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EBONY EXOTICA

Poem By: Anna Therese
Poetry


This is a poem I wrote for an Australian poetry competition - the poem had to be no more than 20 lines and include the line "I couldn't believe my luck" - well no luck with a prize for this but it is very topical - I hope you might enjoy! View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 30, 2008    Reads: 66    Comments: 7    Likes: 7   


No excitement in my lonely life, seduced by the internet
A sensual pen-name “Ebony Exotica” slips out so easy
Brief hesitation (will I? won’t I? nothing to lose) send.
I couldn’t believe my luck, replies almost instant
I have tapped into the world’s lonely hearts club
People want to know me, hear about me, maybe love me?
 *************************
After sifting through reply riff-raff, there on screen,
Someone I can get to know, someone to complete me
So compatible, so perfect, I couldn’t believe my luck
“Ebony Exotica you are my kind of gal
I love drives in the country and picnics on the beach
Sipping wine on the patio, long star-lit nights,
Dylan and Wings and sweet Blue Moon roses
I am fun loving and kind-hearted, your kind of guy”
 **************************
Back and forth go our emails, filling days and nights
“Dylan Delicious” soothes me with his soft words
Agrees with me, feels with me, “I love you” slips out so easy
No reservations, no hesitations, send.
I couldn’t believe my luck, “We should meet dearest Ebony
You name the place, I’ll bring sweet Blue Moon roses.”
 ***************************
I await the (hopeful) true love of my life with trepidation
Relationship reality may be different than Internet fantasy
So may he be? I spy the blue roses, he is shorter, thicker
His eyes are not gentle, they linger too long on my breasts
He was at least twenty years older than his photo – hallelujah!
I couldn’t believe my luck, his lie about his age gave me an out.


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Comments:

er I think it must have been 25 lines!!??

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

Well, I've done internet meeting/dating and IT ROYALLY SUCKS Anna Therese! Big time! Many many liars in the world. Why lie? Why? It's almost like a begging playground. And so, with this poetry of yours, you've nailed it on the head. ABsolutely. There is also a chemistry that is found "on line" that quickly withers away in reality. That was a fun summer, if only for the sheer grasp on shallow-ness. I moved on quickly.

Also, I dreamt last nite that you came to Canada and we met. There was a fire in a house and we watched and you said "so this is Canada". I laughed, funny, I have no clue what you look like! Ha! But, it was definitely you and we took pictures. It was all odd AT. You brought a friend with you that had long brunette hair. We ate chocolate. *weird*

Ok? Ok. Great poetry for someone who hasn't experienced the reality, good job AT.

Posted: Jul 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Ha ha! Love your dream! Chocolate sounds right! A friend with long brunette hair? Might be my youngest sons girlfriend but we are hardly "friends" yet. thinking, thinking... Interesting you had an internet dating experience? I don't even chat on - line (other than booksie and my old support group)but not really chatting as such. Thanks CP. (Was I tall, solid - but hide it well because I am tall, brunette but slightly greying hair, thick with a bit of a "kink", hazel green eyes - best feature - nice skin for an oldie not too many wrinkles, kind face, quiet voice?? Wearing trousers to hide horrid legs?)

ha, a very funny poem. I can't believe you never won the competition? Even so, it's still a great poem

Posted: Jul 31, 2008

Author Comment:

This is one of two I submitted - I will publish the other more serious one soon. Who knows what judges look for in a poem? Alas, I can't go to the announcement and readings of the winning poems tomorrow because football is more importnat!

Very nice, Anna. Never tried Internet Dating...I lucked out, big time, prior to going on the Internet. I have met a few good people along the way however. I worry about the younger generation though. The Internet a good thing for a lot of reasons, but I still feel that it is a Pandora's Box. Well anyways, very nice poem, great job and Take Care, Ted

Posted: Aug 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Good on you Ted for reading and comment. I agree with the Pandora's box!

Hahahaha, its good Anna.
~katie

Posted: Aug 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Katie! A bit of tongue in cheek, looking forward to getting a copy of the winning poems for this comp. to compare how others tackled it.

This poem could only have been written in the 21st century, possibly late 20th. A modernist in mind, a romantic at heart. Why not?

Posted: Aug 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Alquimista thanks for your comment - after seeing the judge's report today on the poetry competition I have decided this one of mine is woefully inadequate!!! (though mind you I haven't seen the winning poems yet, but the judge did include some phrases from other poems he liked and alas Ebony was deemed too "ordinary" - didn't feature at all (nor my other poem!) - not the least bit exotic as I imagined!!!!!!!!)

As usual, this one is nothing but STRAIGHT FORWARD and no beating about the bush....

YES HONEY, i agree with CLASSY word by word....U have excelled in bringing out the essence of IT acquaintance....

I must say , i am lucky to be here and get so many friends who stood by me when i am down....

I take this opportunity to THANK all of them....

Posted: Aug 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much Pratibha, no beating about the bush, just a little "ballad" about today's world. Internet can bring some friendships as well. You are one such genuine person.



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