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Sweet Evil

Poem By: AngelaSteele
Poetry


Tags: sweet, evil

From the point of view, of a man returning from war. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 13, 2008    Reads: 43    Comments: 10    Likes: 4   


I turn my hateful eyes to my own history.
Dreams, more dreams and more dreams... glory,
More glory...Hate... a fleeing nightingale...
And I looked onto her but could not see
Not a characteristic, not even an outline, nor a footprint
Of that sweet evil that I am dying with.

I turn to look at the stretched road in front of me...
I march as if I were a soldier,
With victorious stride, to all roar;
And still in nothing lies the shadow
Of that sweet evil that I am dying with.

A summit appears in front of me;
Many sought to crown her but could not;
Only I remained on top, smiling,
And there, she yelled, strong and loud
And still I could not even feel the sting
Of that sweet evil I am dying with.

I returned to look onto the most beautiful...... decline...
Thousand brave men forfeited to shame
Yet, I was the victor of that great evil;
I was Glory, proud and vespertine,
Without foreseeing the clandestine march
Of the sweet evil I am dying with.

Forces and Powers situated me
And test by test, cornered my faith
Still, she did not change nor sell it,
And I saw them march with her spite
Happy, and without noticing anything in my chest
Of that sweet evil I am dying with.

Women... for my glory and my fights
In many places many gave themselves to me
And in many places I slept, wanting
And in the morning another love followed,
But nowhere did I detect the dart
Of that sweet evil I am dying with.

Then one day there was a clumsy circumstance,
When we stayed alone
Reading together, without actually reading,
Looking each other in the eye, without malice,
And remained later with only delight and no sign
Of that sweet evil I am dying with.


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Comments:

very interesting

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol. Those two words are going to leave me in doubt, I'm afraid. For they could have double a meaning. Thanks so much for reading, your comment however I can not quite say... Nevertheless I do appreciate the it. Thanks again :)

same thing wat rat said. (But i have no clue wat she meant, by it)
It had alot of emotionz, depressing and happiness.

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

It's one of those poems that takes more than one read to understand what it means. Thanks so much for reading, I really appreciate it.

...
I've never really been one for war poems..
But I honestly liked this one. ^-^
It had a lot of emotion to it.
I had to read it like twice to figure it all out.. LOL
But still.. amazing.
Nice work. As always. XD

~!~Megan~!~

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much :) I really, really appreciate it!

when i say it is very interesting i mean i like it and it kind of confuses me to wright a word to dicribe it so please dont think i ment i didnt like it because i did i was just confused

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

No, of course I didn't think that :) I was just confused myself about what it was you meant. Thank you so much, I really do appreciate it.

Angie you are so confusing. I loved it though. It actually has potential. Maybe I'll go over to your house and help you revise it. LOl. I'm joking. It's perfect. :)

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Am not!! You are confusing with your long complicated words. *sticks tongue out at you* Thanks for commenting :)

war changes man. *sighs* makes me think of the war in iraq...
anyway
this was wonderfully written and - wow - i love the contrast you made with "sweet" and "evil". that was incredible.
fabulous writing! keep it up :)

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Ha. Thanks Alice. I really appreciate it :)

I thought this poem while extremely different from your usaul style. It is still an exceptional piece of poetry. I loved it alot. Hehehe...i love to use big words this exceptional...

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

It was very different. I like to maintain a consistent writing style, but sometimes it's fun to experiment. I liked this style, but I don't think It's my best. So , thanks so much for commenting :)

hmmm, sweet evil, the title says it all!

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol. Thanks so much :)

repairman1946
(not registered user)

Hi Angela,
Well I guess that I will surprise you, because I like this poem.
Gary

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol. Thanks so much. I really appreciate it :)

I thought it was great!

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much. I really appreciate it :)



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