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A broken heart's battle

Poem By: AngelofTheNight
Poetry


Well, this poem is about someone whos heart is broken. Just read it lol. I don't think it's great, but I wrote it in class when I was bored. xD View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 23, 2008    Reads: 41    Comments: 5    Likes: 1   


Secluded with my own mind

No one hears my voice

I stop and stare and look behind

I'm left without a choice

Emptiness fills this black hole

That you scaped into my lonely soul

I can't forgive and I can't forget

I was torn apart since the day you left

Stuck with my own thoughts

There's no way out

I'm screaming out loud

But I make no sound

I put up walls to stay away

Just go away!

I'm here alone, crying all day

All that's left is moving fast,

I'm too slow, still with my past

Although these memories

Haunt my mind and get the worst of me

They swallow me into this misery

A broken heart which they can't see

I won't let you win this fight

I'll try my best cuz I know I'm right

All alone in this dark hole

A glimpse of light parades my soul

I'll use this moment to reach out far

I'm grabbing the light

Wishing on a star

I may lose the battle - but not the war

This is my strength - not my weakness

No matter what I'm going to beat this


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Comments:

Like having a bowling ball bouncing around in your head.

Posted: Apr 23, 2008

Author Comment:

o.O... okay..lol. Thanks for reading.

Love the word choice. Great flow and feel, as always. My only sugestion; apastrophize heart's, 'cause it's possesive.

Posted: Apr 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you ^^

the gist of the poem, "we all are lonely within" is so simple, yet so powerful. superb. :-)

Posted: Apr 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks :)

wow that was my second poem i read by you and i am impressed. it's like you know the exact right words to use where. then it all comes together. you have wonderful voice.
Lydia_xxxx

Posted: May 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much :D

dis sounds like a rap, if you say it fast. dis poem is good. tbh (2 be honest) dis isnt one of those poems dat i can rate highly, i give it a 6 out of 10. but hey, its my pov.

Posted: May 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Yeah, I was thinking of it as a kinda rap when I was writing it lol. And yes, it is your pov, thank you for reading and commenting! ^_^



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