Laughter--
Laughter echoing,
Bouncing off the unbounded walls.
But where is the sound coming from?
I can hear them, stentorian and lucid,
Though after an ephemeral while,
They begin to fade.
I run towards where I believe,
The laughs emerge,
But fruitlessly
Encounter more walls.
There!
There I can discern them,
Behind the wall.
I strike continuously,
Against the hard granite,
I crack a few knuckles,
My hands start to bleed,
And still I proceed.
Tears cascade from my eyes
As I yell in despondency:
" I'm here"
" I'm here!"
Blood surges to my head,
My knees grow decrepit;
I collapse.
Darkness invades the light,
I become blind,
I cannot Taste
Hear,
Smell,
Feel.
Still, no one can hear me,
Therefore no one comes.
My breathing grows rapid,
But then it slows...
Gingerly.
I am moribund.
My fears become a reality,
My dreams recede from view.
I am forsaken with my solitude,
In this doleful state.
Was everything I once knew...
A lie?
Your words of promise...
False?
I cannot believe I confided in you.
I am revolted,
Anguished,
Petrified,
Of what I've become:
An execrable zombie.
And here I am now,
Gasping for air in this macabre white room.
My body is desensitized,
I lay on the floor and,
All I can do is scream in my death throes...
" I'm here."
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Poem By: AngelaSteele
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A man might pass for insane who should see things as they are. ~William Ellery Channing
The statistics on sanity are that one out of every four Americans is suffering from some form of mental illness. Think of your three best friends. If they're okay, then it's you. ~Rita Mae Brown
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nice poem.I like it.
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
Angie... Guess what? Next time I see you... I'ma punch you ten times!!! You are incredibly talented and I just have to add that I AM INCREDIBLY JEALOUS! :)
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
Really good! I liked it :)
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
Wow, very powerful! Really made me think. Very good poem. ^^
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
Sweet! You have a remarkable insight. Sanity/insanity is very personal and boundaries are blurred at the best of times.
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
This padded room is fit for two me and the man inside my head his name it's Brian too. Solitude is an interesting daemon to cope with. In reference to the walls unbroken I loved the way you had voices on the other side being friendship or love I am not sure how you intend it but the inability to reach them no matter how much the effort. The greatest giving are sometimes overlooked in life. Such a kind person may not know friendship or love and if they do this person would be most likely to be taken advantage of. I enjoyed this greatly.
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
angela, my jaw literally dropped when i read that last line. the way the poem built up - adding to the intensity and then building up to the climax - then it hits and i was completely knocked off my feet. this was brilliant. you have written an awesome poem here! and i could see it as this crazy person who hasn't slept for days narrating it off the top of their head as they pace back and forth, rocking a bit to themselves. oo kinda gives me chills. lol
this is amazing :)
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
Sweet! This is REALLY good! AWESOME, AWESOME, AWESOME-NESS!!!! You really captured the essence of insanity. GREAT JOB!!!! YAY!
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
ANGIE, honey...with this poem u have touched the soul of all of us....
we all need to understand this buddy....the sooner the better for all of us....
what have we become ?
More of a zombie than a human?....
And this poem reminds me to think over and over again....as to why the hell am i tensed and snap at poor kriish??
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
Well, first off, your poem uses the words "decrepit" and "moribund" so that in itself is awesome.
I know what it feels like to be in this situation (I've had many mental illnesses {imperfections} in the past few years sadly..) and I really feel for the narrator. You expressed the loneliness and utter despair well. I hope all of you future poems are as personal as this!
Regan
Posted: Jul 2, 2008
I know what you mean about mental illness. My family has battled it. I have battled it and still do, but your poem was tremendous. I could almost myself lying helpless on the floor.
Posted: Jul 2, 2008
hi! angela. that statistics about mental patients is revealing. no wonder, u wrote a poem on such a sensitive subject. even having them in our midst, doesn't make us realise their agony. and u've brought this out very well. wish, there was a finite solution to it. keep it up. lol. ;-)
Posted: Jul 2, 2008
well of course i like it.
i say it all the time but its true!
tillz
Posted: Jul 2, 2008
11 "i like it" iz going 2 12 cauze i do,2. I can REALLY relate 2 diz cauze out of my 3 friendz, 1 of them do have something.
Posted: Jul 2, 2008
That was awesome. Probably one of the best things I've read in a long time. IT WAS SO GOOD!
Posted: Jul 2, 2008
Very enjoyable. I was struck by one poem that I tried to write that was about the 'walls' inside everyones head and breaking them down. Although yours appears to have a setting in an asylem, the overall outlook is very similar - apart from yours being much better and actually readable!
Just wondering about the last line though. Would the poem have more impact without those words leaving the reader wondering what you were screaming?
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
wow theres some really strong imagery here. You've used words really well.
Megzbo-x
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
Wow. Talk about strong imagery.
Thats amazing.
Keep it up!
~!~Megan~!~
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
Wow...Awesome!
A very powerful and gripping poem.
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
Good one about struggle and even so about endurance. I loved this one.
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
This is a nice poem, such effect it has while reading it. Great job!!
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
Ur so talented! This one makes u think! I like it a lot! It leaves a awsome after effect! Soooo cool!!!
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
oh yeah this is greatness...
Posted: Oct 6, 2008
This poem made me speechless .. seriously.
I love the last line + the climax you build up to get there, i also love the shortness of each line, maybe to show the state of his mind ? not being able to focus on one thing for a certain amount of time ? Well that's how i viewed it, but whatever it is, it is amazing! As are all your poems :)
A very Well done!
Posted: Oct 19, 2008
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