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Suicide :O

Poem By: AngelofTheNight
Poetry


Uhm. This was a poem I wrote when my best friend told me he wanted to give up and get off life's ride. I got really upset and thought I'd write a poem about it. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 21, 2008    Reads: 60    Comments: 8    Likes: 5   


Thoughts of you run through my head

I'm worried, sad and I can't forget,

Those words you spoke to me that night,

Filled me with confusion and fright,

Thinking I would lose you from my heart,

You'll be gone, I'll be ripped apart,

Knowing there is no one here,

That I could trust with my dreams and fears,

That smile that drowned you in my thoughts,

That love that attached you to my heart,

I want to hold you by my side,

But your thoughts are filled with suicide,

I want to reassure you, It will be okay

But you move away further within each day,

I try to reach out but you won't grab my hand,

The more I try, you just don't understand!

I love you and I won't let go,

I'll catch you and I'll be your hero,

I'll save you from your pain and sorrow,

I'll grab your hand and touch your heart,

And promise we will never part.


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Comments:

hey awesome poem i felt i was reading it by a actual author!!! Good luck you could get that thing published!

if i were a publisher i'd be sure to get that published!

Posted: Apr 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much! I hope I will get it published some day. That means alot :) and thanks again for reading. I appreciate it ^^

The loose rhymes and soft flow give it a comforting feeling, that coupled with the power and emotions behind the words make it quite a read. I mostly agree with iceyfrost, except, of course, I have better grammer.

Posted: Apr 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks again, and I agree that you have better grammer, haha. I appreciate that you read my poems and I'm very glad you commented aswell. Thank you.

Wonderful poem. It had so much emotion packed into such a small poem. It was so meaningful. I agree with the others, you should get it published, it's beautiful and something that most people don't see. The emotions in that poem are real tangible items and you created them in a way that is so beautiful and understanding.
~Kaori

Posted: Apr 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much. :D

that was great most people lose the point of the poem when they rhythm, but that was terrific. i enjoyed it and will read more of you.
Lydia_xxxx

Posted: May 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, I appreciate it. :)

when i read the title i, i thought i was gonna have to leave another whole comment then this one. i hope your friend read this and wont commit it because he knows that you'll be sad and heart brocken.

Posted: May 23, 2008

Author Comment:

My friend did read this actually, and after some rough times, I helped him get through it and he's better now. I'm very happy you understood the poem. I wonder what you thought you were going to comment... hmmm.

I agree with ICEY and KAORI that must get all ur poems published. They have got emotions...grammer etc can be corrected but 'genuine' feelings portrayed in ur poems are mind blowing......

u continue writing with this honesty and one day u will be touching the stars.....

GOD bless you honey

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Awwwwwww, Pratibha you are so sweet. Thank you so much for your lovely comments, I hope one day I will be touching the stars haha. Thanks you for your support, GOD bless you too :)

This is grrrrreeeeaaaaattt.I hope that your friend changed their mind cause like most of us you'd be heart broken...

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank youuuu, he did change his mind but we are distant now lol. Oh well :) Thank you for reading and commenting!!

That's Very Sad. Be There For Your Friend Every Chance You Get. I Wish I Would've Been There More For My Brother. I Lost Him To Suicide. I Wrote Some Poems About Him In Memory Of Him. Feel Free To Check Them Out If You Want.

Posted: Jul 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh wow, I'm so sorry for your loss.. Suicide is horrible when it gets in.. I am glad my friend is better though.. I will check out your poems :)



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