I will make myself a drink of fire--
Fire from the deeps of Hell and crimson flames,
Large fires shooting yellows and oranges,
Hot, burning, red Fire.
I will capture them from the bowels of the earth,
And inhale the warm derision of my Sweetheart into my soul,
So that later my drink shall be bubbled with heat.
It will burn and scratch
As I swallow it all down;
And I shall feel it's demonic presence,
Twisting and withering in my stomach.
His screams will send havoc up to my head,
And I shall be fiery, and sneer,
Diminishing any memory indicating,
I have ever known such a man.
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Fiery Drink
Poem By: AngelaSteele
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Submitted: Jun 7, 2008 Reads: 53 Comments: 14 Likes: 5
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all right - i read both of them before commenting. i'll have to go back and comment the first one though.
this one was my favorite of the two, and i think this is the one you prefer as well! i thought it was more creative and also just this poem delivered this power-packed punch whereas the other one didn't really have that feel to it. this one seemed to have more of a natural flow to it whereas the first one, parts of it seemed a bit forced out, you know what i mean?
anyways
this was great!! and very different from what i've read so 5 stars for being different! very creative and i want to say beautifully written... but i dont think 'beautiful' suits this poem. i think its more 'spicy' - with that being said - spice-ifully written! haha XD
keep up the great writing angela ^^
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
wow! very vivd!! good job!
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
Ok just to start off, I LOVED the picture. With the cold and hot...wow I was just like OMG. Ha Ha and it goes perfectly along with your poem. And Angela, your word choice! Just absolutely marvelous! Where you placed them and everything...it was smooth and beautiful. I really liked this poem; one of my favorites. FABULOUS job, update me when you post more:D
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
God my brain is having lapses today. How could I forget? The imagery was marvelous! Very very vivid, like I was there standing in the flames. I could feel the heat...god this was just so great!
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
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Wowza!!! Lol. I am so totally in love with this poem. The imagery is like.. totally fantastic. And it had this darkness to it that I totally love. And just wow. I really suck at commenting on your poetry because your so good at it and most the time I'm just in awe and can't say anything other than I LOVE IT and WOW! but thats just credit to you as a poet I guess. Lol. Fantastic Job! Now I'm off to read the other one. ^-^
~!~Megan~!~
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
i like this one but i have to read the other poem and i will tell you on that comment which one i think is the best:}
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
The person has so much bitterness deep down inside....lol.....
It would have sapped all ur energy to write such a powerful poem...right??
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
wow.
again, your words are breath taking and powerful, I've never seen such a powerful side of you! Fantastic Angela, you are completely brilliant!
Steph:)
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
WWWWWWWWWHHHHHHHOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAA!!!!
Datz something.
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
I like this, the drink almost sounds like a metaphor for love "inhale the warm derision of my Sweetheart into my soul, So that later my drink shall be bubbled with heat" this is the part that stuck out as the best example of that. I totally loved it, great job! ~ Nixie
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
hey did u get that pic from RMD? i think i saw it there... maybe not. idk. anyways, great poem! i like how u captured the fire+water
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
Oh my Angie! Who is this guy that you're trying to get rid of? This poem just shouted to me. Are you over him yet? Well anyway... I'm going to leave this page before you decide to kill me too. Lol. Nice job!
Posted: Jun 15, 2008
Um. IT'S POINTLESS TO SAY ANYTHING CAUSE EVERYONE PRETTY MUCH SAID EVERYTHING I COULD SAY. *calms down* Hmmp. Whatev. I totally adore your word choices. Where you place them. How you make them fit with one another. The manner, words from your poem stench anger. How I can feel the narrator's anger. How, for some reasons out of no where, I loath this guy too.
Perfect poem.
Posted: Jun 22, 2008
to get such a man out of life...one has to have a fiery drink....thank Goodness...better late than never...
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
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