And what if I want you open?
Like the impossible center of a transparent world,
If I love you more, than just having you in my arms
Or the aurora that extends a dream in the darkness,
More open than the wind, much more loving,
It will be because tomorrow it will want us infinite,
United like snow about to become water.
That is why I let my memory resonate,
All those words made of string that get tangled,
In your mouth or in mine.
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What if I want you open?
Poem By: AngelaSteele
Poetry
*phew* Last poem I wrote yesterday at night... :) View table of contents...
Submitted: Jun 24, 2008 Reads: 78 Comments: 24 Likes: 12
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Very good, a competent piece of work.
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
awww, this was sooooo cute angela. holay crap you're on a roll today;) hahaha. keep it up!!!
Steph(:
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
amazing.
as per usual.
Loved it
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Posted: Jun 24, 2008
excellent!! ô¿õ
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
i think this one is my favorite out of the 5 that you wrote. this was very beautiful :)
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
awww, this was sooooo cute.i think this one is my favorite out of the 5 that you wrote. this was very beautiful :)
keep it up!!!
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
Look at you getting inside my thoughts, that's exactly how I want my relationship with my boyfriend to be, we are open, but there is a depth I want to reach and haven't. Excellent!
~DarkFairy~
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
this was so beautiful!!!
but i guess the ending was a little abrupt.......
but still it was fabulous!
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
awwww cute.....
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
love it
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
I liked your story. Also, how do I get the music on my page to play? I have it, iit just won't play! Write a response in one of my stories plz.
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
Yay! Last poem for me to read today. Darn you for being so good at poetry. :d No, not really, I'm very delighted to read your poems. It makes me feel like, I have to strive better, better so I could at least be a few levels behind you...But yes, very good poem. The ending came to rapid, but that doesn't diminish the quality of the poem. =]
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
mmm, when i first read the title, i thought it was gruesome. guess i thought wrong!!
But the poem quickly took me by surprise!! Brilliant!
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
HIYA, Angela,...this one reminded me of our dating days....( mine and my hubby's).....life was just like this....
VERY VERY CUTE poem....JUST AS U R
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
Aww, this is just lovely. I'm quite inspired. ~ Nixie
Posted: Jun 26, 2008
Romance and cuteness.
(If dat isnt it, my bad.)
Posted: Jun 27, 2008
This isn't one of my favorites but I still loved it. Why do you have to be so dam talented! I am loving the romance in this poem.
But I still hate you for being such a good writer!
Megzbo-x
p.s. Only kidding about hating you! :-]
Posted: Jun 28, 2008
hi! angela. i get the feeling of a deep relationship but then again with "united like snow about to become water" it seems like slippery and thin. whatever it may be, the poem is twosome.
well done. lol. ;-)
Posted: Jun 29, 2008
I am not sure what to say but I most definitely know I liked it.
Posted: Jun 30, 2008
Beautiful poem, Angela. I am sorry it took so long to check out your work. Forgive me, please?
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
Oh, that was short. Could have been much better if it were a bit longer. Well, that's what I thought. Nonetheless, it was still beautifully written! ^^
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
Awww...That was really sweet and good. I really liked it. Could you read some of my writing and tell me what you think?
Posted: Jul 17, 2008
Excellent! I loved this!!!
Posted: Jul 18, 2008
really good. I like your poetry a lot!
Posted: Jul 27, 2008
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