE IT! Flowed very well, and showed much emotion. Gave a eally good visual, too. I could just picture the whole thing in my mind. Very beautiful poem. =]
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
Sorry i took so long,
But the very last line is my favorite!
Very nice personification!
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
aww, I love that "daughters of the moon" it was a lovely poem!
STeph(:
Posted: Jun 22, 2008
this is beautifully written and luv it...
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
amazing!!!
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
Daughters of moon....don't know how many times i have to read this to quench my love for ur writing...such flawless poems....the snap complements the poem....
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
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